by hypnopup
The lack of capitalization in certain parts of the dialogue is intentional. I used it to try and further convey the girl's loss of self during those periods. It was not because of unintentional poor grammar.
This is a really good story, I hope you have some more Ideas, and will continue with another episode.
I know this will sound weird but I've been looking for a story like this, it's incredible! Keep it up!
... Hypnopup, you've managed to produce a hero with the means to control two beautiful women and a villain, without being a total bastard. What a shame you abandoned this story. I think, I will try and write a sequel, it is just too intriguing. Hope you don't mind, The Panther Fan.
P.S. Hypnopup, if you wish to respond, please do so in the "comments" section of this story.
I'm totally okay with unofficial sequels to this story. I know someone who has already done so with permission.
I always intended this to be a one off story, never thought about a sequel.
Still meaning to finish up my "Chemical concocktion" story, I have written a couple follow ups in the past, but neither turned out good enough to post.