by X_Christina_X
For example, quotation marks and possessives (e.g., Crystal's sister) are NOT optional.
The story was good, the action hot - but it was a bit hard to read with all the spelling, punctuation, and other errors. Sort those out and make it longer, and your writing will be downright fantastic.<br><br>
One small logic hole in the story: Why did Crystal think it was her best friend's panties under the couch instead of her sister's, who lived there?<br><br>
Anyway, I imagined that Lisa answered, "Nikki says that they are hers." Oops.
I accept that there were spelling and grammatical errors but regardless of that the story idea was great and it made a good read. Why not continue with the story
Sorry, but all I can say about this is that if you want to be a writer, then you need to learn a lot about good grammar. At present, your grasp of grammar is very shaky and could spoil even the very best of stories.