All Comments on 'Beat-Off Buddies Ch. 01'

by Carnevil9

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AnonymousAnonymousalmost 14 years ago
Nice Story!!!!

Unique , refreshing point of view...with all the 'possibilties' still swirling around in the air, making it hotter......Keep Writing !!

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 14 years ago
Nice

Agree with the other comments. Nice new twist on a story. Let's hear more!

CleardiamondCleardiamondalmost 14 years ago
Keep Writing

this was interesting and fun.. more chapters will be awesome...

RossDanielsRossDanielsalmost 14 years ago
Liked it a lot.

Keep it going!

mamacitambmamacitambalmost 14 years ago
LOVE IT!!!

Cannot wait to read more!!!

jqhackjqhackover 13 years ago
Nice

I, for one, would like to see more chapters. The story started off well and is well written and I can't wait to see where it goes.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 13 years ago
Grrrrrrr.......

Awesome...

AnonymousAnonymousabout 12 years ago
Good start!!

I enjoyed it, a little more detail would be great as they move in closer to each other as they become more comfortable, size of the clit, description, movement....contractions. with him the look of the cock as he slowly works the foreskin over the head, leakage etc. take your time it can be beautiful!

NaokoSmithNaokoSmithover 8 years ago
Stroke of genius!

This is so funny and well written. :D

Well ... there were two places where my sharp editorial eye would have made a change. You could do with a colon instead of a semi-colon when it says: 'I sensed the smells of her sensuality:'

Plus, I would put 'Of course these were all to remain fantasies.' in a fresh paragraph.

I love how you leap straight into the sex. What a neat concept, I am off to read Ch. 02 now.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 5 years ago

Nice!

DrmaxcDrmaxcover 2 years ago

Excellent. Super writing. Perhaps a bit quick off the mark once he meets Jane, but otherwise a great read

longboy2022longboy2022over 1 year ago

just found these, mm is my favorite sex act, will be 'pleasuring' on the others too.

oldwineskinsoldwineskinsover 1 year ago

what is not to love about some mutual loving.....oh yeah

JodailyJodaily10 months ago

Mmmmyes, had to follow suit. Felt great. Thanks for the visual, and for the cum.

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