All Comments on 'Santa Specials'

by steamoil

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AnonymousAnonymousover 14 years ago
Too much railway

Way too much work gone into establishing that you know a bit of railway terminology. Otherwise, not a bad read.

TheDogman69TheDogman69over 14 years ago
waht

for some reason i thought she was a dude till 4 paragraphs from the end.

AnonymousAnonymousover 13 years ago
Same here

Agreed to both comments to much train lingo and you really could have spent more time on your main character I was also very confused about the sex of her until the end.

steamoilsteamoilover 13 years agoAuthor
On the nail

The story started off as a normal one, with the main character as a male. However, it suddenly took a twist, as stories do, when I realised that the sex of the main character had not been explicitly stated. From then on, I tried to write it as if the character could be either, so that the story contained a surprise a few sentences from the end. It worked!! Thank you.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 8 years ago
Drinking from the furry cup.

Bloody swizz - turning out to be carpet munchers.

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