by Tinolt
I hope you enjoy my story and I look foward to hearing what you have to say. I can see that the over all impression is a good one but I want to make my stories the best! Tell me what you would like.
what kind of person wrote this? Without wanting to offend, It's not good.
great idea...the writing isn't developed as much as it should be...a little too all over the place but all in all a good story..
I thought the principle was good, but it was bit scattered. Could have done with reigning in to a bit of a structure.
But I liked it alot, hot and HORNY!
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While being a little all over it was a great visual and something I would love to be apart of! When does she come back!