All Comments on 'We Made A Really Big Mistake'

Probably if he had told her before she cheated, she would have divorced him. He really should not have left the night that she cheated, it would have been an ideal moment for her to try to explain herself and start understanding human nature since she did not at the time know he had cheated. It worked out but it was very lucky.

I have never seen a guy make so many mistakes with axioms, metaphors, saws, sayings, pearls of wisdom, etc. This story never really went anywhere and the resolution is weak. The wife was miserable and the husband spineless.

have kids They are both to stupid and are both alcoholics. Let him live with her, saves somebody else from marrying the piece of trash. By the way he saved her that night, but how many nights before that was she getting laid? She wouldnt know she was drunk.

cost level. Yes he should leave her the night she cheated. His mistake was coming back again. Yes he cheated but I havent heard anything about medical testing on either of them so we will suppose neither one of them had any concerns about risk or exposure, just plain stupid. He should have never come home to his wife and told her what happened. She could have then made the choice to have him at home or not. To bad neither one of them have any morals, character, or ethics.

I think this is one of the most realistic stories posted lately. It is really easy to screw a relationship up, keep escalating the problems, and let alcohol numb the pain. Been there, done that. Most of the people I know who have been through this were not successful in reconciling, but I suppose it is possible. I think this was a credible scenario - especially the love both of these people had for their son.

<p>....but you seem to be going downhill so fast lately I find myself re-evaluating my decision</p>

<p>Here's one thing that is so overused I'm surprised that anyone who thinks like this isn't seeing a shrink. It's the theory that you have to fight for someone after they cheat on you.</p>

<p>Here's another way to think if it: One day you come home and the wife has given away the family cow. Now you liked that cow and it did things for you and the family. The wife tells you that you weren't really using it anyway so she gave it away, but if you want it back go fight the guy down the road who she gave it to for it and if you the fight win it's yours.</p>

<p>Would you do something caveman crazy like that? Who would and wouldn't be seen as crazy? And if you <i>actually</i> thought about it aren't you a <i>touch</i> crazy that you would feel fighting someone for something that was already yours, that your mate was giving away for free, was a correct response <i><b>after</b></i> it's gone? And what does that say about her?</p>

<p>So why in the name of god would someone fight for someone who's sleeping <i>bare back</i> with strangers in this day and age?? At least he had a physical before they had sex again, and you wrote it so he just dived right into a stranger leavings like there wasn't anything wrong with that</p>

<p>I liked at first you had him trying to take some responsibility for his actions. That made sense and started to make me like him as a person, while flawed, was trying to find a way to do the right thing</p>

<p>But then you started him off taking <i><b>ALL</b></i> the blame.</p>

<p>He pointed out that Shannon cheated on him before she ever knew he cheated. But you let him keep the blame for even that! You defined her character as someone who not only wouldn't cheat, but despised men who cheated on their wives. Then you wrote her as a cheater who didn't feel any remorse for it. Him you made impotent for his cheating, her you made attack him at every turn and made it his fault she became a lush and cheated on him without knowing what he did.</p>

<p>Then you wrote it so that everyone ganged up on him in his life for that. His family (his mother couldn't wait to ream him even though Shannon was also doing it), his co-workers (his secretary??), and his wife. Everyone seemed to think he was the lowest human being for his "unplanned" lapse. But his wife, who brought home her lover, who berated him at every turn, who slapped him for saying what she was, she's the innocent party??</p>

<p>You started off Steve as likable, but then you trashed him by letting him sit on the sidelines and take all the crap from everyone, including his mentally, physically, and emotionally abusive wife, and all you had him do is sit there and say "<i>Yep Shannon wouldn't have rubbed my face in what she did if <b>I</b> hadn't done it first. Never mind she didn't actually know I cheated, its still my fault she did it</i>" and you kept having him go back for more each and every time.</p>

<p>Shannon was purely unlikable as sanctimonious as she was. You wrote her as speaking out of both sides of her mouth. He was worse than her because he cheated, but she didn't know she just assumed so she did it. But cheating was wrong, except in her case where she was getting even before she knew what was going on. He was a snake for leaving his family after she brought a lover home to sleep with her in their bed, but not her for her heavy drinking and bringing said lover home. He was wrong for not telling her about his promotion, but not her for getting drunk and dirty dancing with his co-workers at his promotion party. He was wrong for calling her a slut for what she was doing, but not her for actually <i>doing</i> what he was pointing out she was doing</p>

<p>What happened to you? Why are you writing story were the husbands are less than human? I'm not saying that they need to be caveman's who beat and drag their wives around by their hair, but what the heck?</p>

<p>What's going on with your stories where you make them such <i>wimps</i> lately that they are carrying their wives tampons and sanitary napkins, all while asking if their wives are now done enjoying their latest lover in their marital bed yet. Because they agree with the wife that her taking a lover was the valid and correct response to this one time they forgot to put down the toilet seat, and they also agree with her that this would teach them to not forget next time.</p>

<p>I just don't understand your though process lately</p>

-Risq

Boring came close, dreary fits better.

Delete about two thirds of it, turn it into a short and maybe?

Naw.

that statement is staggering as well as Delusional

I really liked this - it was nearer to what real people do than most other stories I've read. Shame, guilt, ego and alcohol make poor bedfellows at the best of times but in this case there was almost no way back for them until one or the other said sorry - communication really IS everything in the end.

That said, without knowing why he was acting like he was she was clearly very much in the wrong to assume things when she went out with someone else - but then so was he to get sucked in (!) to someone else's problems like he did. So, enough fault and guilt to cover all.

Good story Slirpuff - I like your stories and I think this is your best story yet. You always try to give us something a little different - enough variation in plot to keep entertaining us. I look forward to seeing your name as author on new stories.

Please keep up the good work. Oh, and by the way, I know your grammar and syntax aren't the best but you are always improving. I didn't notice a POV discrepancy in this one - that's improved tremendously too - if there was one I missed it because I was enjoying the read. Your talent is more than enough to compensate for any such errors. Other readers may wish to nitpick about such stuff and, indeed, I suppose it is their right (Yawn, scratch scratch) - personally I wish they'd go and read a dictionary and a grammar book - then they could have really dead reads to their hearts' content.

Thanks once again,

Norman

I'm a fan but this story just doesn't do it for me. The technical problems are for you and your editor to iron out but they didn't detract from the story, at least for me. I normally don't comment on characters or their actions but this time I will. Husband was fine until she brought the guy home and even though he threw the guy out he was less than a man. He blamed himself for everything even though she was the one cheating. I think you sold both characters short and made them unrealistic. Last thing, you can't please everyone so just keep writing for yourself. If you really liked this story then that's what matters. Thanks for your hard work

who thinks this is a great story. What the hell has happened to all the non idiot non faghgots in the UK?

are they all dead?

Must be .

Lets review... and note the lack of consistency and lack of any explanation

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The story opens with a <b>wife who is deeply and strongly committed to the idea that ANY Cheating for ANY reason --even at one time!!! - is COMPLETELY unacceptable.</b> Yet after a short interval of 4 months without having any sex from her husband ...she is seeing numerous other men at Bars getting drunk and fucking them... even to the point of bringing one of them home -- Roger-- to rub her husband's face it.

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Consistent? Of course not but then it IS a SLIRPUFF story so consistency is not something anyone should look forward to.

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so Now after several weeks/ a few months apart they sort of reconcile... so they attend a big party for Him based on his promotion. The wife is consistently drunk so he doesnt tell her exactly WHY the party is being thrown for him and his promotion. So because of this relatively minor incident the wife she freaks out and throws a scene and decides to file for divorce....????

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Once again even though she is STILL married she is seeing and fucking other men.

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Again the lack of shattering consistency and even the basic explanations makes this whole premise and whole story absurd.

An individual who does not believe in cheating, if they begin to believe the other is, does not go out and become a cheater. They stand up and yell, fight, throw the other to the curb, but they do not violate their own beliefs that quickly, and btw, four months is damn quick. She does not fight for her marriage, she fights her husband. He on the other hand is the personification of a wimp....he gets lead astray and then cannot man up and live with his actions. Your writing has declined like you are searching for a position to take or trying to cater to too many critics,...or well something. This story had decent elements, and could have been very good, but it was not.

She's a vindictive bitch, he should have gotten back in to her good graces and then arranged to have her kidnapped and then skinned and gutted alive.......kill the bitch. Your stories get worse as you go

HARRY, you don't get fucked anymore do you? That's why you are such a fucking old lonely man that reads these stories and thinks there are REAL! Oh and READ the FUCKING CUCKOLD WIMP stories by the likes of Angelcuck, Bakeboss. Goodhusband and any number of CUCKOLD WIMP FUCKING writers from the land of UNCLE FUCKING SAM. EVEN HDK wrote a CUCKOLD story so don't give us the BULLSHIT about just English readers and writers being WIMPS and CUCKS I bet it's been YEARS since your tiny prick went into your WIFES pussy! So shut the fuck up OLD man. Do what you do best and write the fucking critique on the FUCKING story. That's all your good for YOUR American Arsehole!

About strange people. It seems recently that Slirpuff develops every story from two people who do not talk to each other, bad things happen, and then they realize they need to talk to each other.

because this was a terrible story and like most of the bs stories, you lay allll the blame on the man. sure, he fucked up, and then he acted like he cheated. but at least it was only once and he sure as hell didnt bring home someone to rub his wifes face in it. also, why is everybody ignoring how it was clearly stated and repeated many times how his wife tolerated no cheating, and i mean absolutely no cheating of any kind. but its okay for her to get stupid drunk, fuck some stranger and then bring him home to fuck him again in front of her husband because she hasnt had sex in four months. jesus, it only took four months and then bam! she disregards her black and white views and enters the gray area we all so love. i have to say, i agree completely with harry, woodmanone, and risq. what were you thinking when you wrote this crap? oh yea, fuck his mom, she needs to mind her own fucking business and leave him alone. why the fuck did the bitch lay it all on his shoulders? why the fuck couldnt she talk to the estranged wife at least since shes so fucking nosy. your stories just get worse with each story.

One of your typical fine stories, if a little confusing. Initially he screwed up royally with that strange amateur movie show of he and strange woman having sex. Then for months he remains impotent but refuses to explain to Shannon why he has become impotent. Then Shannon decides that if he is going to be an idiot, she might as well be one too,so she goes out and has drunken sex with stranger. From that point on they take turns being brain dead idiots filing mutual divorce papers etc. By the end of your story,it is hard to have any sympathy with either of them. By some miracle of writing you get them back together at the end of your story. Great writing, illustrating how one screw up and lack of communications can destroy a marriage. Nice job. Keep up the good work.

60 year old George

She is dead set against cheaters, had already walked away from one and the in 4 months time she is going out drinkinbg, dancing, kissing with other men and then fucking Roger. Yes, she was fed up with him but if her moral character was what you had described...she found out that with a few drinks that fucking around felt good.

Okay, he screwed up, no question, he knew, or thought he knew her attitude, about infidelity and it scared him...he didn't want to lose her! Well, she's a closet slut and I guess it didn't take much to get a few drinks of alcoholic courage and go get laid and, she had been going out for awhile. This story needed an Epilogue or maybe a 2nd chapter, he loves her but she is vindictive, tried to cuckold him, demeaned him at every chance she got...damn, cut her loose, he'll always love the woman she once was...NOT, the cheater.

No, you made the mistake in thinking you can write

Very nice story, could be and probably is real to someone out there. Don't listen to the crap posted by some of the other commenters, you do a good job, and your stories are improving as time goes along,which is all anyone can want.

Thanks,

S. C.

Shitty writing, bad story, lousy author. Fire your editor and get someone who can teach you the difference between "your" and "you're." Shit, I learned that in first grade.<p>And to those legions who think spelling, punctuation, word choice and correct usage of metaphors matter not a bit, flame away. You're just admitting you're as ignorant as this pathetic loser.

I think your writing is getting better. The story was a little convoluted, but good. I hope you ignore the folks posting her that cannot tell a story from reality.

She was so against cheating...that she cheated on her husband? How's that for hypocrisy? And he was no better. A claer conscience wasn't his issue. His problem was he didn't want his wife anymore. He really didn't, he just wasn't man enough to admit it.

This story was interesting to read; and really enjoyed it. Additionally, it was believable and I have know married couples who have gone through a comparable problem to that described in the story. Taken these facts, I think that the story rates a very good. There are those commenting here who don't like the story. Well, I guess a writer can't please everyone. Some consider Steve a wimp. I don't really know the definition of "wimp" but his actions in the story do not, in my view, deviate from the normal. After all, the hero can't always be John Wayne. continue writing your Loving Wives stories slirpuff. RAG

Assholes like you don't belong on this site. This is an amateur erotic site, not a literary club for the English language. If mistakes are made, so what, you still apparently read this story to make your shitty comment. Fuck off and go join a English Major club.<p>One thing you haven't learned since first grade is manners. I bet an asshole like you can't even write a story, except shoot off your dirty mouth.

which is why, 6 months after starting mine, its still not on the site, and still not finished. So, although I didnt like the storyline much, I dont think its reasonable for all the vitriole and amazing insults in the comments. Especially since 99% of them are from anonymous.... anonymous writes a hell of alot of comments on Literotica....anyhow, if those that shout the loudest, and the nastiest were to submit a story themselves, and identify themselves, maybe as ..."The anonymous comment writer who finally has written a story and stopped commenting on the inadequacy of others" perhaps we could see the perfect example of writing they would produce, at which point, we could all prostrate ourselves in the presence of such magnificence.

Me...I'll read a story and believe its fiction, which means...its according to the authors imagination, not the reviewer.

They both made mistakes and payed a high price for these lapse of judgements. I enjoyed reading it.

The shit storm was almost the perfect storm type, all coming together at the same time. It was said in the story, and in life many times, "Two wrongs don't make it right." Anyway, I liked this story.

crazy. Risq made most of the points but you created this character Shannon who was so anti-cheater that Steve is afraid to admit to her his actions even to the point of impotence. Ok then BLAM you created this other Shannon who is part-time lush slut. She was using the fact that she was drunk to cheat on Steve. She brings home Roger to fuck her in front of Steve and Steve makes all of this his fault? Huh! She turns his family against him and tries to use her son in her war to humiliate him. She has no remorse for her actions even though at the time she did not know that Steve had cheated on her. What a bitch! Even though they had both cheated she still treated him like shit. If she wanted him to fight for the marriage what did she do to fight for the marriage - get drunk at his promotion party and continue to go out to party with other men? Steve has to become a hero to save her from herself before she gives him a fair hearing? Bottom Line: These two people do not belong together and they should have gotten divorced. There was nothing loving about Shannon's behavior after Stve could not perfrom in the bedroom. The ending you wrote was a fantasy because sooner or later Shannon would find a reason to dump Steve. For someone who hated cheaters she found it pretty easy to become one.

character development that I've ever read. You completely missed the mark on almost every person in your story... actually quite a feat in itself.

In a perfect world, they would have acted differently, according each readers ideas, to suit them. All people make flawed decisions due to their own flawed backgrounds. A "what if", if you will. I liked it.

....consistency in the stories I read here.(Not logical consistency to the character's behavior, but to the AUTHORS PLOT DEVICES.)And if the plot outlines actions which could CONCEIVABLY happen in real life. Three readers, who often write cogent critiques lambasted this story, along with the usual herd of anons.(Well, two readers and one who does well if he avoids the sauce.)They make points well taken. But not strong points. Sure,the author cast Shannon as a hypocrite.And so????? Risq, number one she didn't fucking sleep around on him because he cheated,as YOU state. She had given up on the marriage. And this is unrealistic how????Number two,and most importantly the entire meat of the rest of your "disgruntlement" And other's also)-boils down to you didn't like the characters. TFB. How difficult is it to wrap your mind around the fact that many people will not only rake themselves over the coals but let others do it too(i.e.asshole mom), simply because THEY were the badguy first,REGARDLESS of whether it is common knowledge. MANY people are fucking superstitious to the point of accepting guilt even though there IS NO CORRELATION between their transgression and subsequent events .This is hard to see??? Sure, I'm defending an author I happen to like who has some way to go,mainly with spelling,word usage etc. But most of the criticism here boils down to "Slir, your men are too wimpy because they are so self deprecating.Stop writing, you developer of characters who are so fucked up."Huh? No,- thank-you Slirpdog for not writing neat and tidy formulaic tales of hero men and the honorable women who salute them.Your stories are fractured.Your characters are fucking spaced out.I've met many of them already on this planet.They make for an interesting diversion. Most of them are registered on this site.

something stupid. Perfect story for a perfect title. Ignore the sniveling(did I spell that write, er, right, I sure don't want that fucking english major rippin me a new asshole over spellin', hes probably one of the ones who gave HDK a new one big enough to turn an 18 wheeler around in, over his last story, apparently over a cuckold story, LOL) husbands first two paragraphs. I am answering this in the manner requested at the start of the story. IMO, communication or lack thereof, is the only problem these two lovebirds are having. I'm saying if she would spend a little more time putting the liplock on the lovebone instead of being critical of performance..... and he could give a weebit more oral stimulation, of himself, to her, instead of crying in his beer, well.... To anonymous, even the Chinese fellow, who spoke no englsh, in the now defunct HBO series 'Deadwood' knew one english word to describe someone who disagreed with him, COCKSUCKA, does that work for ya? To anonymous english major, the husband said he got brain before his mouth, thats like the horse before the cart. IT's like a three foot putt in golf, I know what he meant, so thats a fricken gimme. I had actually written more, but fuck, I hate writing, I like to read tho, and your stories are very entertaining, SP, Ignore the dipshit haters and KEEP ON SHARING.Thanks again for the stories. CHEERS!

I like your writing style. And in general, I like the way you weave your tales. In this one, your characters were both hard to like. Both main characters were so into their own selves that they would not or could not hear what others were telling them, or even try to communicate to each other. Too Bad. I liked that they got back together in the end. Thanks for sharing...

First he's too chicken to "fess up" and then he takes her back after she flaunts her fuck in front of him? She's a slut! She didn't even know he had fucked up yet, and she fucks around on him. They are not even, he's a loser, and I hate losers and sad endings.

wrong side of the tracks. My side. Did someone complain about the grammar? Fucks sake. Slirps is a Harlequin. A troubadour, a fuckin Hablador and ENTERTAINS. As does pistolfuckinpete. Top man. And those on this site that input, thanks...Mancelt.

to read the fine work of Slirpuff. I agree that neither character was very likable, but she was much less so, in my opinion, for her insults about "not getting the job done." For me, that would be worse than cheating and something from which I could not recover in a relationship. But that's just me.....Mr. Vegas.

For me, the sex scene with Chris just didn't come off with reality, and, therefore, the rest of the story never got into balance. Your basic concept was good, but the reconciliation needed more depth of characterizations and length of text to be a "sell". But, anytime I see your name under a title, I will be reading it.

Out of his desire to help a woman, he makes a mistake - not even completely, but far enough to cause his conscience to affects his physical ability to make love to his wife. At least, he was showing remorse and did love his wife.

She lasts all of 3 months (I think it was?) before making a considered decision to go out and get fucked by another man. Before that, she partied, kissed and, no doubt, got groped by god knows how many men. Not only does she fuck him, but also brings lover-boy back home to good old hubby to wipe his nose in it - and HE IS THE ONE APOLOGIZING AGAIN AND AGAIN - with or without good reason.

She is not much of a wife or lover and he should get rid of her - and, in real life, that is probably what would have happened. Who wants to live with a drunken slut.

<p>First:</p>

<p>Where is this belief that I'm out bashing Brits coming from? I have a lot of people who are close friends who are British. I personally knew a couple of hot girls who's father worked close by who were over on a visa who were British. My <i>editor</i> is British</p>

<p>I have no problems with British folks. I personally know way to many of them to have problems with them. I could careless about someone race. I have friends from every corner of the globe. And I do mean <i>personal</i> friends who I've gone to their house. I even had a buddy from Japan who I once lost out on a date to. (^_^)</p>

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<p>I've never picked on your stories for grammar or spelling. God knows I can't do it well enough myself to pick on someone else for it. Nothing kills me more than having someone pick one word out of 90,000 and going "This one single misspelled word ruined the story for me so I'm giving you the lowest rating I can." And yes I've gotten that before as well.</p>

<p>At first I liked your premises. But lately you are doing some wild stuff (The racial one just killed it for me though) that I just don't understand</p>

<p>Three:</p>

<p>The reason I didn't go for this story was two things:</p>

<p>One - You created a set of rules early on in the story that you chose not to live by. You created the wife an opponent to cheating that not only did she voice it publicly and often, she dropped her first boyfriend for getting with a stripper. She wanted to drop her husband while dating because he was just "talking" to his ex. You created someone who cheating was not an option for. Then you had her cheat and that leads to my next point</p>

<p>Two - You had her cheat and she did nothing but attack the husbands character and he took it. You developed one heck of a character initially in the husband and I really liked it.</p>

<p>You made him human. He slipped up and you had him take responsibility for it. You created him as feeling guilty enough that that's all he thought about and it made him impotent. You had him trying to find ways to tell her, but circumstances shot it down. In all at first while he was flawed, he was likable because we all would like to say that we would have the balls to own up to our mistakes</p>

<p>But for me then it went off track.</p>

<p>The wife's character dismissed her cheating as an inconsequential action. When a marriage is over you divorce each other. You don't bring in a lover, after you've already had sex with them, then cruelly taunt your husband about not being able to get it up. What if the story was different and he had brain cancer or he had some other problem they just hadn't found yet? As far as you defined it she didn't know, but she no longer cared.</p>

<p>But then you added to the story where he confessed his affair to her, and then he took <i>all</i> of what she did with her cheating as well on <i>his</i> shoulders. Where was the wife who used to believe that cheating wasn't ever an option? She cheated before she knew about him, brought her lover home, where her husband <i>and</i> child were, and was going to have sex with him in their bed after she already did it once. Then she called him a snake for leaving her?? See that wasn't consistant</p>

<p>Or you could look at it this way.</p>

<p>You create a character and called him "Superman". Superman has a weakness and you call it Kryptonite. And you define it as something that if he's around it long enough it will kill him. So you define him was not being able to <i>stand</i> being around it. Then one day you have him making jewelry out of it and when his girlfriend Lois ask him why, he says he always thought it was a pretty stone.</p>

<p>See what I mean?</p>

<p>And when you let the husband not only carry his blame but then he went and assumed not only her blame, but she bashed him every chance she got. And he took it. That stopped making him likable.</p>

<p>I could get past the mutual cheating, but you never gave her ownership of her mistakes. The story only had her dishing out the hurt and he took the beating like a puppy. And every few times you had him stand up for himself, the story had him retract it then he sat down and let her roll over him.</p>

<p>I wasn't trying to kill your enthusiasm for writing, but point out would you personally really let someone who cheated on you, who brought her lover home to have sex a second time with, and "while" she was doing it was the whole time calling you "personally" less than a man, challenging your manhood and then spent her time pointing out it was all your fault, would you really want her back into your life? I wouldn't and most other people wouldn't either.</p>

<p>But I didn't mean to deeply offend you either. That wasn't my intention. Sorry if you took it that way</p>

-Risq

Interesting and unusual. It was a good read with two complex characters to show for. They possess more than one dimension; their actions (and thinking) may not be always linear, and yet they remain coherent. <P>

My impression is that putting two imperfect characters in action next to each other, then letting both interact and change before us, presented as quite a mind twister for more than few. It's a good thing.

Even before he went on the business trip where he fell they didn't have a marriage. They were two people who lived in the same house but didn't communicate.

than me. Still, I have to agree with everything Risq said except the score. This was well written but both the characters were deeply flawed.

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As I said, I think Risq's analysis was dead on, but that is also the way some people are. Where I have to get off he boat is with the conclusion. It wasn't quite as abrupt as "they lived happily ever after," but it was almost that bad.

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Yes, you do have them going to counseling , and she's stopped drinking but you come on... you skipped the hard part. Did he ever get to the point where he stopped taking the blame for her inexcusable behavior?

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How did she ever come to grips with what she'd done... not just bringing a man home, but things like slamming the door in his face and refusing to accept responsibility for her actions?

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People love for the weirdest reasons and are prepared to accept far more flaws than are reasonable... but that doesn't make a relationship healthy. I'd like to see a second story where you addressed these and other issues. I'd like to see these people grow into someone I could admire. People I'd like to have as friends.

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One other issue, you don't explain how she was such a drunk and didn't allow herself to be picked up. You show her fighting off the rapist... but that could be because she had enough sense to realize how slimy he was even if she was drunk.

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I don't normally agree with those who impugn character of action the author didn't intend. In this case, while you show that the husband doesn't believe she hasn't been sleeping around, you leave it open that she has.

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All that said it's a good story, and good character creation. I'd just like to see you do the heavy lifting of making it right. I would suggest that you tell the story from her POV. You don't have to cover all the same ground, but you can settle things like her continued cheating.

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In any event, thanks for the story.

She could have given up on the marriage but I still have trouble seeing a wife bringing home a man no matter how "drunk" she might be. That is just too hostile an act. Still, you make some good points. While I don't like the characters, they are different and interesting. One with no pride the other with too much?

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Again, thanks for the story and keep writing.

I Liked this one. I learned something from Risq's and PeasefulTex's comments.

I haven't read others, but I am impressed with the calm and measured thought that went into these. They are unique here.

I am so used to non-thinking knee-jerk reactions to Lit's "Loving Wives" entries that I had to check that I was really on Lit!

Good job, Slirpuff!

More, please.

Rich

The whole thing reached quite a distance. Shannon reacted when she wasn't made aware of the promotion? That is curious. The agreement not to mention the other, ok. It would be more problematic for her I think. For the childs sake, stay and try, or does that prolong the anxiety? Always the possibility getting along better, and separated permanently, for the child.

I really couldn't get past the first page of this one. When our "stalwart hero" was trying to get the jilted wife to reconsider her plan and he couldn't, then he was OK. When he decided to "help" her with her fiasco, even though he had his misgivings, he put himself in the way of temptation purposely--regardless of what you, as the author, stated his mindset was. The guy is guilty, he's a scumbag, and he deserves the pain he got.

How pathetic an a guy get. Well, just about as pathetic as our hero. Disgusting.

I must say this . You , PAPATOAD , DG-Hear , Ohio , and one other I cant remember off the top of my head are the only writers worth praise on this site . The others are not worth the time to scroll down . Keep up the good work all of you ! your stories are well thought out , realistic , and go where the fluff writers dont dare to go , such as death , aids , etc . Real life that isnt always pretty but happens when people get pushed too far or act irresponsibly . If it wasnt for you guys , this site would be nothing but poorly writen , pea brained , unrealistic , gay , interracial , spineless bi husband fluff stories not worth the space taken up on the server . Keep up the good work and letting people read what real people might do in a situation and the consequences there of . Look forward to your next story , Peace man !!!!!!!

Harddaysknight is the other writer he wasa trying to remember, anyhow bravo! a great story.

It was well written, as most of your stories are, but in the end it fell very flat. I thought the wife went to far, and the husband, if he could not have lived with the guilt should have spoken sooner. At a certain point, the ugly just gets to bad and coming back from it is not really possible, or very probably. You had them go way too far, and then really did not create a scenariou to bring them back together that offset.

you don't seem to even have a slight understanding of basic human bahavoir... Slirpuff... you want your readers to beleive that you don't see any difference between cheating on someone behind their back or blantently cheating and rubbing it in to the other's face just to purposely hurt them?? If you don't get the difference then you must have a really sad and pathetic life. This story just doen't work... the husband would not accept her childish and selfish behavoir... and more importantly, SHE would only bahave that way if she was a disgusting and evil person. Being disgusting and evil, your readers just don't care.... kill her, mutilate her... who cares?? Why did you write this? what was the pupose? It isn't an erotic story, it isn't about a loving wife, yet you posted it as a LOVING WIFE story on an erotic sex letter site. What is the purpose?

In the nineth to last paragraph in this story you wrote,"We didn't kiss or express our love for each other; we just stood there holding each other for the longest time.", this in it self, is expressing love. Holding each other and comforting each other IS a form of expressing love.

In this one the couples are each way too single minded in their assumptions each about the other, something people should have gotten past by late puberty. But the grief ends plausibly (with a fast assist from therapy), so no quarrel. I hate to keep saying it, but you have a marvelous ear for marital bickering and mounting mutual recrimination! Whether or not to congratulate you for it is another matter! :-)

Anonymous (comment from 11/29/10) you are an idiot! Slirpuff stated that Shannon voiced her opinion about cheaters about 2 months after Steve had sex with Chris. At that moment in time (and probably still) she was against cheating in any form. The night she went out to drink with the girls and had sex with Roger she was drunk. Hammered. Blasted. Three sheets to the wind. Alcohol can change you. Forget that crap about it just lowers inhibitions but you are basically the same person with the same morals, just less inhibition. That's bullshit. Yes, it does lower inhibitions, but it impairs thought processes and judgement. That is a major change. I'm sure you know someone who is the greatest guy to know, but get a few drinks in him and he becomes the world's biggest asshole. He's not like that normally, but the alcohol changes him. Shannon's judgement and thinking were definitely impaired. It doesn't make it right or excuse it. But it does explain how she can cheat and bring Roger home with her. Especially since she thought that Steve was having an affair at the time. A combination of anger, depression, fear, lust or plain horniness, and alcohol led to her cheating and bringing the guy home.

Why I'm even bothering explaining this is beyond me. Anonymous will never see this.....but as the child of an alcoholic and as a US Navy veteran (no, I wasn't a Seal!) I've seen a lot of people both sober and drunk and I've seen how much their character can change.

The anonymous comments has the the least amount of intelligence. Constructive criticism is great. pointing out mistakes or inconsistency is great to help the writer grow.

But name calling or dumb ass comments are uncalled for; especially if it done under ANONYMOUS . GET SOME KAHUNA

BTW Slirpuff keep on writing. I enjoy most of your stories

Poor kid having to put up with such asshole neglectful parents.

and risq_001 sums it up better than most.

I'll just add one more inconsistency; we're told that he's so very good at his job because he relates so well to his clients. Really? He can't seem to relate to his wife in any degree whatsoever

He screwed up. He regretted it. She, however, is a slut cheating bitch. He should of taken the divorce, dragging her through the mud in the process. To hell with the slut. And he best get tested for an STD.

Don't keep writting this wimp shit. It does not fit you. Why would Steve want her back?

Slirpuff got jumped by crossdressing closet cucks and pelted with creampies and while under duress submitted a story for them. Enjoy it closet cuckolds, your time to shine.

Whatever he is, Slirpuff has the balls to put his name on what he writes. Only ones in closet I see is YOU .

are by closet cuckolds, don't kid yourself. Read, spank, flame. Cockless losers who get off on cuckolding but feel shame so they spew in denial. Classic case. If you are too stupid to see that my sympathies. But the whole "put your name" idiocy is proof you are too stupid to tie your fucking shoes. I don't see 3 forms of government issued ID next to your "name" asshole, wise up and recognize we're all anons on this site.

They make stupid decisions, they can't communicate, they have barely any control of their tempers, they let their emotions take over their brains, they rarely think of anyone but themselves, they don't think of consequences, and they can't follow through on commitments.

The husband was an idiot and low-life, the wife was worse. Rather than stay by her husband's side when he was going through serious problems resulting in performance problems (problems arising from his stupid infidelity), she withdraws from him and into a bottle and other men's arms. Then, she shows the ultimate disrespect of fucking another man, bringing him to her home (where her husband and CHILD are) and announces to her husband that she is going to fuck the guy in their bed. Her excuses are pathetic and show an unstable, immature, bitch.

But, you described these trailer-dwelling degenerates with stunning clarity, and tell an interesting, well-paced tale. I know these types of people. In this story, as in real life, I feel badly for the kid.

anon was right with the comments, and lordglamsham where are your storie, you pompous ass

closet cuckolds rule the comment section in LW, LSD was on LSD when he commented I suppose, pretty clear anon is heaping additional humiliation on the comment cucks and not the author.

Well written with interesting dialogue...but...the setup of the cheating did not justify the lengthy prose. There was no believable tension or angst. The setup/premise was too simplistic. This resulted in characters who were not likable nor believable. The story felt contrived. Though, I did enjoy the meddling mother...see you next Tuesday! In general, I liked the story, but didn't love it. Nonetheless you are a very gifted writer and storyteller and I anxiously await your next effort. Thank you Slirpluff for sharing you talents with me.

Why was Shannon angry about his promotion? Simple now he would not be on the road and so she couldn't cheat as she had in the past. It is the only explanation for someone who hates cheaters but cheats. This stories main female character made no sense. And that is why I gave this story *. It has to make sense and it didn't.

makes any sense, and a few anons, every shitpuff story happens in middle school - immature adolescents behaving like spoiled, indulged, hormonal, trailer-park pre-teens.

or I'll show you, a mistake, TK U MLJ LV NV

I cheated, you cheated. In the course of life no one is perfect and if it is a true loving married couple committed to each other one mistake can be tolerated. It took a while but both Shannon and Steve finally realized they were right for each other and meant for each other. All's well that end's well.

Ha, I guess I'm a fucking marriage counselor. Can you beat that!

He made a mistake all right, he listen to the bullshit that comes out a womans mouth. It's funny how she cheated before he told her he did. Then she blames he for her cheating," if he did take care of business at home". Like I've said before, and this story proved it. When he cheated his mom and everybody else was in his ass about aplogizing to his wife, get down on your knees and beg for forgiveness. But when they found out the both cheated well then the husband needed to quit being a hard ass, she had her reasons. Slirpuff, yet another story where the husband has a slut wife and he ends up backing down and taking the high road in to wimpdom.

posted on a fat cock, he smoked the meaty one, betrayed!

which is more then anyone can say about a story submitted by admitted cuckold huecuck

gave it a 1, why bother fuck the kids, a marriage this messed up by both people, and she was out trying to get laid when drugged ,would have let her get raped or what ever she had it coming,and once again story has mommy issues the mom not taking his male characters side after the story is told to her,and somebody's must have a odd notion of what family is or a realistic one, 70% of all men in jail come from single parent homes raised by mom... so you cant really raise a boy without a mans help at least from a math point of view it doesn't work out, but then again in Sir's story's they aren't good moms.

Totally fucked up story line. But written very well. Sure he screwed up but he didn't bring it home and smear it in her face. Why would she? That would have been the end for any normal man.

Why would anyone want to be married the a pushy, booze hound, loud mouth whore, skank as her.

by the commenters, those closet cuckolds cannot write a coherent thought if their life depended on it. As with all SP stories, this featured immature characters making illogical decisions, must be like real life for the legion of closet cucks bleating and squealing in LW.

Carry on.

@ Anon Who are you?

1. Are You a bull and you like that cuckold husbands of the hot wives lick your cock?

2. Are You a cuck and you like eating creampie and to lick the cock of the bull?

So you are angry to the divorced ex-husbands, because they do not want to be part of cuckold lifestyle?

1. My name is Duna and I am a shepherd. Among my flock are many billy goats that I often hump.

2. When my peepee or their bungholes become sore from humping, I make them hump me.

These people made so many mistakes and failed to communicate. Glad it was just a story, if I thought it was real I would probably salivate. It made my ass want a dip of snuff (that's what my father-in-law used to say, may he R.I.P.)

I will take something.

comment. 2 stars

whatta imp for a man.

If a GUY isn't getting any at home, he's a cheating skunk if he gets some elsewhere, but for the wife it's OK?

WOW anoncuck, I know how you feel. Its like the your comments ;)

Hey Bfreetorun,

When my Dad was telling a story when he got angry, he would say "that makes my behind want to eat salted peanuts." I still don't know where that comment comes from, but your father-in-law's comment sounds just like my Dad's.

I know you can do better. I'm sick and tired of your 'I don't know how it happened but I'm going too make it worse now by not talking with you ' stories.

neither one of them were saints and not to fault Shannon entirely but her reaction to the surprise party seemed way out of line.

I guess if couples kept the lines of communication open you wouldn't have much to write about but it's sure a sad commentary on life

another saved marriage

Another Steve Moore special. This just didn't grab me & say damm it's good, can't say exactly why. I think it was because both Shannon & Steve were just so dumb & stupid at times, no communication. 3 ***

He spent all of his time beating himself up and barely mentioned his wife's adultery and drinking problem. Once again, as I have so often said on this site, regular nights out with "the girls" seldom turn out well. I hope I would have had the courage to walk out when she brought Roger home.

emotionally charged. Well written. They were both stupid, so neither one has the moral high ground. Five stars.

Happening that way. She was an alcoholic and a cheater. He was a cheater and a hothead. And they suddenly changed their behavior and made nice? And not bringing up Roger and Chris didn't make them go away. What kind of therapist did they go to? One that taught Clown School? These two are now divorced. End of story.

I'm getting tired of stories that go on and on because people won't answer the damned phones! It seems the whole "Loving Wives" genre is dependent on that little power button on our cell phones.

War of escalation with way too many people involved. Great tellng 👍

You have a fatal flaw in many of your stories; that being a major lack of consistency with your characters. You tend to create characters at the beginning of stories, only to have them flip 180 degrees later on, so much so in fact, that the only thing they have in common with the original character, is a name. You create a character, and then recreate them all over again, to fit with your intentions for the end. That's why so many people complain about some of your stories. Because you have a specific ending in mind, and the story gets written and then half way through it's rewritten again, to fit around your intended ending. It's like building a house from the roof down, and redesigning the house as you go, to suit the roof. People complain about your endings, not because they are 'Burn the bitch, women haters', but because many times the ending leaves them dissatisfied because it in no way ties in with what you have written and the characters you have created up to that point. Calling people 'haters' for disagreeing is simply a cop out. I'm not a burn the bitch guy per se, but I do believe in consequences for our actions, and I find it leaves a bad taste, when you create a malicious character, and not only have them escape consequences, but then heap blame on the innocent character. I'm not saying that's what you did in this story, but I just decided to vent, seeing as I'm here! There's so little justice or fairness in real life, that it's very unpleasant when the same goes for the stories we read to escape reality for a time. It would be nice to believe that wrongdoers are punished, even if it only happens in fiction. Except that, even in fiction, it seems, that fairness doesn't apply, either.

He knew that what he was doing with the woman was wrong, but did it anyway. That makes him just stupid. All he had to do was say 'Sorry, I'm married and I could never do that to my wife.' His wife was about as unstable as anyone I've seen. Her husband is having problems in bed so she figures fucking another guy will fix things. Then neither one will talk to the other. He sulks and leaves, she gets pissed-faced drunk all the time. She says that she hasn't slept with anyone since he left, but with a few drinks in her she brings another guy home to fuck and rubs his face in it. Her past actions indicate otherwise. She flies off the handle at any random time about anything that doesn't suit her. He may love her, but the rest of his life is going to be just like this. She may cover it up for a while, but the crazy bitch will be back very soon. I know. I was married to her evil twin for 20 years before I couldn't take it anymore. I tried to ignore the insane outbursts and the accusations. That didn't work. It just kept getting worse. The drunken nights out with the girls where I had to pick her up because she didn't even know how to get home were bad enough, but when I started picking her up and she had been fucked, obviously by more than one guy, is when I had to end it. She begged and said she wouldn't do it again but I'd heard that before. I've moved on but from what I've heard, she hasn't changed. She's drunk most nights and fucks anything that walks. It's too bad. She once was a beautiful and loving wife.

Two pieces of shit deserve each other. I pity their children

good read and a great LW story. If annony hates it then it has to be good