All Comments on 'The Longest Day'

by rpsuch

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bruce22bruce22over 13 years ago
Good Story

Does he get time and a half for the second shift? They have a kid?

Good Lord, the poor little bugger!

Really fine work.

PostScriptorPostScriptorover 13 years ago
Enjoying your stories.

Even though as a general rule, I prefer a higher percentage of dialog vs. narrative in stories, you keep me reading. Good writing, and a pleasure to read a well thought-out crime story, with a dash or two of dry, ironic humor!

TavadelphinTavadelphinabout 13 years ago
I voted too quickly sorry

I only gave it a 4 - he pissed me off - I spent enough time wearing my P.I.G. with honor to let him get away with that crap and let him hurt your score - lol getting old -

P = pride

I = Integrity

G = Guts

Integrity does not allow you get frustrated and cheat, it means leave and then enjoy the bunny.

RonRWoodRonRWoodover 12 years ago
Okay so far

I agree with the commenter ahead of me. Not enough dialogue yet for him to cheat on his wife. Being a Cop and enforcing the vice laws requires enough integrity to avoid being as bad as those you arrest... Most cops would not do that.

I know. I had over 45 years off and on being one...

chilleywilleychilleywilleyalmost 6 years ago
Pretty damn good

really liked it but 'twas a bit short

AnonymousAnonymousover 4 years ago
He sent out Dad and I...

Interesting stories. However, I´ve noticed this author´s use of this same bizarre construction in several stories. It´s simple English to know when to use ´He sent out Dad and I´ and when to use ´He sent out Dad and me´.

He sent out Dad and I is a contraction of the two sentences ´He sent out Dad´ and ´He sent out I´. Absurd, is it not?

silentsoundsilentsoundabout 2 years ago

Gritty and well done. Full marks.

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