All Comments on 'Conversation While Drowning'

but swimming sort of threw me off. Overall the poem reads nice.

the bubbles reference made me think more of soapbubbles than air escaping as you were drowning and thats why the swimming reference is such a speedbump. maybe introduce swimming earlier, by swapping a line or two. you had me until 'wat'ry,' for the most part.

This perfectly captured the "clinging ivy" kind of relationship for me. Good work.

You've done it again. It's strange that some others read your work and think, "Oh yes, this makes sense but the camera angle's a little askew" and I don't see that at all. Maybe my head is already tilted that way because it just already makes sense to me, even without that lingering question mark. This one is once again smart and incisive. I like how you don't shy away from your own shortcomings in your writing. Some people have a tendency to show themselves in their own best light and your candor is refreshing. Thanks for sharing.

Can't understand why people can't understand! Really liked it but not sure about 'cling' - verb?