All Comments on 'Grains of Sand'

Great yarn

Good story, I always enjoy your work, thanks.

I really didn't see the ending coming. an interesting story, and it reads fast, and is well planned.A good twist for an ending. Thanks for the good story

Great surprise ending. Personally the I would have dumped her for disrespecting me on the web site. That wasn't fantasy that was mean spirited lying, and a good indicator of her true chracter.

The ending was kind of a suprise, but in a way not really. She was doing internet sex with someone which is what started all his suspicions. I guess her internet lover was mark from her office.

<p>Wow!! I loved this story. The title was very good and the ending, well, what a twist!!! I thought they'll <i>Live Happily Ever After</i>, but the ending turned it upside down.</p>

<p>It appears that you haven't used any editor in this story. There were few errors like repitation of the same word in the same sentence, for eg --"It's not like we wear much of anything <b>anyway</b> when we're together <b>anyway</b>." Anyway was used twice. There were many like this. Small mistake, but makes a big difference. All you have to do is give more time to your story before posting.</p>

<p>Well, a good story with a great ending. GOOD JOB <)))<p/>

Like who gave her access to the Internet and how much her husband loved her... He was very lucky to have stumbled on her affair and all her lack of love and respect on-site

reflected her true state of spirit. Good work!

Few, if any, writers can mix metaphors and alter expressions so effectively and interestingly. Your writing is unique and your stories have become readable and entertaining as hell. It is also apparent that you put time and effort into this. I thank you for that.

all your stories are about dumb men.

invaded her privacy. Now how does that explain her totally cutting him off and ignoring him. It was her actions that started it all. She if a fucking slut. Wait until after the divoce and she gets no alimony. Then sue the company and give pictures of the two fo them fucking aroung. Get her fired and him fired. Then since she cant care for the children apply for custody thru the courts. Fitting end to a whore wife.

Yet another good one from the pen of slirpuff. (Well - keyboard I guess)

Sofar your best story!

When Rick decided that <b>HE</b> had made <b>ALL</b> the mistakes that <b>HE</b> had overreacted and the <b>wife did NOTHING wrong </b> this story went into the shitter.

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and why wouldnt it? it is a Slirpuff story.

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<b> having a whole new persona and private Fantasy sex life HIDDEN away from your spouse IS cheating. </b>And it almost always leads to cheating.

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The wife KNEW what she did was wrong-- staying up to 4am with Fantasy on line sex and cutting Rick off. Yet her #1 concern was her privacy.

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so instead of meeting Rick halfway... she tells him the kids arent his!? that is way hitting way below the belt.

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Instead the faggot pussy husband says:

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<i> The kids were mine and I was the one who had pissed off Lisa by invading her privacy. <b>They were fantasies God damn it, and I'd over reacted. Lisa had tried to tell me that and I didn't believe her and only then did it get out of hand. I really was a schmuck.</b> I knew what I had to do if I wanted my old life back. Or if that was even possible any more.

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Lisa had said some ugly things to me and I'd reacted accordingly but it was time to eat a little crow, but I hoped not too much.</i>

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Ya see? Rick never says Linda did ANYTHING wrong with regard to the sex chat rooms

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It is so bad and such a glorification of STUPID it is laughable.

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When she asks him to come home <b>she NEVER apologizes for the ORIGINAL incident.</b> Her marriage was on the line and decided to cut Him and hurt Him.

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and this stupid fuckwad never saw "IT". The wife's actions

... her RESPONSE to the marriage crisis SHE caused... her lack of character... her lack of integrity SHOULD of been clues.

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And by NOT seeing "IT" Rick doomed his marriage as much as the cheating cunt whore wife did

Meandering story, fake tricky ending, and the punctuation and spelling errors... a trusting 'sole?' So the bottom of his shoe wasn't suspicious? Your kidding me, right? (Sorry, that should have been "you're"...)<p>Bad, bad, bad.

You write some real stinkers, but that had to be one of the worst.

<p>Trust me when I say I understand how painful it can be to post a story.</p>

<p>But let me also say, while your story here was a very good improvement, the premise killed it again. And I'm going to have to go with Harry</p>

<p>You introduced a couple things, but then you abandoned them. For example, you call the husband's reaction by getting angry macho, but you have the wife pleasuring herself while engaging in character assassination of her husband on a website on the computer away from the husband while she's in a chat room. Then you have the husband ask to see what's she's doing, but she tells him to get his own PC.</p>

<p>So he finds out she degrading him, even though she calls it a fantasy, and she never really apologizes for that, but she does tell him he invaded her privacy, which you have him thoroughly apologizing for in his mind for doing, and the wife even asks him if he's through sulking and tells him he's acting like a little boy because he left her for all the lies she was telling. But even the character notes that she never really apologized for the reason he left, but even that point gets swept under the rug.</p>

<p>Then you have the husband saying that he's the only one that needs to eat crow <i>after</i> she tells him that he's not the father of his own children, and then <i>both</i> of them say he's off his rocker for even questioning that fact once he gets a DNA test confirming he is the father <i>after</i> she tells him he's not, because he now has to know because of the doubt she placed in his mind.</p>

<p>Then you have the wife tell him that he really hurt her and she was only striking out at him to make him feel the same way. But before he confirmed her adultery she was already hurting him left and right.</p>

<p>I guess I don't get your characters.</p>

<p>I mean the wife is over the top selfish and totally disregards her husband feelings or could careless what she says about him to others. She has zero respect for him as a man, as her husband, or as a father.</p>

<p>And your characterization of the husband is that he can't <i>wait</i> to take the abuse. It took him two months of reading that his wife was cheating on him before he did anything? Every time you wrote in the story an attempt to give him some self respect, you turn around and accuse him of trying to be macho or needing to eat crow for being wrong. Why? Its like having his wife smack him in public and having his character get mad then turn around and ask to see her hand to see if his face damaged it somehow.</p>

<p>Even before you had him confirm the cheating neither character was likable. The story had the husband, who was the victim, spend his time trying to find a way to accept the blame once he got over his mad. And the story had the wife cheating the whole time. The husband just got the "who" wrong. Even after he told her, her fantasy was too detailed to not be true, and by the end he found out it was, the wife still walked away with a new lover and without a nagging husband</p>

<p>I just didn't like either character and if I can't like them then I don't really have a story that was that enjoyable. I mean I have nothing invested in them. =(</p>

<p>Sorry</p>

-Risq

That is the way people's thought processes so most of the time. Usually one does not critically evaluate each dataum and rank them according to probable pertinence. One is slammed with doubts and believes the worst. Then we get nostalgic or scared or hopeful and trust in the best. Hubby was all over the place in his thinking because that is the way people react. Good story, well told.

<p>The story had the husband take two months. Not days, not two weeks, but two months, of jacking off and trying to sex up his wife while he thought she was maybe cheating on him.</p>

<p>Then he calls his reaction to believing her as cheating on him as him getting "Macho Stupid". Then the character himself even realizes that she never apologized for making all of this up or trying to fix it. She went on the attack and made all of her attacks personal and the character still glossed that over.</p>

<p>She didn't even quit going to the website, but stepped it up a notch while he was gone. The very thing that was putting marriage in jeopardy was the thing she couldn't walk away from like any other addict. And while there she still didn't stop with the character assassinations. The very thing she was told was what helped drive him away. And even still knowing that he still couldn't wait to take her back.</p>

<p>So where is any of that typical of what someone's thought process was??? I fully understand what happened. But the characters here aren't even atypical.</p>

<p>The wife was still only out for her and she was upset that the husband didn't play along, <i>even</i> when he thought she was cheating but he didn't have the correct proof. That was evident by the ending where the day <i>after</i> they get back she's still going out for nooner's with her boyfriend.</p>

<p>The husband may be all over the place, but he was smart enough to have questions and doubts, he was smart enough to act on them, but not smart enough to want to have them answered? That is where the pony cart stops in the middle of the road and starts to back up for me</p>

<p>Personal, just because I don't agree with you doesn't mean, speaking for myself here, that I don't get it. I get it and I still disagree with it.</p>

-Risq

you couldn't follow through with a believable story. You are getting better so keep it up.

But falls down the same way many of your stories do -- the plot. You seem to never tire of using the same convenient mechanism to carry the plot -- stupid men who are willing to accept all the responsibility and get beat down by their women until they finally are punched in the stomach enough times to finally wake up and say: "Duhh, oh, I get it dude. She really is no good. Duhh."

EB... No one is saying Rick has to be sherlock Holmes. But Rick reacted to SOMETHING the wife did: Cheat on him in sex chat Rooms. But that issue NEVER comes up when they try and reconcile.

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Saying "I am sorry I said those mean things to you"

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I am sorry I overreacted is not the main god dam fucking issue dude.

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How is it Rick apologizes for Invading the wife's privacy-- which granted was wrong-- but she never apologizes for anything over the past several MONTHS?!?

I found this interesting- "Look at my description of Rob, is it correct?" she asked.

Fran started to read what Rick had given to her and a smile came over her face.

Now, I'm not sure Slirpuff intended this to be a clue, but how did Lisa know the description was incorrect? I'm assuming Lisa's describing Rob's privates otherwise the husband would know the description from Lisa's story didn't match Rob in real life if all she was describing height, weight, etc.

Slirpuff, you should just continue to write your stories any way you like and disregard nasty comments. Every time I read about feeling guilty for invading each other's privacy, I find it difficult to understand why one should feel guilty. Trust is the basis for a good marriage. If one spouse keeps secrets for the other, something is basically wrong. Everything should be open to be seen, heard or explored for each of them. He clearly saw that she wasn't keeping a diary and could tell from her behaviour that she was chatting on the internet and how this affected her. From there I would say all bets were off. And the rest is history. His suspicion was confirmed, and even if given a second chance, she messed it up. Slirpuff, a very good story. Please write many more.

The style of writing was interesting for the most part. The wife's reactions were so far out on a limb that it was hard to believe in her character and how the husband could possibly accept her so easily. For someone who likes the sudden semi-surprise ending, these stories probably fit well. I find myself interested enough to keep reading to see how it turns out, but disappointed by the set-up and rushed ending.

You write like you are out of breath!! Lucky for me that's the way I read.

you write about have the ability to read what is going on around them. I suppose you would not have much of a plot if your husband had an IQ higher than 70, because they would see all the clues you lay out, the obvious lies and misdirections of the wives you create. I challenge you to try to write a story where a very intelligent husband picks up quickly on symptoms and reacts appropriately and rapidly to end it all one way or the other. And do not use the old chestnut that love blinds the husband. The wives your create are not exactly braintrusts themselves and are falling all over themselves as they cheat leaving such a highway of clues and mistakes that if your readers catch on early, so would the husband. Maybe pit a very intelligent wife against a very intelligent husband. I agree your writing has improved with the help of your editors, though they too have missed a couple things -- buy OMG the writing has made quantum leaps in quality.

The structure of the story is as bad as the story itself.

Just one comment about her actions in this story. She seems to be at least a half-way normal woman with some brains. If she is, why was she still screwing around if she was trying to smooth things over with her husband? You would expect that a fairly intellegent person would 'lay low for a while' to protect thier interests wouldn't you?

Simple49er, it really is simple. When you trust your spouse, you can be blind for some time. You may not see the clues immediately but eventually (and this may vary from person to person) I firmly believe the other half pick up on it. In this story he had "this feeling", started to "see" the clues that something was going on, did what he had to do to get more information and acted upon. The part I did not like per sé was the escalation and the temporary reunion, but so what, it's not my story. I believe Harry said it, how could she know her description of the neigbour was not correct. Why should the husband be belittled time after time if she didn't mean it to some extent, etc... I wouldn't have taken her back and wouldn't have played the escalation game too. Instead, I would have investigated from the beginning to look for confirmation of what was really going on. Then there wouldn't have been any doubt.

Neither bahavor was even remotely believable. The ending was a rushed attempt to throw a twist into a poorly written story. You basic premise that anyone in this entire world would think that the wife has some right to privacy when she is belittling the husband and discussing their sex life is just child like... I don't even know a single woman who would have the gaul to react that way, let alone some ass of a husband who would actually feel he needs to apologize.

Nothing believable here. Maybe this should be Scfi and they live on another planet where people typically act like this.

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Ya know, this guy has improved a thousand times since he started writing, but do any of you a_ _ holes give him the slightest bit of credit? Hell no, all you seem to do is want to cut him down more. What's with you, anyway? He ain't gonna ever get better if all you do is bitch and complain. In case you don't get it, this site is a place where AMATEURS submit. If you demand professional grade literature, visit your local library, for God's sake.

fine tale, told by Slirpuff. The negeative commenters don't like the characters, the content or the writing style. Hmmm, but I'm willing to bet the "silly bastards" will be back the next time writing the same silly ass comments. Seems the only one growing as a writer is Slirpuff. Gives me a story a little different than the other stories available here at the LIT. Keep the stories comin', I'm bettin' that most of negative commenters probably are NOT allowed to bitch and moan to their better half at home, so they come here to vent! CHEERS

we have either readers who overanalyze the characters or worry to death about an editorial mistake. If they would step back and look at the story on a basic level they would realize what a great story this is (especially compared to a typical loving wives story). First, you get an average joe who loves his wife to death but she has a secret life after dark. He violstes her privacy and lo, he finds out that she is a totally different person. That is key! Rick senses that something is wrong which is why he broke into her computer in the first place. Some commenters complain that he took 2 months to confront her. Hell, he was clearly in the wrong because she made it clear that her internet activity was her personal diary so stay out. He had no proof that she was cheating. Are the authors on this website cheating on their spouse when they write a story which might be true? You could logically argue that he should have gotten real proof but he was caught in a trap. If she was not cheating which he did not want to believe true then he damages his relationship with Lisa when she finds out. She would never trust him again. Some people are privacy fanatics. If she was cheating and the stories were true then she was making a fool out of him. All of her stories were about past events so he could not catch her in the act. Was he going to hide in Carlos's shop waiting for her next wax job? So Rick explodes in a rage because she is also putting him down in her stories. Then Slirpuff does something interesting with Lisa. Instead of Lisa trying to understand how she hurt Rick she goes on the attack but we, the readers do not know if this is righteous anger or she is hiding her comtempt of Rick. Rick tries to check out the stories involving Rob and Carlos and he is proved wrong. Now if you are Rick you feel pretty foolish now since he went off in a rage, had no proof of cheating and looks like he going to lose his kids and wife over this overreaction. So Rick like most people in that situation eats crow and begs forgiveness hoping to repair the damage. Now in a master stroke, Slirpuff have Rick find out the truth why things were off with Lisa. By the way, cheating through nooners are almost impossible to detect because the workplace is great cover (some businesses rent hotel rooms for offsite meetings). Thanks Slirpuff for an outstanding story! What about this story from Lisa's POV?

No need to repeat what has already been stated.

or ending.Twists should have some resolution. Interesting read though-pistolopackinpete

Not bad, but the ending was lacking. you can do a much better job than this.

He should have tailed her or had someone do it in the beginning when he finally found access to her computer. Why the hell she would try to get him back when she was screwing around amazes me. The fact that she wrote some things in her chat about size and ass fucking suggested she was doing something with someone.

Anyway, he should have exposed her to her family, friends and employer and not just because she cheated but because of the mental cruelty she inflicted on him. She needs her ass kicked, you don't need or want your husband or respect him, own up to it and move on.

Write an Epilogue or chapter 2, make her pay for the way she went about her life with him, he is just a not too swift guy that loved his wife, too bad, sad....but - smack the bitch!!!

i thought you were starting to get the hang of writing. guess not. ok?

I would have had the bitch and her boyfriend fired and disgraced.

shuddered not shuttered. Shuttered is for closing the windows.

...did he make it all that time without having someone follow her to see if there was anything going on, just reading Chats'? Oh well, I felt terrible for the guy but damn glad he didn't wimp out in the end.

How about anEpilogue or Sequel to this story? One of your respondees suggested waiting for the divorce to be final and then suing her employer after all and getting full custody of the children...huh? What do you think. You're good, trust me, we'll all like it!!!!

All the negitive comments are being made after the fact. He should have done this, or he could have done that! Really life would be a breeze if that were so, but alas it isn't so cut and dried.

Good work Slirpuff an enjoyable read.

Amanda

I couldn't really see anything that he could really do differently because it wasn't an extremely stupid thing that he did - he just went with the flow with whatever was on his mind. Sometimes you can't help it being childish. I find it surprising that she goes from fantasising to actually cheating though..

Closed this one very fast .... I would have liked alittle for time spent on the ending you coded it off way too fast didn't get any satisfaction from his side of events

He just didn't end it the way it should have ended. She got off way too easy!

...when she actually started cheating. They were enough in love and had two children so...when did she start cheating - after he got ticked and walked out or - after she figured he was Golden Tongue.

Too bad the story is complete, I would like to have had more info. Sadly, this WAS a good and happy marriage for awhile. Sad also that some women, out of the clear blue, start cheating for - who the hell knows, in this case maybe the excitement from chatting with cheaters...anyway - it would have been good to know.

Did he push her, give her reason by way of his leaving or did she progress to cheating just from chatting, then telling stories and then getting kinky to the point of going ahead with cheating.

Okay, by the way she calmly went to lunch at the motel, allowed the guy to play with her ass, we have to realize that this was not new to her.

Good story, just wish.........

It was when she became more interested in her chat room buddies than her husband.

we needed to know the rest, how long, when it started, any others etc. You really left us hanging and your story would have been even better. I hate it when I'm left guessing!

Your ideas are generally first rate.* This opened in an interesting way but it got stuck.

I thought I had figured it out, but then you put the twist in the end, which caught me off guard.

I would have prefered to see the last cheating bit developed a bit more, but it is your story.

I hope you are still writing. I haven't seen anything for a while

*There are still a varitey of spelling and grammar mistakes in there, but you've improved radically in this regard. I say this because of the improvement. Now it's very occasional. You 'peek' at someone, not 'peak'. I see this a lot.

The author stated: "A grain of sand weighs some where in the area of a couple of grams. Approximately how many grains of sand do you think it would take to crush a man? I'm a pretty big guy and could probably handle a couple hundred thousand grains of sand at least."

If an author is going to make such obviously false and stupid statements, the story deserves a 1* rating and therefore I rated it 1*.

As the term is used by geologists, sand particles range in diameter from 0.0625mm (or 1⁄16 mm) to 2 mm. The specific gravity of lose sand is approximately 2 so a cc of lose sand would weigh about 2 grams. Therefore, in theory, a cc of sand could contain from 125 to 4 million grains of sand. On average, there are going to be far more than 10,000 grains of sand in a cc. However, given the author the benefit of the doubt and say the sand was handpicked to select the maximum size it would still take about 63 grains of sand to weigh 1 gram.

It would take much more than 300 kg to crush a large man and so certainly it would take anywhere from 20 million (if only the largest grains of sand were selected) to several billion grains of sand to crush a large man and many times more than the false quantity stated by the author. On average, 200,000 grains of sand would not weigh an ounce.

If an author is stupid enough to write about subjects he or she knows nothing about, at the very lease, he or she should Google.

Everyone has a right to their fantasies and by invading her privacy he was a stupid low down lying cheater. Invading her privacy is the act of the lowest of scum and reading her private fantasies is equal to reading her thought. No marriage or even civilization could not survive if people could read minds because everyone has crazy thoughts that they never act on. Even the most loving wife will sometimes think "I'd like to cut his dick off" or sometimes the husband think "I'd like to bash her face in." Of course the thoughts are crazy and we would never act on them but they do occur.

Since he filed for divorce and invaded her privacy and fantasies and in effect was a liar and a cheater, she was driven to having an affair. It was her right to have an affair and the affair never would have happened if he had been a reasonable and loving husband. After he proved that he would be a loving husband, she would have terminated the affair and again she would be the perfect wife.

However, he never proved that he would be a loving husband and instead he was a sneaky jerk. He could have made his presence known and she would not have gone to the motel but "NO" he preferred to be sneaky and violate her privacy again.

Sadly he got off far too easy. However, he was extremely lucky to have had such a wonderful wife and, now with all his suspicious nature the best he will be able to do is marry a big woman. She, having learned how to recognize such selfish jerks, will do better and marry an upgrade.

Likely you, too, are a lying cheating asshole. She is a SLUT and should be kicked to the curve. Fantasies HELL. NO one in a marriage has a right to the kind of shit she was doing. FUCK her (and you).

You're a complete douchebag. Like seriously, you take shit way too seriously. If you think that the " loving wife" had a right to cheat then you are seriously misguided. The main character had his flaws, as all guys do, but the wife was being overtly secretive. He has a right to know that his wife's a cheating slut, just like I have the right to know you're a dumbass

Just a little to long I found myself getting bored. Thanks for sharing.

The narrator had been cut off or placed on starvation rations, sexually . The thing that is most obviously out of kilter is she is on the laptop till 4 am . That's proboble cause .

You want privacy -,stay single or perform up to reasonable expectations as a allegedlly loving spouse . He had every right to investigate WTF was patently askew under his roof . End of story .

we alredy have slut in story we dont need her (U) outside

i have read lot of comments from DWornock and i m 100% sure DWornock is whore and probably divorce or her husband is cuckold

u know now people (slut & etc) always think what they do is right . and if u guys have read DWornock's comment he always take slut/wife's side

every one who read this story can anyone tell me after u read this story u think wife was perfect and all blame is husband's

I like the story and thought it was good. The only thing I think could of made it better is when the husband found out she really was a cheating whore he should have kicked her far harder to the curb. Taken her for everything and got the kids. The ending was probably what would really happen but I read for entertainment and kicking the whore to curb and taking everything would be a better read.

Dwornock pollutes this site, can heshe be banned?

when you know your right, case closed. TK U MLJ LV NV

I would have liked it much more if the real lover had been foreshadowed by her including his real antics along with the fictitious antics of her non-lovers. More of the false ones should have been demonstrably false if Hubby had done better homework! I think something like that would have made the 'real lover segment' at the end tie into the tale better. (Maybe, BTW, he really DID get cream-pied!)

you had him doing the right thing by dumping the whore. Instead of hiring a PI or following the slut yourself you, you fall for the lies and take her back only to find out she was the whore you though she was. And before I would move out of my house, I would burn that bitch down.

As if Huecuck could tell Slirpuff how to write a story when he doesn't even have a GED. He can instruct Slirpuff on how to write a story when he learns to spell and form complete sentences.

Up until the end, I thought we had a story about misunderstandings. First, the wife got carried away in her chat rooms. Then the husband snooped when he shouldn't have. The husband went off half-cocked thinking the stories were proof of her infidelity when he really should have searched for some real proof first. He made a fool of himself and his wife by confronting his neighbor.

They had a blow up, her being mad that he snooped and him still believing she was cheating. He was acting childish. At that point he should have talked to her about her stories and his concerns instead of just leaving.

They began dueling in the chat room, disrespecting each other. Neither ever really apologized for that fully.

Finally he realized that he really did not have any proof and what he knew to date led him to believe they were all just fantasies. He tucked his tail between his legs and they reconciled. There should have been more apologies from both at that point.

Now here is where I have a real problem with the story. At that point, I really do not remember reading anything that would indicate that she was having an affair with this Mark guy who was evidently a co-worker. There was a Mark in the chat room but none of her stories were about him. It seemed like you just pulled that out of the air to provide the twist in the end.

On top of that, there was no information about why she did it, when it started or how long it had gone on. For all we know, it started when he was off on the divorce rampage and she might have thought it was over and that he really was fucking those other girls. She could have been ending it at the hotel room that day because she had gotten back together with her husband. But of course he went off again without intelligently confronting her or gathering more information. We don't know if she did not fight it because she had been caught red handed in a long term affair or if she just did not want to put up with the bullshit any more.

Needless to say, the twist at the end was less than satisfying to me. All in all it left me feeling like this was a story about two people who need to live alone because neither one is capable of an adult relationship.

One additional note. In the beginning you made big deal about the effect of his wife piling on a lot of lies. However, the only obvious lie that I saw was her telling him she was writing in a journal rather than visiting a chat room. Pretty small potatoes for such a buildup.

why capitulate and give in and not carry on the good fight. TK U MLJ LV NV

Great story. The slut cheating wife had here husband convinced that everything was a fantasy but in the end he found out otherwise. Fucking cheating whore slut skank wife. She should die in extreme pain. Anybody who takes exception with this GO FUCK YOURSELF

Sometime ther are certain people that just need killing

while she was gone he should have gone in the house and set up and accidental house fire. Takes care of the wife getting the house. There are a few other things that could make her life living hell but the best one is as soon as the divorce is final send the pictures to her company along with a lawsuit on the company and send the pictures to all her friends and relatives. Revenge doesnt have to happen before the divorce, lol.

is still disrespect. Online fantasies is one thing but why use his real name and put him down in her stories. Then her e-mails were designed to further drive him away rather than bring him back. At first, you view her a victim but then the ending shows what kind of woman she is. She had just had David and she starts writing her messages to her lover using the laptop he bought her. No doubt the affair started when she told Mark about the laptop and then he got her interested in the chatroom. Several lunches and sexy stories later she is fucking Mark. Now she has to keep her laptop under lock and key because hubby must never know. When he finds out instead of being sorry that she hurt him in her portrayals of him she goes on the attack. Hell, she is more sorry to her neighbor about her stories than writing how she fed Rick part of a cream pie. I wonder would a story from Lisa's POV be interesting. Thanks for a great story!

I've said this before and I'll say it again: what makes a Slirpuff story work is the women.

Too often in Lit stories, they are either brazen sluts who hate their husbands (or at least are incredibly emotionally disconnected from them) AND/OR fawning sychophants ("Please let me lick the bottom of your shoe if you come back")

The women who get angry are angry because they are wrong.

This woman was angry (for the most part) because she was offended (I am cutting out the cheating). This read as realistic to me.

People say incredibly stupid and hurtful things...and don't know how to pull back from the edge. This wife was a bit over the top...but consider this: If she was pure as the driven snow, and her husband in short order hacked into her computer, accused her of being a slut, and denied paternity of his kids while slapping her with a divorce suit, YOU'D have a righteous anger too!

Some of the above she drove. Others...well...I think she has an unrealistic expectation of privacy in a marriage. I have had my wife blow up and say hurtful things when she's mad. She has an ego. She can be offended. She is a human being.

Only very mature people don't immmediately strike back.

Wow, this is one of those few cases where the victim husband is every bit the skank his cheating wife is. If my wife ever pulled the shit on me for my fantasies that he pulled on his wife for hers, spying and shit like that, her ass would be on the curb. The only reason he found out about her REAL cheating was because he walked into it, not by spying.

That shit is as quick a way to destroy a marriage as allowing a cock where it doesn't belong.

A first I was really happy that it was supposedly just fantasy, then you flat out surprised me. Very well written. I would not have gone back with her even if it was just fantasy. She belittled him in a public forum. That should have been his clue that she was unfaithful. Five stars!

A few grams? Those are stones, not grains of sand.

He had every right to look into what she was doing. After all it was proven that she is a lying Cheating Cunt. I just wish he had some balls and fucked her and her lovers up. Who cares if the lover was bigger. Nothing a Louisville slugger across the back of his head couldn't cure. Sometimes violence can be very therapeutic..

I love a reconciliation story, but I liked this one. I am upset with the wife for one reason. She could have just left well enough alone and completed the divorce. Instead, she dragged it out until she was caught. Then she signed the papers with no problem. That to me is deception on another level. It would have been easier on everyone if she chose the path that was already in motion and avoided further hurt. Instead it seemed like she went out of her way to deceive him. Shameful. Great story.

...but I felt you rushed a bit there. The last half page could have been extended. Nevertheless: I really enjoyed this one. Thanks.

2nd liar needs proof, TK U MLJ LV NV

...if you paid close attention to the story. The wife was obviously cheating the whole time, including with the neighbor Rob. As someone already stated, something that really stuck out immediately as I was reading was how exactly was it that Lisa knew that her description of the neighbor's husband's equipment wasn't correct? She'd seen it with her own eyes. I also suppose he was intended to believe that soaking in an ice bath to tighten her vagina was a "fantasy" of hers? Certainly sounds fantastic.

Then there was the fact that her "fantasies" tended to line up with her real life actions with her husband, such as the "cream pie" incident. Carlos either pretends to be gay or is bisexual, but the author leaves enough hints to let us know it was actually going on. She even told her husband that Carlos called him a "wimp" while apologizing. She probably left out the word "cuck."

The most entertaining part, to me, is her absurd, fanatical expectation of privacy...you know, so that she may continue to "privately" share the most intimate details of her and her husband's sex life with total strangers, including using his real name and disparagingly describing his equipment. Not that all of them (Mark) were actually strangers...

She had been (physically) cheating, not just on the internet, even before he got her the laptop. Thank you, Slirpuff, for an interesting story, ripe with sneaky little clues for those who read closely.

It just had too much negativity to grasp. First sign of cheating should've been enough to evoke a reaction and nuclear confrontation. Two children and a legacy together was enough to fight for the relationship on both parties but never happened. Insults and genital size seemed to propel the plot.

Everyone believed her dumb ass lies, she was lying the whole time and in the end she got what she deserved. He was a wimp from the start and she took advantage of that.

I believed throughout it was a case of mistaken and misspoken words. what an ending. I guess she was quoting her experiences on this affair. What a slut, got what she deserved. I would have sent the evidence to her bosses and sued anyways. All for what? the children, a broken home, for what? Great Story

And when the Divorce was final, and I was off the hook for alimony, I sent the pic to their boss anyway, and they were both fired.

Still a 5 Star read with a wimp hubby manning up and not taking any shit once he had concrete proof.

Twice read, still great. My take again, the wife was upset over his invasion of her privacy? Imagine, had he hired a PI to simply follow her he would have known from the start of her affair. Yes I agree I would have made her affair with her employers public after all she did think of him as a stupid man, not a husband. A true to earth story, about consequences of adultery. Well done 5 stars well earned

Finish your goddamn stories!

Fantasies should be a way of making a couple's sex life better not worse... So why would she expect him to believe that's all they were...?

And why fight so hard to try to get him back if she really WAS fooling around...?

What a head case she turned out to be...

After what she caused him to go through...? "Sorry Dear, I guess me saying I wouldn't give your boss those pictures if you dropped the alimony request was just a fantasy of mine... Don't you prefer the reality...?"

Even IF she wasn`t cheating, the level of disrespect and contempt she showed in her writing about him merited a divorce. Cheating aside, as soon as he read what she was writing he should have filed and kicked her out. To think that he was going to let her off the hook and take her back, just because he confirmed that Carlos wasn`t fucking her, is sickening. No normal person would accept that kind of disrespectful, vitriolic abuse, and if he was going to, then he is every bit the loser his cunt wife described!

some comments said that they didn`t see the ending coming. With the amount of shit she was espousing about her husband, it was quite obvious that she had nothing but contempt for him, so it would logically follow that she would be a cheating slut!

It is a story and with a surprising twist for the ending. Rather enjoyable. This fellow certainly was not a wimp. I agree a PI could have saved him some time and helped him cut through his wife's smokescreen.

George in Omaha

for a few hundred bucks you could have her face fucked so bad no one would consider anything with her.

Maybe I'm slow, but I certainly didn't see it coming!

@krosis666, I don't totally agree. As it turns out, you are correct, but IF she wasn't cheating and it was truly fantasy, then those statements are relatively harmless.

Lisa left the relationship as soon as she started to spend time online "living out" her fantasies. Cheating was inevitable. Having the chat buddies help intensify her fantasies only helped to make them need to become more than simply desires. They, as a group, empowered those fantasies into an addiction. He was right when he realized she didn't say sorry, don't leave or here's the truth.

the bitch should end up dead in a gutter somewhere.

disaster awaits no matter the outcome. TK U MLJ LV NV

I really thought this was gonna be a redemption/miscommunication fic. I thought that was how the writing was - nice to be surprised even if it was a sad ending.

Sometimes, SP uses and editor. Not this time, obviously.

Very well handled. Love your stories.

I liked it, but after a lot of fantasy, she wanted the real thing...And he was a wimp after all as her hairdresser said...almost no revenge at all...He should have sent the picture to her boss and sue the firm for what both were doing...

send the pics to everyone in the company, and every family member and neighbor. I don't normally condone hitting a woman, but there are exceptions to everything.

Cheating whores, sluts of either sex, need to be portrayed in public as they are. Cheating good for nothing disease peddlers.