There's potential for a great story here but the punctuation and syntax needs a lot of polish. I like the premise and I'd like to see how this story continues.
why is there no continuation ? You write excellent, keep on doing this
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There's potential for a great story here but the punctuation and syntax needs a lot of polish. I like the premise and I'd like to see how this story continues.
good story
why is there no continuation ?
You write excellent, keep on doing this
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