All Comments on 'A Trick, A Treat'

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AnonymousAnonymousover 14 years ago
more please

Great story. Well thought out and written well. Keep up the good work and I will be looking for more stories from you like this.

Eric_ShiftEric_Shiftover 14 years ago
Glad it turned out they were married

A true Loving Wives tale

Poizon69Poizon69over 14 years ago
Nice one RR

I was a little worried but roleplaying is good fun. Of course you will get people who don't like this story because there is no cheating but personally I liked it. well done.

woodmanonewoodmanoneover 14 years ago
Really had me going

You had me fooled right up to the end. Well done, well written and entertaining. I was reading going "Oh no, just another cheating slut of a wife," and then you hit me with the zinger. Good job, and thanks for a "Loving Wife" story about a loving wife. This is what this genre should be about. Thanks again, I will read more of your work.

theonlinestalkertheonlinestalkerover 14 years ago
only a moment indeed...

Here is a moment of my time kind sir. I normally dont read the loving wife section. But when i saw the comments on the feedback portal it peeked my interest. And now I'm glad i read it. My husband and I have been sharing fantasies lately. And I'd definately like to add something like this to it. Great Job!

AnonymousAnonymousover 14 years ago
CRAP

Complete BULL SHIT CRAP---My dog can write better than this shit. Get the hint, if not STOP

AnonymousAnonymousover 14 years ago
Very nicely done

Hoped it would turn out as it did!

AnonymousAnonymousover 14 years ago
Great Job

R R , good Halloween entry.

AnonymousAnonymousover 14 years ago
fun

That was a fun read! I look forward to your next post.

AnonymousAnonymousover 14 years ago
Great read

Good, well written story with a nice twist...

AnonymousAnonymousover 14 years ago
Of course at first I thought

YES! you juicy dirty cheating slut, though was slightly disappointed there was only ONE guy involved, I mean let's at least have our sluts gangbanged, only to discover he was her hubby! Palpably dejected and thinking of throwing a law-suit your way RR...Mancelt.

Harryin VAHarryin VAover 14 years ago
sure it was Obvious but also HOT

folks the fact that this was somewhat predictable does not make it crap. It was well written and hot.

PrincessErinPrincessErinover 14 years ago
Great

Of course the ending was expected but the writing was wonderful and it was so hot and sexy. Also love that there was no cheating involved.

AnonymousAnonymousover 14 years ago
FANTASTIC!!!!!!!!

This was so hot, i came twice. when my hubby gets home, i'm going to...ummm...well, you can use your imagination. :) Thanks for a great story!!

domrogerdomrogerover 14 years ago
Never Mind

Never mind the adverse comments, this story is fun and up to your usual excellent standard.

energystarenergystarover 14 years ago
nice

just for the record - my dog cannot write nearly as well as you. Thanks for the story.

gatorhermitgatorhermitover 14 years ago
Predictable but Fun Story

And erotic too! Well done RR. An enjoyable read.

AnonymousAnonymousover 14 years ago
Pretty good actually - thanks for the story.

It was delightfully entertaining.

beezerishbeezerishalmost 14 years ago
;)

Added you to my favorites for a reason, and this is definitely one of them ;)

AnonymousAnonymousover 13 years ago
Great read!

Thank you author.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 13 years ago
Mindless prattle !!

NOT worth your time to read.

ohioohioover 12 years ago
Fun and hot

and I was drawn in and totally fooled.

And by the way, DWornock: thanks so much for your insightful and detailed review.

ohio

tazz317tazz317over 12 years ago
DOUBLE R, GOOD JOB

a terrific spin on age old problems. TK U MLJ LV NV

RejectRealityRejectRealityover 12 years agoAuthor
Thanks for the comments!

Glad those DWornock has attracted with his detailed, insightful review have found the story enjoyable LOL

Guess I pissed him off by not having cops, interracial, cock length, cup sizes, anyone over 25 years old, or anything else for him to rant about.

What a tool LOL

JLRemoraJLRemoraover 12 years ago

Nothing wrong with being predictable, it's how a story is told is what matters. This was nicely done.

As for WDornock, maybe he/she has dyslexia. Because it seems when WDornock gives a story a low score, I know its going to be a good story. If it gets a 1* and no comment, then I'm certain its going to be a great story.

bruce22bruce22over 12 years ago
Good Fun

I am sure that there are some who are unhappy with a married coupld playing at adultery but it was very well done. I have to admit it was erotic and fast paced.

PistolpackinpetePistolpackinpeteover 12 years ago
As Harry said predictable but still erotic...

and the ages/background described just right for this plot.

cueball961cueball961over 12 years ago
Wonderful!

I was about to give up on the story as just another slut wife tale, but I had to keep going to see how it would end. I'm glad I did! The surprise ending was a treat and the story was nice and erotic. This is the second story by the author I've read and in both cases I have been more than impressed.

My confidence in your writing ability is further enhanced by the fact that DWornock did not like it. This automatically makes it a hit in my book since it is painfully obvious, per my usual mantra, that DWornock is an ass.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 12 years ago
I was hoping for the very twist you provided.

The overzealous misogynists attracted to this category never cease to amaze me (or frighten me--may they never be married, dating, much less near a girl). I often get the impression they'd rather skip any sort of attempts at storytelling and head right to the sexual violence/revenge against the "cunt/whore" who "deserves it," or perhaps that's what this genre will eventually, or has already, on a whole, degraded into.

"Loving Wives" is a misnomer and should just be changed to "Misogyny."

But, back to speaking of "amaze me," you certainly had a fun, little romp in this category and a pleasant little twist ending that made for better reading, in my opinion. Well done!

LickideesplitLickideesplitabout 12 years ago
Battery cable corrosion?

Main unrealistic detail - why car won't start. Hubby needs to own up to having disconnected one side of the battery cable as they're 'debriefing,' and simply lying about the corrosion during the seduction phase. Actually causing a current-flow interruption is WAY too iffy (and obviously contrived!). Otherwise, competently done 4*!

RejectRealityRejectRealityabout 12 years agoAuthor
Ahh, but...

I never said how he disabled the car. I purposely kept that vague, and kept her distracted. The battery terminals are a red herring. My thought while writing it was that he pulled the ignition fuse. As to why he didn't own up to how he actually did it: They both had better things on their mind, and you never know when a trick like that might come in handy again. A magician never reveals his secrets LOL

AnonymousAnonymousover 11 years ago
good hot original fun

good writing, characters and awesome twist

AnonymousAnonymousabout 11 years ago
Not a surprising twist at all

I read the story and when I finished I had to wonder why I bothered to read it. It is not original there are other similar stories on this site. The writing is average at best and the characters have fantasies that don't match up with reality at all.

SpreadHerCheeksAndFeast1SpreadHerCheeksAndFeast1over 9 years ago
Taste it.

What talent. You are an amazing author. The ending was such a surprise and I loved it. When he bent her over the hood and pushed her panties down to her knees, he should have knelt down and spread her asscheeks and tasted her tail hole. After being encased in her clothing through that flight I'm pretty sure it would have had some delicious flavor and scent. He could have briefly sniffed, licked, sucked and tongue fucked her tangy bunghole before he moved on to pillage her sopping pussy. 5 stars.

AnonymousAnonymousover 9 years ago
Great!!!

I agree. He should have rimmed her tasty filthy butthole before he scrogged her on the hood of that car.

AnonymousAnonymousover 9 years ago
cannot understand

Why this is rated so low. Apparently this categories voters prefer femnazi style cuckold stories to actual stories of a wife "loving" her husband. Go figure. Go -sick- figure, I suppose, but still. Go figure. Anyway, 5 from me.

xtremeddxtremeddover 8 years ago
Smooth very smooth transition, the apparent tryst into forbidden...

but lustful Love between two committed lovers.

Great story and writing. A very well done "Gotcha"!

Thanks for sharing on Lit.

x

AnonymousAnonymousabout 8 years ago
Glad I found this.

Well paced, well written, and I hope "Lance" and Jamie can resolve all their disagreements this well! I'm off now to see what else you've written.

PrinzmettlePrinzmettleover 6 years ago
Very nice!

A well-told story, even if I got suspicious near the end. Thanks.

AnonymousAnonymousover 5 years ago
Mmmmmmmm

Logged on the old fashined way just so I could give this 5-stars and say that I think it’s my favorite one yet......

Decal_lastDecal_lastabout 5 years ago
Sneaky

Never saw that one cumming. A nice surprise.

oldbearswitcholdbearswitchalmost 5 years ago
Surprise roleplay "cheating" stories stories usually suck. This was 5 star!

GRACIAS

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 5 years ago
creative couple

This just shows how a creative couple can keep the spice and mystery in their sex lives. I'd give it six stars if I could. Maybe next time he comes home she can meet him at the airport dressed as a flight attendant - another good fantasy.

Greyman01Greyman01over 4 years ago
Fun & Sweet

Nice job. I happen to like your Reality, by the way. Yeah, lots of pieces and parts of this story are probably in the 'highly unlikely' category. So what? This is fiction and an author's job is to engage and entertain the reader.

Mission accomplished.

5 *

AnonymousAnonymousabout 4 years ago
Pussy Galore

I loved it! It was fun :)

SamuelDexterSamuelDexterover 2 years ago

Refreshing

Caught me. Thanks

AnonymousAnonymousover 2 years ago

Brilliant.!

DanDraperDanDraperabout 2 years ago

Halloween stories are always so much fun to read.

Great story, thanks for sharing.

5-stars.

Just_GymJust_Gymover 1 year ago

Loved it! I wasn't expecting your twist which is why the surprise was so good.

greasedsilvergreasedsilverover 1 year ago

That threw me. Good job!

KittyLover80KittyLover80over 1 year ago

AWESOME STORY. Terrific story and an exciting read. Great plot & characters. Thanks for developing this amazing story and plot.

StacnashStacnash7 months ago

I’m happy to admit that you got me with the twist at the end.

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It just means that a lot of my notes are completely redundant, so there’s not too much left for me to say here. Before the twist, you did a great job in getting me to dislike Jeremy due to his childish reaction to his wife missing the Halloween party. So, when “Lance” showed up on the scene, I was rooting for them both to get together. You made the prospect of Jamie being unfaithful seem credible, which is really important to me.

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Obviously, this was a short story and you didn’t need as many words as you used to tell it. The opening wasn’t the best, with her collecting luggage at the airport and too much time devoted to her moving around there. But it gained momentum after that and you ended up doing a great job.

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Before the twist, Lance was my favourite character as I loved his confidence. You didn’t need to make her consent so obvious as the reader knew she wanted it, but authors should always be commended for the sentiment of at least wanting to make it clear.

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One thing here was really interesting to me. I actually didn’t want Jamie and Jeremy to reconcile. Perhaps reconcile is too strong a word as they only had a difference of opinion about her work trip, but the principle is clear. What kind of male partner reacts like that to an important work commitment? All in the name of attending a Halloween party? Withholding sex and intimacy? So, it was with that in mind when I read how Lance erupted inside “Kitty” and I was thrilled by the act. In my mind, before the twist, I thought Jeremy deserved every bit of it. But you told the story you wanted to tell and you got me to bite to the point where I was surprised at the ending.

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What doesn’t really matter is the story that I wanted you to tell. Instead, you got me invested because you’re a really good writer and you managed to control my reactions throughout. But, from a selfish point of view, I think if Lance was real and Jamie had fallen for his charms, this would be the kind of story that I’d remember for a long, long time. I really do find this interesting because the ending you chose has obvious merit too. Maybe, just maybe, there was an opening here to be a little braver and close the show with genuine infidelity that would’ve been provocative, but would’ve made this hotter.

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In any event, you achieved something that every writer on this website truly craves. You’ve left your mark on the readers and I’ll be thinking about Jamie and Lance for a long time to come. When I score this, I don’t take points away because I didn’t get the ending that I really wanted. No author should be punished for that. Instead, you’ve earned points because your storytelling abilities are first-rate and you got me to root for Lance being real in a way that I don’t often do.

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Well done again. I haven’t read the other comments on this, so I’m going to post this review just now and hurry across to read them as I’m dying to see what everyone else thought. Once again, that’s a sign that your work really got to me.

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83/100. ⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐

AlexFourwaysAlexFourways3 months ago

Another great story. Slowly working through your back catalouge...

I had expected to find some Karen or Kevin whining on about unprotected stranger sex (what do they expect on literotica? like someone complaing about racing cars at Las Vagas or Monico breaking the speed limit!) but the handbrake turn at the end would have stumped them! Alex

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