All Comments on 'Viking's Pledge Ch. 01'

by Arisan_Maru

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SuzzieQSuzzieQabout 14 years ago
Yummy

I can see many directions this can go, you write quite well, cannot wait for the next installment.

karina03karina03about 14 years ago
Can't wait for the next part

I really like where this story is going. Too bad it was so short, hope the next one will be a little longer. Thanks,

AnonymousAnonymousabout 14 years ago
Solid beginning.

I like the story and I'm curious to where it's going to go. I'm not keen on the "ye olde" english though. A lot of the time it didn't really make much sense but the plot is good and I will continue reading if the dialogue improves.

ZsadistZsadistover 13 years ago
Keep going

The beginning was eh you know it wasn't good to me. It didn't flow. Try reading it out loud and see if there are any changes you need to make. Although the beginning was wonky the end and middle were very nicely written and it made me want to know more. I like this story keep writing. Just tidy up the beginning and then you're golden. Great Start! I can't wait for more.

lonesomedove66lonesomedove66almost 11 years ago
Very interesting beginning

Looking forward to what happens next

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