I'm assuming this is only the prologue since this is ch.0, but you can sure as hell count in along for the ride b/c this story is already on fire. I can't wait to find out who Vanya is sending money to and how he how/if he wins Percy back. I'm eagerly awaiting your next update.
Can't wait to read more...the plot is intriguing and love the chemistry or rather passion he feels.
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Anonymous02/03/10
Great intro, got me wondering what to expect next and who is the person he is supporting in another country. As well as the history between the two. I will say they have some odd names but that's ok! :)
Just came across this story. Hoping the next chapter is as good, but dreading the 'get your ass in gear and don't make me hurt you-ness' that's my normal reaction to good reads...
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Anonymous05/22/10
I love this story, the characters, the plot, EVERYTHING!!!
PLEASEEE update it soon!
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Anonymous07/13/10
good story!
This story is awesome i can't wait to continue reading. Thanks!
At first I wasn't sure about this story, the overuse of caesura was instantly kind of irratating and made for an unpleasant staccato sounding narrative. But after continued reading I could see how it did legitimately lend to the atmosphere you were trying to create (though I would personally recommend a more rationed use of it). What I particularly liked however and what won me over was the unique, complicated but believable storyline. And too, the characters who can be described in much the same way. Your choice of language in explaining the premise was excellent and hinted to some knowledge of the field or some very commendable background research. The back and forth dialogue worked well (despite Vanya seeming to slip out of character and becoming suddenly quite colloquial at times?) and I appreciated that you broke up this dialogue with other action as this prevented it from becoming too interrogative. Overall, I ended up very intrigued by the story. What an interesting first chapter with a lot of promise! [from clockstrikesthree@gmail.com].
I've read all the chapters and I'm ready for you to add another chapter soon. I love the characters and the history. I'm wondering if the money being sent is to Lina's child? Sorry if I spoiled this for anyone, you just have to read the other chapters to know what I'm talking about. Please update I'm reeling after Ch. 5B... Thanks Syn'
Great start......intriguing intro....compelling story
Wow.....interesting beginning and then you work backward.
I read every chapter and then came back. The way you introduced us to Vanya and Percy made me want to learn more about them. After reading through, the scene makes perfect sense. Great....simply marvelous technique. Compells you to read the entire story because of the way it's structured .
Wow
I'm assuming this is only the prologue since this is ch.0, but you can sure as hell count in along for the ride b/c this story is already on fire. I can't wait to find out who Vanya is sending money to and how he how/if he wins Percy back. I'm eagerly awaiting your next update.
More please...
Great start!
welcome back!!
happy new year, nice comeback as well, will be looking out for this story, nothing like a story that keeps u wanting to come back for more.
Wow
ok you have ny attention!! Can't wait for more!!
Can't wait to read more...the plot is intriguing and love the chemistry or rather passion he feels.
Great intro, got me wondering what to expect next and who is the person he is supporting in another country. As well as the history between the two. I will say they have some odd names but that's ok! :)
Liking it !
This is my kind of story. Very intense from the get go. Great introductory chapter, can't wait for the next one !
Just came across this story. Hoping the next chapter is as good, but dreading the 'get your ass in gear and don't make me hurt you-ness' that's my normal reaction to good reads...
I love this story, the characters, the plot, EVERYTHING!!!
PLEASEEE update it soon!
good story!
This story is awesome i can't wait to continue reading. Thanks!
I missed this chapter in the beginning and just went back and read it this story is awesome.
I hope you update very very soon with the rest of the chapters.
Thank you
Interesting
I like the action/Espionage feel. The writing is good, not typical, thank goodness.
Looking forward to more!
Excellent start!
At first I wasn't sure about this story, the overuse of caesura was instantly kind of irratating and made for an unpleasant staccato sounding narrative. But after continued reading I could see how it did legitimately lend to the atmosphere you were trying to create (though I would personally recommend a more rationed use of it). What I particularly liked however and what won me over was the unique, complicated but believable storyline. And too, the characters who can be described in much the same way. Your choice of language in explaining the premise was excellent and hinted to some knowledge of the field or some very commendable background research. The back and forth dialogue worked well (despite Vanya seeming to slip out of character and becoming suddenly quite colloquial at times?) and I appreciated that you broke up this dialogue with other action as this prevented it from becoming too interrogative. Overall, I ended up very intrigued by the story. What an interesting first chapter with a lot of promise! [from clockstrikesthree@gmail.com].
Good
This is a nice slow burn, reading the rest of it now.
I Like It
Good, now I'll read ch.01 to see how it's being unfold.
Nice read ^_^
Good start, I like it!
Great story!!!
I've read all the chapters and I'm ready for you to add another chapter soon. I love the characters and the history. I'm wondering if the money being sent is to Lina's child? Sorry if I spoiled this for anyone, you just have to read the other chapters to know what I'm talking about. Please update I'm reeling after Ch. 5B... Thanks Syn'
Great start......intriguing intro....compelling story
Wow.....interesting beginning and then you work backward.
I read every chapter and then came back. The way you introduced us to Vanya and Percy made me want to learn more about them. After reading through, the scene makes perfect sense. Great....simply marvelous technique. Compells you to read the entire story because of the way it's structured .
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