All Comments on 'Vanessa'

Very well-written and very hot! Thanks.

Raw sensual lust among friends fulfilled beautifully. Very hot!!!

The sex was well described. However, it was hard to care, since the four characters are cardboard cutouts, not people. The only thing we know about them is that they know each other.

If you fill them out more as people, and not just sex partners, they will become more interesting, and so will your story.