Loved the story and the way you ended it made it a special story and a very good read.
A better finish would be both girls not going on the pill. They should keep having more babies. They should only stop they both turn 40.
I liked the characters and plot line. The grammar was a little loose in places, so you might consider getting an editor to help smooth things out. Might be willing to help out there if you don't have anyone else to help you with that.
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Nice Finish
Loved the story and the way you ended it made it a special story and a very good read.
A Best Finish
A better finish would be both girls not going on the pill. They should keep having more babies. They should only stop they both turn 40.
Good Read
I liked the characters and plot line. The grammar was a little loose in places, so you might consider getting an editor to help smooth things out. Might be willing to help out there if you don't have anyone else to help you with that.
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