All Comments on 'Life After Death Ch. 03'

Great story, good read, well written. I am honored to be the first to comment.

A reasonable response for the injury suffered.<P>

He goaded Dan into attacking him and destroyed him. He warned the somewhat less culpable Tim to make himself scarce but did not physically injure him. (I actually consider Tim as being duped by both Dan and Carol.)<P>

And Carol - he waited until she was ready to move on and had her next husband picked out and then he did ruin her life - with her boyfriend, with her parents, with her friends, and with work. Pretty comprehensive I would say. And all without laying a finger on her. Nice job.<P>

Thanks for sharing.

....awesome story rivaling the best of JPB's non-wimp stuff.I hope my cousin pissinpete or whatever moniker he's hiding behind today learns from it!-pistolpackinpeteinguntotinmaine

Well written and lively! This is the way cheating wives should be treated. Thanks...

It seemed as if the author was there telling me the story. Damn fine job, erotic, exciting and the web of intrigue that was woven is fantastic. Thanks for the good story....Rich

Carol knew exactly where he stood regarding her being unfaithful. The night he was handcufed to the bed, Carol had to hear him screaming before Dan taped his mouth. Breaking the bed had to make a lot of noise. Why would she believe Dan that her husband had left angry and then gone ahead and had sex with the two guys? Based on her past characterization she would have been concerned he was angry, looked in the bedroom, and if he really were gone, she would have gone crying to Lisa. For Carol to have sat there smoking a joint and then have sex with two guys after being told her husband had left angry makes no sense. In the past she pushed the boundaries --- until her husband got angry.

Great job, nothing better than a good loving wives story. His payback was spot on and Carol really was a slut, it happens. Thanks for your effort.

So I never vote on any of the chapters until I've read the entire story. This is the first time in quite a while that I've been able to go back and give all of the preceding chapters a 100.

Was it Tom or Tim? Never mind. I feel there should be another chapter where Pam & Steve get back together. Well, a great series & it was your best<p>Glad you didn't rushed the third chapter<p/>

absolutely fucking loved it.

to stop this tale.

Nice effort. Look forward to more of your work.

I loved it from the very beginning. You did a great job tying up all the loose ends from the previous chapters.

I feel that Pam was stupid for leaving Steve before she really got to know him. Yes his acts of violence towards Dan were a little harsh, but Steve told Pam he wasn't going to physically hurt Tim or Carol... She should have believed him.

This one is more gripping and powerful than anything you've done so far,

but I think it's marred by confusion in the last part. Pam leaves Steve because she doesn't think he should avenge himself on Carol. Then later, she says she "heard about it" and saw part of the tape, and now she understands and thinks he was justified. WTF? How is what's on the tape any different than the story he told Pam? Since you never reveal the contents of the tape, we can only assume it's Carol having sex with Tim and Dan--and Pam already knew Carol had done that. So what made Pam change her mind?

Thanks, ohio

I bet there is something going on in that tape, that makes Carol betrayal more ten fold. I can't imagine what it is.

Pam, when she tried to distract Steve from his revenge was still thinking of what she saw in the parking lot and was trying to save him from life in jail, but the way she placed herself she just lost contact with him. When he sent the e-mail she should have replied immediately but did not believe in him and thus lost her chance. With respect to Ohio's question, my feeling is that no one really believes that the other person is telling the whole truth, in fact they take the whole thing with a healthy dose of salt. But visual information go straight to the gut.

Pam, when she tried to distract Steve from his revenge was still thinking of what she saw in the parking lot and was trying to save him from life in jail, but the way she placed herself she just lost contact with him. When he sent the e-mail she should have replied immediately but did not believe in him and thus lost her chance. With respect to Ohio's question, my feeling is that no one really believes that the other person is telling the whole truth, in fact they take the whole thing with a healthy dose of salt. But visual information go straight to the gut.

good ending

The first page used several points of view. The last line was wrong. You finally settled into telling the story in first person through the latter part of this chapter and then we hear what Pam thinks after he leaves? That is impossible. There cannot be a more clueless "writer" on the site. The plot just goes back to the Troubador story os so long ago. It was simply unbelievable.

I think this is your best effort yet, but you seem to still be struggling with the shifting point-of-view thing. Thanks for sharing and I look forward to your next effort.

this is the first story that really fits toghether. not that I like the violance. not the day she fucked up and not the day he almost killed Dan. But this is the first story you could say it's a round one from start to ending. there is still a little problem. where is the erotic point here. you got 100 for the first complete story, so if you could ad erotic it would really be the place to publish.

very good story. Seems some readers here are having trouble adjusting to your style. Change what you want to change, but keep the stories comin'. Mad about spelling, punctuation, HA double Ha, don't sweat the small shit!

The reader is led to believe that there is something much more atrocious on the tape than simply Carol having sex with Dan and Tim, something that convinces any viewer that Steve had justification for doing what he did to get even. But we the readers are not told what exactly the tape shows that is so terrible. It must be impressive, for it convinces everyone who views it that Carol is pretty evil for what she has done. I think the author should have told us more about the details of the tape. For example, did the audio include put-downs of Steve while the guys were fucking Carol? Did she give the stock phrases, "Oh . . . you are much bigger than hubby, you really know how to fuck while Stevie is a simple wimp and does not know how to please me, I'm going to make him lick up your messes, etc? Another thought . . . I can't believe Pam would wish to hear details of sexual techniques employed by Steve and Carol, yet the story suggests it makes her horny, that she is into it. . . I certainly would not want to hear details about sexual encounters my girlfriend experienced before meeting me . . . that part just did not compute. Thanks for writing.

This was your best story to date. I have read all of your stories on this site and found myself totally caught up in this one.

Don't let the detractors get to you. This is an amateur site and people just don't get it. If they want to read something more polished then they should go to a bookstore and pay for a book that has been edited by a publishing house editor. When I read stories on this site I am mostly looking to be entertained by the plot and the characters. You have entertained me well.

who cares.

I mean this story is such crap it is revolting.

Ohio if you canont use your pea brain for thinking stop posting in the feedback

Your story did need just a hint of the extra and nasty material on the tape that turned everyone against Carol. For example, you could have said that until that tape no one knew how much she wanted to cheat and how she planned to keep doing it, or you could have referred to some frames showing how hard Steve was trying to excape and perhaps that Carol had looked in and ignored him. Otherwise, great story and keep up your efforts!

this story did have a few problems, but overall it was a good read and entertaining. I'm still amazed at readers who give "0" scores and attack other readers with nasty comments whose opinion differ from theirs. Childish behavior. Grow up, or stop reading erotic stories if they bother you so much. ML

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This has all been done Many times before. These "Tied up Husband while wife/ whore fucks 12 other men" stories are

ALL crap. Writing it in 3 parts STILL looks like shit.

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These stories all suck moose cock because the husband's

reactions are so fucking bizare so utterly Impossible to believable that MOST readers ... well the readers with a brain that is... burst out laughing

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1 Steve sees his whore wife take the Fantasy role play Way TOO far. They have a Fight so bad theIr marriage almost ended right there!

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2 so NATURALLY... <b>knowing his wife cannot handle fantasy/ reality too well </b> Steve for SOME reason decides they should both getdouble messages.

(perfectly rational right?)

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3 Steven sees his wife ge fucked by a huge Black cock -- what else right?. So what does steve do? he says Nothing.

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<b>THIS IS NEVER EXPLAINED WHY. </b>

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Keep in mind Steve earlier explained how the wife's whore like behavior at the club was NOT acceptable for HIS view of marriage... right?

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if so... then why does Steve never say anything?

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4. Given ALL that ... AMAZINGLY his wife NEXT time wants to try HER fantasy. <b> And Steve says Ok dear sure.. go ahead and tie me up.???? </b>

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You have got to be kidding me. At this point any sympathy I have for Steve is gone. The guy is so fucking stupid he could be the 2012 GOP presidential candiate.

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5. <b> Then after all that Steve tells No one for 18 month well every one thinks HE is Nuts.</b>

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WHY?! Maybe steve has a good reason for NOT telling anyone. But that again is NEVER EXPLAINED.

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what the fuck is wrong with you idiot readers....?

The read was a little long in the tooth but it got he job done. It had some mistakes and the action was weak if one was looking for stroking but the revenge was worth it. Most guys don't see the problem signs on the first or second go round. We do take way to much or granted when the wife says that she loves you and will not do anything to harm or hurt the marriage. Most women see sex as sex and not as love, that is unless it's her man having the sex and she didn't know about it. Did someone say double standard?

This is one of my first comments ever, despite having read stories on this site for almost ten years; such is the impact that this particular story had on me.

This is a very well-paced story, with a very effective double-thread storyline (old wife & new, albeit temporary, girlfriend). In fact, until the third chapter there really isn't much of a clue as to exactly what happened except that it was significant and traumatizing. I really felt his pain, and could empathize with him; which makes his "higher road" revenge that much more satisfying. While violence would have been umm -- quenching -- from a revenge standpoint, the destruction of his ex's life by isolating her from those who used to support her was ultimately the more elegant and satisfying conclusion. He was the one who was eventually vindicated in nearly everyone's eyes (esp. his ex-in-laws), and that is much more important than any physical revenge.

I think that this may be one of your best stories yet. It certainly was a very satisfying one, and one that I will remember for a very long time!

PS, some minor spelling mistakes and problems with sentence structure. And there are points where he was nervous (1st chapter?) that you didn't take time to clearly explain -- If I were in his shoes, I would have a "like I give a shit" attitude in general, and I find his nervousness to be jarring because there was nothing which allowed me to understand why he was nervous. Remember, this is a man who was emasculated in one of the most severe ways possible -- why would he be nervous with another woman? If anything, he would be cautious and suspicious -- having been thrown through the wood-chipper once already, and so recently, is a piece of tail really so nerves-inducing? For me it wouldn't be. In fact, I would personally be appreciative of any attention, but very standoffish. The scars would be too raw to risk re-opening them with another woman.

I agree with others, this is your best. Chapter 2 drug out too long and there were a few inconsistencies, but overall a very good story. I'm looking forward to more.

was a good story. Why worry about him beating Dan. Where were the criminal cases against his wife for handcuffing him and the resulting actions. Where was the divorce for adultry. Why not do something real instead of waiting forever then sending out the tape. The tape could have been evidence even a year later. And Pam's mental jump for full support to walking out makes her as irrational as the exwife. Hope he doesnt marry the redhead she is a bed bunny just like the exwife and Pam. As one guy told me many years ago, you dont marry that kind you just fuckem and leavem.

Great revenge!!!You´re improving!!!What the hell contains that damned tape???Note: stop to create characters with 12inches cock.It´s very,very rare and most of women are afraid of anything near that size.(nine or ten are very big and credible)

Slirpuff, you are just about the most aggravating writer on this website. You have talent, but your sloppiness and failure to use an editor is a huge flaw. You would benefit from an editor more than just about anybody due to your obvious but easily fixed flaws, like changing the point of view repeatedly, or getting the names of the characters wrong. It looks like you at least put some effort into proofreading this chapter, but you glaring flaws shows you didn't use an editor.

As to the content, it was interesting at times, but there were aspects that stretched belief, and then some. For instance, he gets all bent out of shape when his wife dirty dances with another guy, but then says absolutely nothing when another man actually briefly fucks her right next to him?! And then in the weeks and months that follows, he never once makes clear that bringing in other people for sex is not okay? That's beyond improbable, given all he knows about her already. If he's that dumb, it's a wonder he can even breathe. And what's up with ANOTHER black man with a twelve inch penis in your stories?! Has anyone ever told you that's about as rare as seeing someone 8 feet tall? Do you really think a lot of black men have penises that long, or what? Please, please, please get an editor!

Any dumbass can't tell the difference between "your" and "you're" deserves no further consideration. Shifting points of view, and the names change all the time... what the hell is this guy's problem? Too proud to ask for an editor?

two chapters, but this was just copy and paste from a thousand unbelievable misogynist revenge takes, where the guy is Mr Perfect etc. Tammy baby, run. Mancelt.

Slirp... I can only repeat what another commentator said below. I believe you've got some real talent for creating characters & situations, but dude, you NEED AN EDITOR. You keep changing the story's POV, your work contains very sloppy, but very easily fixable spelling and case errors. All of these issues make reading very jarring, & especially for me [i write professional non-fiction for a living], disconcerting. It literally stops me reading while I try in my mind to edit the story, & fix these stupid grammatical errors. Get a Editor, your work will improve measurably from a readability standpoint.

This is an amateur story site.If the hate mongering pinheads want perfection they should go buy a book.The writers here do a quite acceptable job on their "FREE" stories.

Wow. Harry has a point that this theme has kind of been used before, and Ohio has a point about what is really on that tape. Somebody else commented about lack of an editor. All that said, I think this is one of the most intense series I've ever read. Also, regarding Ohio's comment, it may be better to leave the tape contents unsaid and leave that to the reader's imagination to gage the contents per the reactions. Good series.

<p>I find you to be an exceptional storyteller. You have added yet another perspective to that classic "Hildy". Your story stands well on its own.</p><p> If there is one criticism that I have of your work it is the random change in points of view, or voice. You need to work on this problem, and it would be nice to see you compose some more complex plots too.</p>

Except for the annoying shift of Point of View along the way, you are a very good storyteller. You created a very damaged main character who has so real issues about a horrendous event that happened with respect to his wife. My problem is that a "fantasy gone too far" seemed a bit pale in comparison to Steve's reaction. I tended to think that Pam was right; he was pathologically obsessed and she was better off leaving him. For the magnitude of Steve's reaction, I at least expected a major betrayal--a long term affair with one of his old friends or major competitor. Bringing the two dufaces from a year earlier back for no reason didn't work. Now if she had been carrying on an affair with one of them from before the first encounter, then it might have worked. As it was, I only concluded that Steve needed serious counseling and that his new girlfriend was a poor judge of character. --- Still, keep writing. 80% of the story was well done; it was just the ending that failed to grab me. --- The Cobbler

what the hell man? lol that was some ending. it didnt quite fit what you started in part 1 and 2, but it was entertaining. i have to say though, im confused that after everything pam did to stay with him, why did she suddenly get cold feet and leave? you made it seem like she suddenly became a new character. also, im glad he didnt kill anyone. you seem to be getting better, but some of you stories still suck.

But dude,

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You need to write a whole story in the third person. I suppose that's the only way you can get the whole story across the way you want to. It's a problem common to all your stories. All this shifting of the points of view. One minute your main character is saying something and the next its someone else talking like they're narrating it.

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It's not hard to learn to write that way, and you could actually end up writing even better stories, because there will be continuity there without the confusion. Such simple steps make a story a lot more readable and you'll see that readers will respond in kind.

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Later man, and all the best.

The last comment indicated the writer believed it was a male who wrote this, NOT ! The whole series of stories under this moniker are written by fems only, and I DO mean fems, plural in form ! You wonder why the differences, well dummies, it's cause they ARE different writers.

Even so, this particular story I actually LIKE even if the guy is portrayed as one stupido metrosexual.

the demons were worked through, and he came out out at the end. If he had not, moving forward would have been incomplete and lacking.

i think you have come a long way. keep up the good stuff! ok?

I basically liked this story, although there were some problems with the plot. For example, if this guy was so jealous about the wife fooling around with other men during her fantasy nights, then why would he chose his own fantasy to involve another man (the black guy) putting his hands and dick all over his wife? Even if he didn't expect the black guy to fuck her, he knew the guy was going to massage her all over. The black-couple-massage fantasy was not a believeable plot element. Also, I would have liked to hear more dialog between the husband and his wife (Carol) following the incident. She keep saying it wasn't supposed to go that way. Why didn't he ask exactly how it was supposed to go, that wouldn't have been a repeat (or worse) of what he had already made clear was unacceptable following the fantasy the year before? Why would she expect her husband to be even remotely okay with her inviting these two guys over and doing anything with them? A good dialog between him and his wife, with the husband making her see how wrong she had been, making her admit to everything in front of her friend (Lisa), calling her all sorts of names, demanding divorce, etc., would have been more satisfying for the reader than this lack of communication, in my opinion.

Thank you for this. It does need some edit work but it was a very good story with an excellent ending.

Overall i liked the story very much. I do agree with some of the critics. When the couples massage got out of control he should have made VERY clear that he was not happy with the outcome and why. It's pretty easy to see that she would have gotten mixed messages and she was already heading in bad directions. Given that background he had to be brain dead to let her final fantasy proceed without some outline of what was supposed to happen and/or some ground rules. Other participants was definitely out and he should have told her that well before the day came. However, his dumbness, although a poor plot device, was necessary to let the story evolve as it did. She says it didn't go as planned but if this was happening and she was told her husband got mad and walked out wasn't it time to stop what she was doing? She KNEW he was VERY nervous about things anyway. The truth was she didn't care. She was going to get what she wanted no matter what. Since it got to that point I like his revenge. She didn't care about him and now he exposes her for the slut she is. The two jerks have been handled. I even like the put down of Pam. There are always those "holier-than-thou" people who haven't gone through the same experience and yet think they are qualified to give advice and judge someone who HAS gone through the horrors. If people dish you crap why is it "good" if you don't retaliate? All that does is send a message to the person that they didn't really do anything that bad. He IS going to see those scars every day and remember. It IS a BIG thing and now the jerks know just how big a thing it really was because they now have their own BIG thing they have to deal with. I'll bet his Ex won't pull anything like that on a guy again, even if she thinks he overreacted. It was just an enjoyable story to read. The grammar could use a little polish and I think it IS important to a story to get grammar and spelling right. Just because these are amateur efforts doesn't give an author a pass. There are automatic grammar and spell checkers available as a start and then hand it off to a good editor.

OK, it was a good story, but somehow it didn't feel wholesome.. and it felt a bit rushed at the end. You could fix this partly by merging the chapters. Otherwise it feels like each chapter is too small. Revenge stories are MEANT to be detailed. Giving the bare bones is just a disappointing teaser. Hacking.. eh? That's all? :@ And if there's going to be no violence at the end, at least more humiliation and satisfaction, please?? We need details. Especially in between scenes. It feels a bit too jumpy and not a consistent story that can be followed too well. I LOVE your shorter stories. I guess it's because you're used to writing smaller stories, so you need to learn how to write longer stories that are more satisfying.

He should have beat Dan up somewhere more private, then tied him up, put a mouth piece in his mouth that stops it closing, and then got a blowjob. It's way too humiliating to have dick in your face while you're handcuffed! A mouthful of spunk in a man's mouth when bruised and broken would make him feel suicidal!

I was originally thinking Steve should reach into Carol and literally rip her heart out (whatever's there anyway..). He has more self-control than me, I guess! I would have tied her up, put weights on her and thrown her in the lake! I guess it's an okay revenge if he humiliated her and left her alone in the world from her parents and friends.

Steve made 2 serious mistakes - 1) not dumping Carol soon enough; 2) going to that massage place! She was not fooled that she had a dick inside her! She may well have thought he was subconsciously telling her he's okay with swinging or something! As a character, I like him but I think he's a fruitcake (crazy). You described him as over-the-top, but didn't make the details nice and sweet and FILLINGLY satisfying.

To harryinva, he didn't say anything about the massage place because he knew he fucked up but hoped that his wife didn't know it! He was a serious idiot!

Carol hasn't been described enough but it is clear she is a slut and a greedy bitch who deludes herself into thinking it was acceptable to Steve. Some people will justify anything. She knew from the club scene that he wasn't happy, but probably used the nude massage to justify it was alright.

There are time problems. He waits too long to get a divorce. Why was he so fixated on birthdays? It's insane on some level (and I'm not just spectating). He wanted his birthday gift to be her humiliation.. There are other things that don't make sense. Why was he okay with not sending it to her parents' church? Also, Nick is an idiot for saying "Steve you've gone too far this time" - why say that??

My last concern is that you use the same bunch of names over and over in all your stories. It's okay in a few stories, but believe me it gets annoying when I read ALL your stories and find it's from the same group of names :@

Yeah his wife done him wrong but if he wasn't such a big prick he wouldn't have made it worse.

the person who said this guy is an asshole must be some type of bitch or better yet a cuckold, he did what was needed and kicked that bitch in her ass, and fuck all those fairweather friedns to, like Nick

The only major thing I didn't like about this story is that it was too short and the actual ending seemed rushed.

Steve's neither a wimp nor an asshole. I happened to think he didn't take it far enough, I only hope Steve sends the video to every guy she dates for the rest of her life.

In honor of the late great Dandy Don: "If if and buts were candy and nuts we'd all have a Merry Christmas."

Wonderful, terrific, fantastic. Without a doubt, Slirpuff's best work, that I've read, to date. Not only did this story have all the elements we're used to seeing in a Slirpuff story, such as an injured male protaganist and a slut wife or girlfriend, but these characters are so well defined. With Carol, there is no reading between the lines (ala Robin in "January 17th" or Catherine in "Esther and Me") about whether or not she is a slut or, as the brothers would say, a "sho nuff hoe". She is all that and a lot more. Steve, of course, is Slirpuff's strongest protaganist ever. A black belt karate expert driven by hate, it just doesn't get any better than that. Even though Carol got off pretty easy in the end (can you say "snuff story"), I still absolutely love this story.

is that the wife's explanation of what was suppose to happen with the two other guys... cannot possibly be true.

First How does the wife make the decision that simply because she enjoyed fucking the massage guy with the big cock... the husband would ENJOY being tied up and tortured ?!??!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!!??

Second WHY would she think that her husband would accept the 2 guys at the club to be the ones for the threesome?

Lets assume the wife really did think that the husband WAS freed but was really pissed off and left the house. If so since this was suppose to involve him anyway... why did she go back and fuck the other 2 guys FOR HOURS ?

Again - a blatantly selfish wife,screws her husband over.

Knowing the 'aggro'between her two lovers (from the club night)and her husband - she fixes them up for her fantasy night !! WTF ??

...and her arranging for her fantasy night to be taped ???

Then to say she loves her husband ???

Again - the wife gets away, virtually free from all the pain that the husband suffered - just not fair,is it ?

Happens too often in Life, for me to feel sorrow for her,as usual,the wife got away with it,moving away didn't cut the mustard,nor changing her job,family and friends seeing the video ? so what,that won't hurt her - at all !!

She put him through hell on earth,in my opinion it was not only premeditated by her,but longer term,a way to get rid of him for limiting her'freedom'' - so why did she get married ?

Good story - thanks !!

Steve was a fucking bitch and did deserve to have his hands cut off. Sending the video to her friends and family just made him seem like a prick and dumping Pam because she could see that he was a hate filled cunt was just laughable. Steve came across as a loser would probably live and die alone. Also how can he possibly equate his little problem (which he allowed to happen afterall he said he had a bad feeling and instead of shouting pepper he shouted Carol) to Pam being pushed down a flight of stairs and losing her unborn baby?

The cunt bitch tried to fuck over her husband. She almost did so, but he got his revenge in the end and lived well great story. The last person to comment is either a woman or GAY man.

needs editing, the last person to comment is either a cuck or wants to be cucked

Is most likely a Cuckold that's why they didn't give it 5 stars.

The story had a good flow and was interesting. On a personal note, I find the ending somewhat unrealistic. I do not think Pam would have bothered with Steve again. Maybe had said hello and said hope you are well, but that is all. Since she saw his angry and vengeful side, what woman would want a guy like that. He would scare the hell out of any woman. If she made a mistake, what kind of retribution would she get would be her thinking. The rest of the story was realistic though extreme.

Criticize a story you couldn't write, then take a cheap shot at an anonymous commentator you'll never meet. Gotta love the internet.

HA

Reading the comments posted before is hilarious.

Excellent revenge. The entire series was a little far-fetched but it was worth reading.

One more thing...

I HATE CHEATING WIVES

HA HA HA

Super Cruel Revenge Story 5 stars.

I put Slirpuff into my favorit as Author. He is excellent in 3 genres as revenge stories, like this story is, reconcilation as "Stuff "is or in TLW as A Little Bit of Death.

I prefer the modern Figaro and the Romantic Revenge Stories but a Cruel Revenge Story is good I apreciate it as I do this story.

how many time has some guy been sentenced to 18 years of child support and alimony for some slut wife. it's life, he got even, fuck her and move on.

to bad pam took a hit. he was acting like an ass,pam went overboard for him. it just doesnt feel right that he has a new chick in his life,who isnt pam

When it comes to writing, only a few are blessed with the ability and you are one of these few.

Thanks for all your great stories and please keep writing.

Steve's revenge on Carol afterall was the truth. Pam was not a keeper since her main interest including using sex was to get Steve's story not to share his pain. Carol was a party girl who got bored with having one sex partner after 2 years of marriage. How can you continue fucking relatively total strangers after your husband supposely left in disgust? Why fuck two guys in another room if you plan for your husband to join you?

Good story, well written

A key point that he didn't drive home is that when Dan told her that he had stormed off and left the apartment - she continued without him! She was a real bitch and deserved everything she got and perhaps more! Fuck Lisa for not dumping her evil friend. His pal Nick is the wimp for allowing his wife to take her side. There's another story there!

A good ending to the tale.

...FANTASTIC !!!!!!!!!!!

I enjoyed reading the 3 parts of your story.

Thank you.

I mean, what else could the chap do?

The guy is a nutjob with more baggage than Pam could ever have. She is much better off without him. Watch out Tammy better not put a foot wrong because under the surface is a raging nutter.

This is my second time reading it and it took me almost a year to find this after the first read. The other cat or lady that stated that Tammy should be careful should reconsider the comment. I gave this story a 5 star rating.

Forgiveness? Okay, for those that really did not care that much in the first place. Of course, Steve admitted that he had married a party girl, he knew that she was a nut but went along with her games. He should have reigned her in or cut her loose. She was not wife material, and thank GOD they didn't have kids, she definitely was not mother material. In fact women like her should be sterilized, so they don't replicate!

Carol the.....

Cheater

Liar

Adulterer

Bitch

Whore

CUNT

SKANK

GUTTER TRAMP

SCUM

PIECE OF SLIMY SHIT

DISEASED TWAT

ETC......

..... GOT OFF EASY!!!!!!!!!!!!

SHE SHOULD HAVE BEEN SOLD TO A MEXICAN WHORE HOUSE ....

Oh, and to the WIMPS, CUCKS & MEN HATING WOMEN ......

KISS MY ASS!!!!

So all you whiny twelve year old trolls are gleefully dancing around Carol's pyre. But not one of you have the testicular fortitude to even ask, where the fuck was the revenge against Dan who was the centerpiece of the treachery and battery on Steve?

I realize that with your limited intellects that complex questions are beyond your capability. But Carol gets tossed under the bus and Dan skates without penalty? That says a lot about how little the lot of you are!

Obviously you did not read the previous chapters. Dan got his and then some.

Next time read the story before making an uninformed inane inept comment.

You jackass

Savage revenge on Dan took up almost two pages in the previous two chapters, including a vicious beating and a visit from police. Next time you point your pre-teen, limp-wristed finger at others get your facts straight, douchebag...

You have the sense of a dead goat. It's stupid whores like you that give sluts a bad name.

Wimpish behavior accounted for Carol's plundering this marriage to hell in a hand basket. However, the ensuing drama to Carol's night of exploration was quite entertaining. Tim and Dan quite deserved their reprisals and Carol was the most guilty. Carol was either the dullest knife in the drawer or insane or combination. Steve contributed to his demise with non-assertive behavior when it came to Carol by the author's own admission. Nevertheless, this story was exciting and fun to read. Communication would've saved this marriage along with a measure of assertive behavior by Steve then again there wouldn't have been a story. Thank you and well done!

There was enough revenge in this for me, even. Too bad about Pam. Ultimatums rarely pan out, whenever, whatever. I think this is your best story, author.

Never judge them until you know exactly what they're seeking revenge for.

This was a good BTB story, not ridiculously over the top.

Steve was a more giving lover than Carol, it could look like being a wimp, but really he simply did not know how selfish she was.

Most people expect other people to act as they do.

I particularly enjoyed the lack of detail in your disciplined account of the actual dissolution of Steve and Carol's marriage...too bad Pam couldn't have kept her mouth shut and shown the trust Steve was desperately seeking. One more 5 to complete the trifecta....

During the incident in the club when he was her "slave", AFTER he said "pepper", while she did leave, she still treated him like a little wimp, when what she SHOULD have said was something like "Yes, sweetheart, you're the boss," making i clear it was a role-play.

And to use Dan and Tim later, KNOWING that they had no respect for him, showed at LEAST a lack of common sense.

That was a precision tactical nuke strike. Well planned and well executed.

This is also a great cautionary tale about the dangers of the swinging/swapping/sharing lifestyles. If something gets out of hand, you'd better be ready for the consequences.

5 Stars.

I can understand Steve's rage and need for revenge but think he owed more explanation to Pam to calm her fears He was too consumed with his rage

And he should have killed Dan and Tim. Perhaps arranged for Carol to be infected with something that neither drugs nor Ajax would kill.

Back when they first got together and he complained about her flirting and she asked if he wanted to be exclusive, he should have said, "Not necessarily, I just don't want you flirting when WE'RE on a dat!"

"Got to get my little one to bed, before he gets too crabby," she said with a laugh

"Maybe I'll see you boys around sometime," she said, kissing each one on the cheek, just before we left."

"When you said the safe word, didn't I put an end to it and leave?" Carol shouted.

No, she DIDN'T end it, she continued to embarrass him, with the "little one" remark, and the flirting, kissing and hinting at seeing them around sometime.

And then using THEM for the final humiliation? Did they know that the time in the club was just a role play and he WASN'T a wimp? Probably not, so even if they weren't assholes they probably thought that was the kind of arrangement they had. And knowing what an ass Dan was, to not check on her husband just because Dan said he was gone was unforgivable.

After the best 2 chapters you've written & then to end with this rather pathetic ending. I'm not saying what you wrote about was bad, just parts of it & how you went about trying to fit it all together. You let yourself, the story & us readers down quite badly with this chapter. 2 **

I realise you most probably don't read any of these recent comments seeing they're nearly 5 years after this story but I've notice you writing again so just maybe you might look back on some of your past episodes. Another Steve Moore tale ... woe is me.

The end could be better...For him to loose Pam, better get a more hard revenge....

In all respects !!

You complain like a back woods baboon. Why don't you back to the Zoo and visit your parent and calm down. Your mom is lonely in the hippo cage and your dad is only a cage away. He's a silver back with a head from a jack ass. I don't know why you complain so much when you have the IQ of a dead cricket. SO quit complaining whore and go back to your corner, the swear rats are getting lonely.