All Comments on 'Family Blackmail and Revenge'

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Another fuckin' butt pirate, assclown.

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Wow. I had to read and re-read so many of the "paragraphs", if you want to call them that, that I feel like I had to read the story three times to understand half of it. The story would have been far better with some proper punctuation, grammar, spelling, and an author who could describe things a little more clearly. Keep working on your writing, but please, for the sanity of your readers, please submit your work to an editor before submitting it to the site. Your readers will thank you.

Just awful

now thats what i call payback

THE TRUCKER FAMILY WAS WORTH THAT THE OTHER

I thoroughly enjoyed the story line. Not sure if you wrote it like an illiterate on purpose to fuck with people or not but it was still a good story.

Gave up after the second paragraph. Learn basic grammar and spelling and maybe people will actually read your story.

this filth is demoralizing and degrading JUST TO READ so I just quit reading and went to this page so I could leave a comment. I gave no rating. I just cannot read trash like this.

First of all the only thing marcella's family did was have an aloof attitude. In light of what her sisters family did to hers I would say that they were right. They are better than them. Marella's sister is stupid if they show up the next saturday... Give them a whole week to regroup and rearm. I see plenty of justification in killing them upon arrival knowing what they had in store for them the next week.

Please consider our time . Crappy english , wrong punctuations and baseless grammar . Simply hated it !

I agree with everybody else. What were you thinking? The grammar and punctuation was terrible, the spelling was horrendous, and both of those things made this really hard to read. The idea had a hook to it so, if you could put the idea with better writing skills, chronological order, and writing composition, you could have an okay story. Just make sure to change up some of the cheesy parts! Or you can take some writing classes if you are really committed to this.

You write this stuff, so don't preach to those who read it. Your self-righteous introduction shows that you are a hypocrite.

Please fix grammar

Way too impatient to get slutty. I would guess the writer is about 16 and is having problems with wet dreams and is useing this to express himself

Come on kid, Its not a bad idea, just take some time to develop the story instead of your fixation

I stopped reading after you wanted to tell me that a truck driver made so much money to buy and pay off a house, two cars and put two daughters through college.

I had a friend growing up who thought he just had to work as a truck driver for like 5 years and then be able to afford a Ferrari.