All Comments on 'My Best Friend's Daughter Ch. 01'

That was a nice start for the series. I can hardly wait to see what how you continue the story with Kyle and Stephanie in the next chapter.

A few comments. Where in the world did the silk robe come from? How can she be so lucid after passing out only five minutes earlier? Drag it a out a bit more and develop the scenes, the first ones were nicely done, you began rushing after that. Use spell check, maerial, material perhaps.

I agree with the comments by Nicely Done. It was a good start. You did have less grammer errors than most writers.

I once heard a comment by a published author, which makes a

lot of sense and that was "to let the story sit for a day or

two, then read it for small errors."

Forget about what all the others have said about your story, if they don't like it then they should stop and read another story.!! Myself I thought it was a good build up to a very romantic story in the next chapters and you got a 5 and a 100 from me. I read to enjoy the story and not nit-pic.!!! Thanks. JAG/TSO

To those who have sent/written comments so far, thank you. The silk robe thing actually is explained in part two so I could see how it got confusing in this part. As for the scotch at the coffee place problem.. you are right I did forget the scene change. Thanks for reading and commenting. I do appreciate it.

Love it so far! Now i'll nitpick a bit, she was dressed when he left her snd he went straight to lie down a jack off, then she shows up undressed and in a silk robe? That was fast! Is a silk robe standard guest room fare? (Well if I was single it might be, hehe;). Just picking for fun!

Looking forward to future chapters!