All Comments on 'On the Beach'

Another stunning show of words from you. The words fairly drip off my mind and tongue. I so enjoy your work. This poem was mentioned on the poetry review thread if you want to come by. Thank you for sharing!

you can always make your own phrasing in a block of text, I think this poem is missing some key images. I didn't understand the 'white', all I got was people rolling around on a beach with funnel cakes.

Deep fried indeed!