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by jadepixie

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OnlyByMoonlightOnlyByMoonlightover 14 years ago
Nice...

Very good tone and structure, and well paced. I would suggest varying your sentence structure more. But overall very good. Keep writing! :)

JackVettrianoJackVettrianoover 13 years ago
Another great little read.

your writing is very 'real' and I like that. I have been that guy, driving out of town watching the northern lights and then taking my pleasure from the girl who drove me there.

Cant wait to read more x

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