Like the story so far. How about making the male character a little less knightly and a lot more dastardly. At least let him take advantage of the situation when she calls, and she will call won't she?
I like the patience...Good development of character.
Can't wait to read chapter 2
Hey, Ben, I hope this story will be as enjoyable as Deja Vu. I already like the characters, can't wait to see what will become of them. Gary
Just read what another commenter had said about making Jim "more dastardly". There's plenty of that on Literotica, but there are many of us who like a "just plain nice guy". Look elsewhere if you want the main mail character to be a prick.
Not "mail", I do know better.
So far so good. Looking forward to reading the rest. Only, I can't see the characters, just yet.
human nature stays unevolved TK U MLJ LV NV
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