What I liked:
--Great reading; your delivery was excellent
--Use of second person ("you did this, you did that)
--You were convincingly excited
--The writing was descriptive and clear
--Your southern accent is SO sexy
What might be better:
--I wasn't as turned on as I would have thought, especially since you have such a sexy voice
--Maybe if it were in present tense? ("You do this, you do that")
--The ending felt anti-climactic
All in all, terrific job. I'm looking forward to more!
Thanks for taking the time to submit your audio reading. You have a lovely voice.
Rikki, you've started something you can't quit. Your descriptiveness in telling what happened is beautiful. The tone of your voice in wanting him, the way your breasts felt, the wetness between your legs. All this kept me so involved in what was happening. I hope you will continue the story and let us hear your voice as you bring us to the orgasm you so desire. I REALLY want to hear more. Jim
I loved the passion in which you brought out the fantasy...it is one that I have played many times in my mind.. you have an incredible sexy voice - THANK YOU for many wonderful self enjoyments!
Such desire - I love it, especially the open ending (it lets the imagination run free). Well done, I hope you will submit again!
Incredible! A great voice, wonderful subject and perfectly delivered...well done! you have a new fan.
Your sultry voice and your style made this a fabulous audio-erotic experience. My only question????When are you going to complete your conquest of this lucky man! (We all know deep down that you lured him into you and that he was powerless to do anything but fill you with himself!)
...and superb delivery! Just so HOT!! Many thanks
So hot and sexy. I love your voice and would love to tell you all the things I would do to you, for you, with you.
Soooooooo hot.. your sexy southern twang and the way you described what was happening to you, not just the image of the man you so obviously lust after.. it turned me on so much picturing you, panting and shaking with desire, trembling anticipation at the next touch of you lover's cool fingers and soft moist lips.. Best of all I loved hearing how turned on you were *reading* the story, you had me throbbing under my own cool fingers just as the recording clicked off.
Please tell me you kept recording.. I would love another story like that, that degenerates into the sound of you moaining and rubbing yourself to orgasm.. as anyone listening would
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