All Comments on 'Hot on the Bayou'

Loved reading this story, hope you will continue this story.

there were a few errors, such as "synch" instead of "cinch", but full penetration with an 8" penis when ready to deliver is impossible- do some research.

I agree with the previous writer, an 8"-er won't go into a lady with twins. Would have been more realilistic if the Daddy had just done oral and fingering to get her to cum and thus deliver the babies.

I did like the flow of the story. It developed nicely.

Thank You!

Did I miss something?

I LOVED IT!

Please continue the story :-)

Dude you need to continue this, it's an awesome story!

It's ok if it was a little unrealistic. These are all fantasies anyway!

I thik your next chapter should be abt her giving birth and how her father supports her and watches her go thru the process. A lot of people write about the pregnancy and then write about the baby. They don't focus enough on the birth process.

she should end up having her dads kids as well

You show definite promise as a writer of pornography.

This first story may have been a bit unrealistic but then erotica is fantasy and not necessarily realistic.

Keep writing. You have talent, Develop it.