All Comments on 'Evening Light Ch. 03'

by zouzouni

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AnonymousAnonymousalmost 14 years ago
Love it!

I absolutely love this story. Please keep writing. There are a few mistakes, but nothing too serious. I can't wait to see what happens between Lucas and Grace! :)

rphinneyrphinneyalmost 13 years ago
Huh?

You make the lead male a complete and utter ass, and incredibly stupid at the same time. That must mean the female lead is even more stupid for desiring someone with no redeeming qualities at all.

You should learn some balance. You can make someone unappealing without making them devoid of any good qualities. You have to keep in mind, if your goal is to create a romantic love, then there has to be something to cause that love to grow. As your story stands, it makes no sense whatsoever.

kitteh_katkitteh_katalmost 12 years ago
smiling...

'all be it' is actually 'albeit', but that made me smile anyways.

carry on...

k_k

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