Hated the story, every single person in this story is worthless. Not that you care either way do you?
The only appropriate end to this story is 4 shots from the 870 and a quick trip to Mexico.
And oh, poor Bobby doesn't want anonymous input anymore!
that it is at all possible to cook up something so bad!!!!
This tripe is beyond belief.
My mother always told me if you can't say anything nice...
Not one character that was worth feeling anything about except disgust. He had the gun, he should have just used it and then reloaded and turned it on himself. There is no marriage to "save" here. And despite what the characters say, there is no "love" either. Nothing really erotic either.
This is a little extreme for my liking. Writing was good.
Please post a warning at the beginning of stories of this type so that I can avoid them and read the more 'vanilla' stories
As previously stated, you are very consistent with your themes and plots. Did not read this pathetic effort because the comments almost always give a good indication of the cluck-wimp direction. However, your efforts should make the "wimp & humiliated male / reconciliation at any cost" crowd happy and running off to suck gay cock. Sigh ... pathetic at best but consistent as always.
The poor wimp didn't have enough balls to shoot the three black guys, and his stupid slut wife, he could at least shot himself and got over his misery.
This story is not well written, contains little to no plot development and one-dimensional characters. This is the first time I have given any story a one star rating. I have always respected the fact that the author took the time and made the effort with those of us on this site. In this case, no respect can be shown to either the author or the husband,
I love'em or I hate'em. Nothing in between. This one I hate A LOT>
I has no redeeming qualities. Sorry, better luck next time.
You've actually made me feel sorry for him. As wrong as he was....and he WAS wrong even though we can understand his reasons....she has turned him into a very sympathetic figure. I feel bad for him that he has no self-respect.
...want to lock him up in Dark Wanderer forever.A Repost, to me. And no more anons? What a bunch of faggots this site is breeding.Pretty soon it'll be Marquis of Queensbury(Or Marquess of Queensberry to you Brits) and bloody scones all around.
Okay so he cheated and she rubbed his nose in it. Now they are even! What he should do is let them come in then kill the bastards and the bitch. He can claim self defense and she was shot by mistake. Their cum in her will be enough proof of what she was up to and he can claim they threatened to tie him up, make him watch, then kill him.
is that the woman is a slut. Even the stories were the men are slutd they are enabled by slutty women usually married. I enjoy his stories as very creative fantasies. What is amusing how readers take them so seriously. In this story we are told that Mickey is this idea wife and mother except for sex. The husband tries to wider her horizon sexually but she refuses. He goes out during his business trips to make up for what he is missing. Mickey finds out and exact her revenge. She fucks 30 men in ways she never did with her husband, fucks her lover while on the phone with her husband, and bring home several of her lovers for her meeting with her husband. Let's face it at that time she has her husband over a barrel - he has with no proof, 3 kids and finiancial ruin in the divorce. But Mickwey's revenge is too extreme. Given the unprotected sex and STDs the husband has to do something to address this or he will be putting his kids at risk. What is a succeccful businessman to do? ANSWER: Go along until you can shift the balance in your favor. Make up with her so that she thinks things will go her way. Go on the next few business trips normal frequency until her guard does down then BOOM. It is likely that her lovers have police records and are invovled in iilegal activities. Once Mickey starts hooking then he can get evidence. This story begs for a sequel.
SleeplessinMD2 and just about everyone who posted are right when they think there's no one to like in this story.
Open for a sequel? Sure but I'm not touching this one with a forty foot barg pole...lol
I will give you this one though, I got hot under the collar with both the spouses, and as I have said before that when you evoke emotions then you have done a good job of conveying your message. The problem we have is the message itself!
Speaking from a purely female point of view...I don't know of any woman who'd go that far to get revenge on their mate. This was absolutely a male fantasy gone wrong...lol
I dearly hope you went back on your meds after writing this piece?
This could have been a good revenge gone wrong tale. Alas it wasn't to be. I checked out the voting score on it to date and two point one six is better than I thought it'd be. I gave you two, but that was just to keep the status quo...And as the star says...I didn't like it much!.
Better luck next time Bob, you really are a good writer, it's just a pity that you got your head so far up your own arse that it must be hard to breath.
All the best anyway
Too crude, gross, and extreme.
A bit too extreme for my liking
He brings the boys back in and sits down to watch. After the four of them really get going, he pulls out the shotgun and points it at them. He says "Do not move a muscle, any of you. Mickey, you went way over the top babe. Part of the reason I found those women was because you would not do the things I wanted. Furthermore, I kept my affairs away from home. They were only seeing me so there was no issue with disease. And there were only a handful of them.
"For your revenge, you went out and fucked over thirty strangers, many of whom are probably high risk for disease. You also did all those things for them that you would not do for me. If you had, I would probably never have strayed.
"Then you bring them into our home, so they know where we live. For all I know you have been fucking them in front of the kids. And now you want to keep on fucking them and even entertain the idea of becoming a whore.
"Putting the financial issues aside, I cannot take the chance that the courts will award custody of our kids to you. I cannot have them exposed to your new lifestyle. I loved you, but you killed that."
Boom, boom, boom and three young men were dead. Mickey stared at him in shock.
"I hope your revenge was worth it babe. Perhaps those black cocks will be waiting for you in the next life. It will hurt to lose you and I will probably go to hell for this, but I have no choice."
He takes a deep breath, cleans up some loose ends, such as destroying the letters, etc., and dials 911. He gives his address and says he thinks he murdered four people. When the cops arrive he tells them "I got home early from a business trip. My wife was not home and being bushed, I went upstairs to take a nap. I woke up and heard noises downstairs. When I got close enough, I saw what I thought were three black men raping my wife. I ran back and got my shotgun to use to scare them off. When I came back, I realized that it was not rape. She was a willing participant. I felt anger rage up inside and the next thing I knew, the four of them were laying there dead.
The verdict was "Not guilty by reason of temporary insanity."
had it right. Definitely a 1 story. Seems you either have a 1 or 5.
Them coming BOB!!!!1
He needs to figure out how to kill them all, the wife included.
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