All Comments on 'A Second Chance'

A most enjoyable romantic story. You built up the relationship between the adults Amy and David so gently; and the two children, Bobbie and Kerry, became the catalyst that brought the parents deservedly together to become one happy Family. I hope that you will continue this Story to include a lovely Wedding for David and Amy, with Bobbie and Kerry as the proud and happy Bridesmaids.

My thanks.

Carefully orchestrated until the end, but I do not understand why they

decided to wait a year to announce they were going to get married! She certainly was not going to change her mind and he was too nice a guy to look at another....

I really like your stories. Please continue to write.

I wish I could write as good as you do to find always the right words to win over your readers. You know. Well done.

Your German fan

Juergen

The best Literotica authors overcome the idea of sex as a recreational pastime. They understand that without genuine intimacy sex is flat, meaningless, and unsatisfying. It takes time to achieve genuine intimacy. The sad truth is, that many folks hop into bed routinely and as a way of avoiding genuine intimacy. You are one of those great authors. David is a model of restraint and maturity. Both Amy and David are suffering, each from his/her own woundedness. Each could easily have sought refuge from their pain (his/her own and the other’s) by rushing into oblivious, animalistic sexual coupling. But they have been graced by a love based on a gradual unfolding; they took the time to each get naked emotionally and spiritually with the other, and that made their sexual union the good, true, and beautiful thing it is. Thank you for a wonderful story well told!

Aren't kids wonderful. They seem to be so smart. A great read.

Love your stories.

Your stories are so upbeat and genuine, it is a pleasure to read. Thank you!

Slow and gentle. And yes, kids are a lot more perceptive than adults believe. I liked this story and the way it was developed. Idealistc, perhaps, but certainly enjoyable. Thank you.

The story started off slowly, you could see the attraction, but it went the way it was supposed to be. Slowly,gently, and at a pace both could be comfortable with.Enjoyed it very much.

Nicely written romance.

This formula never gets old. And you did it well!

After all your stories I have read you have been added to my favorite authors list!!!

You are a gifted writer! I thank you for your written gifts to this site!

And again, thanks for writing!

Another wonderful story. I really love how you portray your characters, the plot of your stories, and the loving build up. I truly look forward to read another one of your stories.

While I usually find that word used in a religious context, I can't exactly agree, but I did find it to be beautifully told and somewhat poignant. I thought you moved it along at a realistic pace, since they both had been so deeply hurt by the ending of their former relationships with their former spouses, albeit for totally different reasons. I found it to be a fine love story and one that was extremely well done. Thank you for your story.

And beautifully told. As I read, I kept hoping that you wouldn't rush the characters. You did a fantastic job developing the relationship. When they finally came together as lovers, they were in love. It's not often I read a story completely through with a smile on my face...The smile is still there. Reminds me of my wife and I, reversed, she the widow. Would have been nice to have the cruise and all but.... Keep up the good work.

In a comment re a different story, someone mentioned that they liked the way you portrayed children. In this story I got to appreciate it myself. Well, now I'm committed to reading every single one of your stories. Thanks! [Gualterio]

I did say it was just outstanding; right???

Lovely story. That little 13 year old sure knew how to manipulate her dad and match make! I could see my two daughters doing the same thing easily! I agree with Bruce22 that waiting another year was unneccessary as I was convinced by the story that they were in love and had melded their two little familys already... Still, why dissect a great little romantic story?

How could anyone not like and enjoy this story! All of the major characters are excellently described and likeable. The plot is believable. There were so few errors that they were hardly noticeable, I only recall two or three. Thanks!

I'm always amazed at what some authors and many of the readers think is romance. So many stories gear romance as meeting someone and jumping into the sack immediately.

Romance is the nurturing of a relationship letting the physical happen when it's ready.

This author know how to write a romance story.

I give a ten.

Well I would if I could.

Thanks and I wish you would write more.

Wow! That's the first literotica story that's brought a tear to my eye AND a hard on! Well written, perfectly believable characters, wonderful build up. Looking forward to more from Web_spinner!

Great Story when will part 2 come out

Easy rerading and holds the interest right to the end,,,, not to mention that it is a fine story.

gave it a 5. i love a good love story.

accidentally gave lower

great story read it over again, And again it is 5 stars

Well structured love story - and theres nothing wrong with that. I liked it.

A bit more care with spelling and grammar and I would have given a 5.

Suggest you avail yourself of the editors polishing.

Reasonably well crafted story with the switching perspectives well set up and executed -

Always a challenge to balance the growth and the intimacy of a new relationship especially in a story with people coming from different directions for their history and baggage -

Nice job

It was a very good story. However, it ended a bit soon. It would have been nice to experience the joy little Kerry would have felt when she found out she was going to have a new Dad and a Sister.

Great work and Thanks!

and sometimes an umbrella helps with the dampness, TK U MLJ LV NV

glad you gave David and Amy a future after experiencing the pain and suffering of death and betrayal. thanks

excellent

read

5 *****s

wished for nother page or two, still cast 5 stars*****

Like Irish Eyes this story is a main stream romance that should be published as such. It is not in any manor erotic. It is a wonderful story of love and romance.2

Loved the story. But who is/was Bonnie?

I guess that some one should alert CNN and Fox news that a writer here made a typo when submitting a story.Come on is that the worst thing that you can come up with to grip about when someone hits the n key when they ment to hit the b key which just happens to be right next to each other. I some times think that some go looking for things to complain about when reading these stories.

a truely wonderful story of a love that many of us search for and never find. I enjoyed every sentence and found a second and third reading just as good as the first time I read it. Saratu

Thanks for a heart warming story.

It's a good thing he makes quicker decisions at work than he does in his personal life. All in all, a good feeling story.

I periodic purge my favorites,,, and this one lasted many purges... that reflective how much it touched me.

Thank you for you story

HKL

The sex is there and it is tasteful and terrific, but the story doesn't particularly need it. It had me rooting for the characters from the get-go. Thanks for sharing your talents.

The way you develop stories, you are not a good writer, you are a great story teller.

Ed Grocott

edgrocott@gmail.com

2 traits hard to find, but when they find you, be prepared. TK U MLJ LV NV

I have always LOVED this story, hence the reason that it's in my Favorite's list. Keep up the great work Web_Spinner. As always, I keep checking your list for new stories and hopefully you might surprise us with a new one some day soon. In the meantime, thank you for letting us read you what you've posted thus far.

MoogPlayer

I have read 2 of your stories now. you are great. I enjoy good romance stories without the extra sex. you deliver very well. you show nothing since year 10 I guess you were to good stay here. are you published some where else? Please let me know.

Ed Grocott

edgrocott@gmail.com

You have a great way of writing - when sex becomes a part of your story, it's there but no grunting and yelling. Keep up the great stories. Gave you a five. In the event some wonder why I tell when I give a five star rate, I do so to allow the author to understand that I find his stories well written.

Great writing

Nice read thank you for posting it.

Another beautifully written Romance story. I too wondered why they waited 12 months to seal the deal as they say. I really couldn't see their lodgic in doing so. Also I too thought the story ended too abruptly, you could have easily wrote another page or two describing the happiness and joy of the children especially the little one when told that they would have a Mum and Dad in their lives again. Other than that, a brilliant ⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️ story..thank you..

This is a wonderfully romantic love story. It's heart-warming and touching, made especially so by the relationship between the father and his 13 year old daughter. As a father of three sons, I now am convinced that I lost out and not just my estranged wife when we were only able to have sons.

I like also the honoring of his ex-wife's love, though I firmly believe that death is the one reason that loving another woman as a wife is totally acceptable. But having been estranged from a wife who gave up on me 18 years ago -- while still being faithful sexually to my marriage vows -- I can understand the reluctance to let go of his love for his dead wife. She's still the only woman I've been with sexually, without love it's disgusting, empty and demeaning.

Nice, gentle story, just rather abrupt in its ending.

I am not sure why the author wrapped up this story so fast and somewhat abruptly at the end.

I would like very much say thank you I love your story ahope to read more from you I keep going back and read your story over and over I have been down in the dumps after my wife of 26years left me back in march and I have good and bad day but I read your story and smile as I remember better time in my life Thank you

I to wandered why they wait twelve months to seal the deal as Kookaburra8 stated in his comments, especially since the two kids were quite happy with the current situation and excepted that their parents loved each other as well as them. Plus this story really did end far to abruptly for my liking. But saying that, the storyline was brilliant and deserves ⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️ ...

I think I'll add it to my favorites list. If it's good enough for Moog Player, it is certainly good enough for me! I gave you Five Stars yet again!

Even on my second reading.

I hate unfinished stories. This one ended right when it should. Thanks.

Also thank you for no anal.

Very high writing skill. Great use of dialog. I did not find obtrusive language or spelling problems.

Fortunately did not have crude language or cussing. But was as polished, elegant and gentlemanly as David, the protagonist.

A lovable tale. And that's what I did -- loved it.

Paul in Oklahoma

I lost my wife of 44 yrs. almost 3 yrs ago. I understand Davids love of his lost wife so very very much. We had a very deep and abiding love and it still hurts after almost 3 yrs now. I still to this day sort of live like a hermit and only go out to pay some bills or shop at the grocery store. I am 72 so I am not looking for another love. I can't go through that hurt ever again.

This story is one of the best love stories on any romance website, well written and a nice slow buildup of the relationship between the 2 families. Not just rutting animal sex. Well thought out and very loving. Thank you so very much for giving a lost soul something to hold onto. I am a man but I did go through a lot of Kleenex reading this story.

I love this story. Very romantic and well written. I have read this story several times and just cant give anything but a 5star rating eventhough there is one misspelled word. Page 2 final night on the cruise. When he says they should meet for breakfast the next morning because Bonnie would never forgive him if she was t able to say goodbye. LOL I thought her name was Bobbie. Still an excellent story. Keep up the excellent work.

But sometimes, for the best of us... Don't know why you've stopped posting, I've searched numerous times and haven't found anything new under this pen name anywhere, nothing on SOL. But if you're ever of a mind to, we'll welcome you back with open arms. Signed: BTW

Excellent gentle love story

1 abs etc and hasn't been out much since wife died?

2 I try to suspend reality when I read but too much sometimes

3 goes to daughter's events and no other parent(s) mentioned

4 business and daughter reading drinking morning?

5 age difference daughters. Movie night age interferes other activities make age difference closer

Etc

I really enjoy this story. I am having a great day finding some of my favorite stories that are so fun to read!!! I have read this story several times over the years. Thank you for sharing this wonderful story.

A very nice love story. GOOD JOB

A very nice romantic one. Very gentle, even the sex scene at the end. Well done.

Really a good story. Sex scenes were done just right. 5*

Curious to know what Amy does for a living.

Sometimes you need a short but quality story like Second Chance. Well written and entertaining. Thank you for sharing. 5 Stars CC

Very nice story.....a little distracting when Bobbie became Bonnie a few times....but still a very good read....*5*

But really! They didn’t know they were on the same plane together going home after the cruise???

To "Anonymous 09/13/20", on the second page it is explained why they didn't know about a mutual ending to their flights, "She and Kerry had taken a different airlines but as coincidence would have it, we had arrived at the same time."

Got it?

lovely story...however, as is common on this site, author cannot distinguish the difference between the verbs to lie and to lay. aint the same!

likewise, the misuse of between you and i and between you and me. again, those have different meanings, and are not interchangeable. middle school english!

The ending was a bit of a let down. I really can’t understand why the hell they waited 12 months. Anyway I still gave you ⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️

This is at least my third reading of this tale. I really do enjoy it every time I read it.

Amy and Kerry joined Bobbie and I for dinner. what???

grade 9 english...

cute...poor english

author doesn´t know the diff between her and me and her and i

lots of other grammar glitches...

I must be a sucker for semi-cheesy love stories. Loved it, despite the grammar glitches.

I guess I never knew what a whiny bunch of bitches porn addicts are. Poor grammar, kiss my ass!

I'm forced to agree that mechanically this story is terrible. To me there are three key ingredients to a story: plot, character development and dialog. Overall there is the grammar and style which make the story more or less readable and enjoyable. The plot was trite and had no zip at all. The characters were predictable and too good to be true. The dialog was not bad although it certainly sounded like the author hadn't finished high school. The many other comments about the grammar says it all. The "I"/"me" problem that so many authors have is neatly worked out: it's always used incorrectly here. The author doesn't even have the courtesy to proofread his own work and often calls the older girl Bonnie instead of Bobbie. The past tense rules are clearly a mystery to the author. The truth is that if the story is stimulating to the reader's imagination the mechanics can be acknowledged and then overlooked. The mediocre quality of the plot and characters makes the grammar more annoying. 3*

A nice romantic story. Kind of reminds me after meeting my loving second wife she had four lovely kids. We got married and it lasted 40 years before she passed lying next to me. 5 stars for your story

I hate living my life vicariously through wonderful stories like this

guess that about says it all

i can't help but agree with Overcritical on this one. this felt like the McDonald's hamburger of Romance stories, all cookie cutter and plastic-y. i enjoyed it for what it was but i know i'll forget about it in 10 minutes. 3 stars.

Web-Spinner: You spin some great stories (tales).

A very good rebound and love story with bounds of inspiration. 5 shiny stars are in order indeed. Thank you so much for your sharing your talent.

'wildbill'

Hmm, enjoyed, but the ending was abrupt.

Read this story several times and love it everytime I read it

⭐⭐⭐⭐

Love the story. AAAAA+++++

Far too sugary,all that was missing was her telling him the earth moved after he shagged her.

Very touching and a wonderful story. I wish you would have caught the name changes from Bobbie to Bonnie a couple of times.

Great job; thanks for sharing your work!

Another 5 star effort. I don't know if you ever check in on your stuff or even if you are able too,, as every one of your stories were published clear back in 2010. I hope you are well and life is good for you. The two stories I've read say you are deserving of that.

Like cotton candy, a sweet empty treat. Why can’t LIT authors learn the difference between “in and into,” and “literal and figurative.”

Sweet story, but I would have preferred it take over the course of around a year and a half to be engaged.

POV changes too frequent. Felt too much like solving a puzzle to read it.

What can I say that hasn't already been said? Nothing probably, but here goes. First, what happened to this author. He puts out all these stories and says, in his bio, that there will be more. Then nothing. I guess we'll never know but it's certainly a loss. I have to agree with others that the ending was a little too abrupt and the seemingly random idea to "give ourselves a year to move forward." didn't make any sense. Frankly, I'm not even sure what it means. Up to that point though, I loved everything about the story and I could see people thrown to this set of circumstances behaving in this manor. A little sappy, sure. Highly coincidental, and well beyond any statistical probability, absolutely, but so what? Typos, misspellings, wrong words, missing words, tense changes, name changes all that and more, but, again, so what? All, or most, of the above can be found in most stories here. Would it be even better if there were no errors? Sure, but I'd far rather read an error filled story that makes me laugh, makes me genuinely care for the characters, maybe even makes me shed a tear or two, rather than one that is perfectly written but does none of those things for me. Also, I really liked seeing the POV of all the characters. Usually, while you get to read what everyone is doing, you only get to know what one person is thinking. I enjoyed getting into each of their heads. Five stars!

I am amazed that some readers are upset that the story is not tailored to their exact requirements. Are all people like this or is it just those that are so self entitled?

Wonderful well written!

Author silent for last 12 years, so no specific comments. A sweet story. Glad I read it.

fair, some grammar problems...

don't remember...