by badtobadone
You didn't use quotations for character dialogue. Laziness is what it is.
my stepdaughter lo9oks so sexy i want her to wank me onto her taught belly
i want my father to fuck me in my sleep so if i wake up and end up enjoying it i can call it rape
Do it again, but get her to wear a nice pair of tight navy blue gym knickers - they should turn you on like mad when you struggle to get it inside her
This sounds like it was written by a real amateur. Where's the " " around the conversation? Too rushed; not enough details about the characters; just plain too amateur. Better luck next time.
Not enough build-up. I like the story line mainly because I have fantasies of my 38 year old stepdaughter. Mostly the story was too short. You probably should have combined all parts into one. I'll still give you 5 stars for the idea. Lacks creativity though. I think most of us are looking for something a little bit different.