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Letter to a Fallen Evangelist

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by bflagsst04/11/09

very good

only criticism, some places you make it a little too cryptic, when saying it simply would work better. But it's probably just minor changes to line phrasing and punctuation. This I'll probably re-read a few more times, there's one bit I don't think you intended that actually works really well.

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by softsmile04/10/11

The Battle of Bakersfield

...we may never know how many were lost.

Wonderfully written.

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