All Comments on 'My Best Friend Little Sister Ch. 02'

Great second part, please continue it.

For example, quotation marks and possessives (e.g., Crystal's sister) are NOT optional.

The story was good, the action hot - but it was a bit hard to read with all the spelling, punctuation, and other errors. Sort those out and make it longer, and your writing will be downright fantastic.<br><br>

One small logic hole in the story: Why did Crystal think it was her best friend's panties under the couch instead of her sister's, who lived there?<br><br>

Anyway, I imagined that Lisa answered, "Nikki says that they are hers." Oops.

As in other comments - unreadable!

I accept that there were spelling and grammatical errors but regardless of that the story idea was great and it made a good read. Why not continue with the story

love the story just wish the next part was out :'(

Sorry, but all I can say about this is that if you want to be a writer, then you need to learn a lot about good grammar. At present, your grasp of grammar is very shaky and could spoil even the very best of stories.

I would love to hear more about this story.