by vrosej10
very weak line. Your use of the adverbs and adjectives that you chose weakened your work. I have read terrific work from you, but this is below your usual quality. Sometimes it helps to hold onto a poem and read it after a week or so and you will see it, feel it, it a different way ( as you distance yourself from it, you see it from a different perspective.). Best of luck, I enjoy your work on a regular basis.