All Comments on 'Jen Joins the Family'

By golly, it sounds like more.

Very well written. It's always a treat when I run across someone in here who actually has command of grammar and a decent idea of pacing. And the sex was erotic without being pornographic. You certainly kept "it" up... keep it up!

I see this as a story that could really have taken place ; especially on a cruise where you seem to be in another world away from everyday acquaintances .

Very well written.

I'm new to the site and have made two submissions so far. I can't afford college or writing classes right now and have found writers like you very helpful.

This is the first of your stories I've come across, but I just added you to my favorites and I can't wait to read more.

Thank you.

You write very well. The sex scenes are hot and the characters are believable enough to make the story even better. The only thing is - you left us hanging again. The story just stops, it doesn't end. This is a really good chapter 1 in bad need of a chapter 2 (or 3 or 4).

You need to write some more of this story.

This is the first story where I got to the end and actually exclaimed aloud "Wait, there's not more?!?!?!". A touch clunky, I felt, at the start, with Brian's reticence. However, my eyes became glued to pretty much every word as the topless sunbathing scene played out. That Jen knew he was there the entire time but didn't let him know brought out some playfulness that really fit her.

...... you just cannot stop now, I do hope there's a chapter two being prepared ?