All Comments on 'A Daemon's Heart Ch. 10'

i love this story but not sure how i like the time jump. i can not wait to see how the characters have developed. good luck with the finals

Looking forward to the next chapter. Keep up the good work.

Good luck with your finals. Will look forward to the next chapter. I'm really enjoying this story.

I hope that you have passed most of your finals.I am also looking forward to the next chapters of this story. I hope that you have some fun along the way.

Im sure you dont read comments anymore.I wonder why you stopped writing on this site.if you just stopped writing its a great waste of talent .I know this isent the real world but i love to escape into my dreams.thank you for this an old dreamer

The plot remains good, but the constant shift in style makes it a bit inconsistent. I will say that this style and voice to be the one best suited for you. I understand your press on time, but this chapter seemed to jump around quite a bit without maintaining a flow. The sudden change in voice and style as well as the jump in time make it seem like this is the start of the story, and the previous chapters have just been one unusually long prologue. You have a lot of creativity and some great ideas, but they could really use some more fleshing out. I understand the need to keep the story going for your audience, but don't be afraid to make them wait so you can give your story the time and attention it deserves. It will be worth it on both sides!