All Comments on 'Going Green'

You have a lock on '09. As erotic as I've read and very well written.

This is definitely going to get one of the top spots. Great storyline with very hot sex.

in the contest.

Absolutely fantabulous word-gasm!!!! Keep on reject our reality baby because your freaky fantasies are a girls wet dream.

I thought that you could not improve on your previous brilliant stories,but I was wrong.

Good luck in the contest...I don't know about a lock though. A8

That. Was. Hottt.

This was a great story. (I'm married to a geek. Smart is sexy!) The only thing I would have changed was at the end of the story, you could have had them drinking from a glass of water instead of a bottle. Bottles are not so earth friendly.

Nice idea; nice story. I enjoy your writing -- particularly the lack of annoying typos and so forth. Good descriptions. Thanks.

Loved your story. Great writing with suspense, hot sex and real characters wou are loving. Please write more!

On behalf of my fellow geeks, thank you. Oh, and don't worry about length; you're good. As long as you keep up your excellent style, going long just makes it more enjoyable. And did I mention the quality of your writing, not to mention spelling: very good. It's what gets you the many 5s.

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One spelling issue: In the sentence "Oh god, I'm defiantly not complaining.", I suspect that you meant "definitely", not "defiantly", as in "for sure" vs. "I'll fight you if you argue". Although you might mean the latter! ;-) I mention this because you have used this word in several stories.

To the earlier comment: This one was written before I had an editor. Or rather, it was written before I started passing the stories in this name on to the editor who worked with me in my other two pen names.

There are quite a few of my earlier stories that will have - shall we say - questionable grammar. Most of it will likely be real words used improperly, because everything was run through multiple passes of spell-checking, but they will be there.

Of course, one of my most recent, which went through the full editing gamut still escaped with a character's name changing halfway through the story. LOL

I'll try to remember to put in an edit to fix this one when I have some down time. Glad you enjoyed it :)

I think you may be a erotic writing savant. I thuroughly enjoyed this as well as other stories yiu have produced. I applaud your use of editors as I bennefitted greatly in graduate school from a good editor. Keep up the great work.