by ShatteredPortrait
Fantastic story,definately got a rise outta me! Hope there's gonna be more to this story?! Gotta hear more!chainedwolf69@hotmail.com
good so far but the second chapter will be the real test so many writers screw up on the second or third chapter also learn about the human body if her nipples were the size of quarters she would never be able to breast feed you probably mean areola's instead
If I were the typical I would have to say something crass here but I wont. I will say I'm surprised a woman wrote this very male fantasy, in a male style. No I'm not complaining, I am thanking you. In a country where the sun never quits, there's an abundance of flesh on display. Guaranteed autonomic male response. Its embarrasing, But you girls like when we're embarassed dont you.
so when is the second chapter coming out? if this is all you are going to write about them it would have been better left unposted. never leave the readers hanging either finish the story or remove it don't waste our time on an unfinished story
DBRS
this is a total waste of time no real background on any of the characters a half assed middle and no end. this site is sure going to hell fastwe need some GOOD writers that know how to build a plot and characters and are smart enough to use a GOOD EDITOR before posting.
Guess he needs to take her in the shower and wash the tanning lotion off :)
....always nice to get off on the right foot with your new sister!