All Comments on 'Magpies'

had they bothered to hang around, perhaps you might have read to them!

I really like the poem and especially this line: I fed the birds on honeyed bread.

You don't have to show us where the breaks/breaths/pauses are with so many commas. The beat is already in the poem, just about anyone who's ever read a poem can figure out the phrasing cuz you write well. When someone can't figure out the phrasing in form it means the syllable count and stresses are off, has very little to do with punctuation. Less punctuation the better.

Most of the commas seem fine - might want to drop after 'and' in 2nd line of 1st stanza. Could go either way with end of line punctuation. Think could use lower case for start of some of lines. Nice showing of a night and next morning.

Really enjoyed this would definitely read better without the 'and' at the beginning of the line.