All Comments on 'To Be Transformed..or Not? Ch. 07'

The sex scene paragraph would be much easier to follow if it were broken into four or five paragraphs.

hey whn u publishing ur nxt ch...i wanna know..plzzz i so want to know the further story....

Liking this new turn - can't wait to the next instalment!!!!

Shut up!!! A witch!!?? Alright I'm with yah now submit the next chapter soon!

thats a bit of a twist but i really like this story so far. keep up the good work. Cant wait for the next chapter

your story and the characters, but the way it is written is a bit odd and awkward. Almost as if parts have been put through a translator and changed to English. The phrasing is not quite right for spoken English and is a bit old fashioned in many ways. If English is not your first language, I commend you for your effort and can ignore the style of writing. If English is your first language, I think that it needs more editing so that the words flow better. Maybe you could read it back to yourself to see if it sounds natural when spoken. Either way, I like the story and want to find out what happens next, despite the awkwardness. Keep writing!

i love this u need to write more 10 out of 10