by rpsuch
Does he get time and a half for the second shift? They have a kid?
Good Lord, the poor little bugger!
Really fine work.
Even though as a general rule, I prefer a higher percentage of dialog vs. narrative in stories, you keep me reading. Good writing, and a pleasure to read a well thought-out crime story, with a dash or two of dry, ironic humor!
I only gave it a 4 - he pissed me off - I spent enough time wearing my P.I.G. with honor to let him get away with that crap and let him hurt your score - lol getting old -
P = pride
I = Integrity
G = Guts
Integrity does not allow you get frustrated and cheat, it means leave and then enjoy the bunny.
I agree with the commenter ahead of me. Not enough dialogue yet for him to cheat on his wife. Being a Cop and enforcing the vice laws requires enough integrity to avoid being as bad as those you arrest... Most cops would not do that.
I know. I had over 45 years off and on being one...
Interesting stories. However, I´ve noticed this author´s use of this same bizarre construction in several stories. It´s simple English to know when to use ´He sent out Dad and I´ and when to use ´He sent out Dad and me´.
He sent out Dad and I is a contraction of the two sentences ´He sent out Dad´ and ´He sent out I´. Absurd, is it not?