All Comments on 'Arresting Positions'

this was horrible!!! I tried to follow along, but i got lost within the grammar, spelling and general badness of the story. It had a good premise to start with, but you failed to follow through. Hopefully your next work will be better. PS: proofread before turning in your work.

Well, Marquis De Sade I ain't ,nor am I going for that but, I've only been writing a couple of years now. I post the works (a little slap dash) because I'm looking to get feed back. I don't care what kind it may be. So, I appreciate you for that but as I've expressed elsewhere, I need concrit. I need you to tell me what you see that needs fixing. As far as it goes in relation to grammarical errors and want not, I'm suffering greatly from the lack of BETA. Self-beta'ing doesn't help after looking at a draft so many times. At that point, what you think is on the paper (because that's how it is in your head) still has flaws. So, i pretty much agree with you there. So yeah, Thanx for the review!