All Comments on 'On Reihman Road'

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AngelineAngelineabout 15 years ago
Nice job!

Your work with rhyme and form continues to impress. This one works very well, I think, with the illustration. And while the poem is certainly supported by it, I think it can also stand on its own (which to my mind is the mark of a successful illustrated poem). A few tiny nits: I'd take out "the" and just say "now townhomes ...." which sounds rhythmically more consistent to me. And that next to last line might benefit from some fiddling. There's a lot going on thematically to me, kind of a quixotic poem but we all feel sort of quixotic about ever-creeping development and the loss of old farms, don't we? Yknow you could write a terrific childrens' book with these kind of poems. :-)

UnderYourSpellUnderYourSpellabout 15 years ago
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This is a read over and over again poem and I really enjoyed it.

EroticOrogenyEroticOrogenyabout 15 years ago
image and poem work together well

Another sign of the times. I used to see fields with horses and cows on my way home - now all built up.

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