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Deeper and Deeper: Edward's First

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by Anonymous

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by PrincessErin08/16/09

Wow

This was a very hot sex scene that I'm sure fans of the series desperately wanted in the real book.

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by Anonymous08/16/09

Good for you!

that was extremely hot and actually very well written. i love that stephenie meyer ventured out enough to mention sex in her books but i thank you for giving it more life. :] good job.

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by Anonymous08/16/09

i'm no Twi-hard but...

This story was actually pretty damn good. Well written despite the charcters, not because of them. Kudos.

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by Anonymous08/16/09

Thank You

As someone who is OBSESSED with the Twilight books, this added a nice picture to the parts that Stephanie left out...Great job!

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by Lovely_Emma_2108/17/09

shockingly awesome

as one of the many Twilight-obsessed I started reading expecting to be grossed out and disappointed. yeah, neither ever happened! you stayed true to the story even while it was HOTTT!!! I know Stephenie Meyer would probably disapprove but some of us need this stuff too ;-) PLEASE CONTINUE!!! you obviously understand these characters and appreciate them as much as the rest of us.

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by coffinbait08/17/09

This so should have happened in the series!

Your story was so good! I felt like I was reading a portion of Midnight Sun from Edward's perspective. If twilight the series had been written for older adults I believe this defiantly should have been in there! Kudos to you for making such a wonderful extraordinary piece!As someone who loves Twilight and the characters I loved this!

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by mss_celestal08/20/09

Exactly What Was Missing

Having read the books and particularly the last book, I always felt that some semblance of a sex scene should have been in there. It always felt like there was something was missing without it. But this was just absolutely perfect. I can so see this having been in the book. Fantastic job, it was superb.

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by Anonymous08/22/09

Great

Nicely done, congratulations.
Can you try to give Bella's side of the story?
Or the first time when Bella is a newborn vampire?

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by Anonymous12/07/09

really good

Someone should send stephanie meyer this story!

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by demonovaaa12/31/09

beyond words

it ws gr8, simply put:)...it was exactly what stephenie meyers might have written...or maybe evn better than that...there's a request though..could you write about them making love afterwrds?? & i would really really appreciate if you cld come up with something between jasper-alice or emmett-rosalie..or even carlisle-esme :D

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by Anonymous02/11/10

great

please write more. i really enjoyed this one and as a fan of the series it seemed as if it was right out of an adult version. i loved it. maybe next time you could use the other couples in the house???

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by Anonymous02/15/10

really well said, i enjoyed reading this.

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by Anonymous03/02/10

I Have To Say...

That was truely one of the most brilliantly written stories I have read on here, not just because it is based on the story of Twilight (and I am not really that big a fan of it) but because your description was amazing and I felt as if I actually was the characters. Not many writers manage to capture that connection with their readers, so well done! Fantastic.

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by Anonymous04/18/10

wow that waz exactly what te book wuz missing a few requests though like ur other readers i want more ;ike the second time when she woke up from her dream and after bella became a vampire . something from bellas point of view. thank you so much for this story it would have fitted perfectly in the book

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by Anonymous06/29/10

umm....DAMN. SO perfect, WAY hot. thanks xxo

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by PrincessErin09/12/10

Wow

This is nominated for an end of year award and deserves it. Such a hot and sexy story that fits the category very well.

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by Anonymous10/21/10

Simply brilliant! I loved it!

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by Anonymous12/22/10

Oh WOW!

I can't believe what a great job you have done with this story! I am a huge fan of the Twilight books however I always felt cheated that we could never read about the physical relationship between Edward and Bella from a more adult point of view. Your story has given this to me and you should be congradulated for the fabulous quality of your work. THANK-YOU THANK-YOU !!!!!!!!!

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by bellaballanda12/27/10

Amazing

Totally amazing and well fitting with the book.

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by Anonymous01/18/11

Terrific

Absolutely fantastic construction of the story. Very authentic and very clever. I never thought of the thing that Edward was drawn to until he explained it in this story. Wonderful idea.

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by Anonymous01/22/11

Wonderful and so detailed. Love it

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the best ive read!!

ive read the few other stories on here that are supposed to be the missing chapter in breaking dawn but this one is the most true to the book and the characters
you portrayed edwards feelings so truthfully and it actually felt like i was reading the book
GOOD JOB!!!

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by Anonymous05/21/11

AMAZING!

This is the most amazing missing chapter from Breaking Dawn that I've seen yet. Please write more, I promise to read it!

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by joejonaslover0706/12/11

LOVE IT

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by Anonymous06/15/11

Best I've read on the site

The way you write is excellent. It's not just the story and the scenario it is the way you structure your sentences and paragraphs.

I'm not really a Twilight fan but if the books were written the way that you wrote your story I would read them. Your writing is better than Stephanie Meyers.

Makes me wish I was Bella.

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by Anonymous07/04/11

Are you stephenie meyer?????

This literally sounds like the way stephenie meyer writes!!!! This was amazing, the best "missing chapters" I have read!!! Keep writing, because you do so beautifully!

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by Anonymous08/27/11

Magnificent

Beautiful, true to character, and incredibly hot. Fantastic job!

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by Anonymous09/18/11

WOW

That. Was. So. Sexy!!! And it was fun to see it from Eddies view instead of Bella's. Thank you!

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by Anonymous11/22/11

WOW

that was the most exquisite piece of writing i've read in a while. why couldn't Stephanie Meyer wrote that from Bella's POV and put it in the book? it would have been much better.

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by Anonymous01/16/12

Brilliantly

Amazing!!!! your writing is incredible

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by Anonymous01/25/12

Wow

That was absolutely amazing. As a devoted fan of the Twilight series, I've wanted this "more adult" view of the wedding night for quite some time. THANK YOU!!!

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by Anonymous06/03/12

Incredible!!!

This story was very beautiful thank you for writing it you are an amazing writer :)

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by Anonymous09/29/12

Wow

I loved the powerful descriptions!

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by Anonymous11/18/12

WOW!

This story was amazing! I had been wanting to know more about their first time since I first read the book. You are an awesome writer

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by Anonymous12/31/12

more! more! more!

So descriptive and raw emotionally yet exquisitely tasteful. Well done and don't stop!

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by Anonymous01/10/13

Well done. Fantastic voice! Keep writing, you have a gift!

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by Anonymous06/20/14

This story is amazing and needs a sequel

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