All Comments on 'Our First Time Ch. 01'

totally miscategorized.

Valid comment about the lack of sex, but the classification is for the entire story and this is just the first part. It does mention anal and the sex is coming soon - please be patient, I'm working on the remaining parts as I have time.

Would be worthwhile to get an editor and, for example, learn the difference between 'to' & 'too'; 'piqued' and 'peaked', etc.

Thanks for the feedback Anonymous, I've made the corrections you suggested, of the many, many tos, toos and twos I got right guess some fell through the cracks (doh!). Feel free to send me a message with anything else you spot - I'll investigate finding an editor for future submissions but that's not a guarantee of correctness, it all depends who your editor is (have you read the newspapers lately?).