All Comments on 'The Wedding Planner Ch. 15'

by Just Plain Bob

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Harryin VAHarryin VAover 13 years ago
they are not enough words in the english language to describe how awful this story is

deplorable

execrable

miserable,

woeful

wretched

uncomfortable

suffering

unhappy

despicable

ugly

vile

slimy

unworthy

worthless

hapless

miserable

misfortunate

pathetic

piteous

pitiable

pitiful

poor

KoreavetKoreavetover 13 years ago
Turkey

The turkey is dead.

nyminusnyminusover 13 years ago
You have become a real asshole

Didn't read only voted a 1

DrPlutonDrPlutonover 13 years ago
I gave this a 3/5 because it is finally over!

This story lasted 14 chapters too long. I did like a couple things, but this was mainly repetitive and soulless.

sheridan8000sheridan8000over 13 years ago
what a shit of story

if is for me i will give it a -5

if one of the lovers will tell to someone jack will know.

if i was one of the lovers will tell to the husband only for help another man.

if i was jack i will kill her in a sec.

i hate whores win.

and nobody will married a whore. she will stay in the town ...divorced for fuck

yes to married... no way.

your stupid story is.... the whore is good ... the whores win. and a husband is

a stupid cow.

the story make me sick. :(

13 of the chapters was a waste of time only the patetic revege of a whore.

try not to do again, please.

in my country the revenge is passional not a cold and hearthless thing.

you have a revenge one or twice not will all the town, is stupid.

and after that you get a divorce.... no a stolen everything and more.

well thanks to your fucking country in spain is the same all for women nothing

for man.

she found is goood to be a whore.... that's what you said... a bad ending.

OldStormyOldStormyover 13 years ago
For shit's sake!

Don't know what you have been drinking but I sure as hell never want even a sip of it. That has to be the worst story with the most pathetic ending ever. How it took you 15 bloody chapters to get there is beyond comprehension. You have written so much good stuff then get involved in crap like this. Sorry, but it simply didn't cut the mustard for me and obviously for others as well. A great waste of time.

drpopperdrpopperover 13 years ago
Well it wasn't your best effort

I've liked a lot of your stuff but this really wasn't up to scratch. You took 15 chapters to tell a tale that should have been told in 3 at most. Pretty much all the Characters in the story were irredeemable and one dimensional. Nothing really happened beyond the basic concept and I think you can do a lot better then this and have done much better previously.

The premise was reasonable but it went downhill from there due to the incredibly slow storyline development.

In summary it wasn't really worthy of the usual direct, concise, no nonsense style that JPB readers enjoy.

SqueezeplaySqueezeplayover 13 years ago
Much too long.

JPB, I like most of your stories, but this one went on much too long. If it wasn't for the repetitive scenes, i would have scored it higher.

Bubba43Bubba43over 13 years ago
Sometimes You gotta Sweat out a fever

I think that this story was a nessecary evil for "Bob". He had to get these ideas out of his head. Yes I feel like I helpped a friend not drown in the toliet after a major binge. Sometimes you have to take bad times to enjoy the better times. It is over I put this story down to a bit of bad sushi. The bout of dysentary is over.

Keep writing "Bob".

bazemorelarrybazemorelarryover 13 years ago
wedding Planner

This has to be the worst story you have ever written and then to let the cheating whores and pimps get the upper hand is too much I absolutely hate this ending I think my 5 year old Georgia Bull Dog Moe could come up with a better ending Larry

grogers7grogers7over 13 years ago
Just Plain Bad

plot too short for story

story too long for plot

ending too insignificant for characters

But... I am a JPB fan, so I will keep reading.

Sometimes you get a cold burger and fries at McD's

ChagrinedChagrinedover 13 years ago
I am convinced that JPB is actually Just Plain Bernice!

that is the only reason I can think of why JPB always invariably has the male lead get fucked..:) Once again, as in so many of his stories there is no sympathetic character, no right/wrong (however one defines it), and no satisfaction at the end.

I know why I read them. I just can't for the life of me figure out why she writes them. :)

chytownchytownover 13 years ago
Hey Bob!!!

Is this your turd of the month???????? Keep them coming buddy your stories are good reads even the wacked ones.

terrydavidterrydavidabout 13 years ago
One of the worst efforts on this site!

Not quite as long winded as others "saga epics" but boring as hell.

FD45FD45about 13 years ago
My God!

This...dragged. The pacing was horrible! The story didn't develop, the characters didn't develop. The sex scenes became repetitive.

Way too fucking long and pointless. I came in anticpating something substantial. This wasn't it.

FD45FD45about 13 years ago
Chagrined

I think that inappropriate and wrong.

JPB seems to have three story archs:

1) Revenge Porn. Someone done someone wrong and they are getting back. Ususally it's a guy getting fucked by his wife, but in this case, it's a woman. And it's poorly written. Like the good ones

2) The Cuck story: Same as above but the guy likes it! Not so much for me

3) Everything else. Haven't tried them.

DWornockDWornockalmost 13 years ago
Way too long; too many chapters

And not very logical. She is almost 10 years too old to be that desirable. Now if she was 18 or even 20 she could sell her pussy. At 20 women sell it; at 30 they give it away; and at 40 they buy it. Since she is close to 30, her pussy would not be worth much.

robinhodrobinhodover 12 years ago
I read every word...

every damn single word. Running the London Marathon didn't take as long and was less tiring. I stuck at it out of stupid loyalty to JPB who usually entertains me. It might have got better. It didn't. If it was a song it would be a dirge.

We have a song in football grounds in England. It goes:- "What a load of rubbish, what a load of rubb..." You get the idea.

lonewolf3307lonewolf3307almost 12 years ago
OMG, just when I thought I'd read your worst work!!!

Well, well, well, another female POV and another shitty story. Go figure. At least, this does nothing to disspell the notion that your stories are either great (Dark Trilogy, etc.) or super shitty with very little in between.

semofuncpl3semofuncpl3over 11 years ago
Happy

I didn't read all of this. Quick read of first 2 chapters and then to the last.

OverthefallsOverthefallsover 10 years ago
A true slut wife

It could have been a few chapters shorter. And I find it hard to believe that one cheater (Jake) couldn't recognize another cheater (his wife). And I'm totally convinced that a good PI would have easily dug up evidence of her infidelities as so many people knew about them and the first place he would have looked at was the hotel. With all that said, if I were Jake, I would have set up one of JPB's special revenge dishes and seen to it that she ate it. Although, turning his wife into a total slut that will sooner or later catch a social disease isn't bad revenge in and of itself.

FD45FD45over 10 years ago
Overthefalls

A mere 14 chapters shorter would do.

looking4itlooking4itover 10 years ago

Just love stories where neither character is worth the crap they flush down the toilet.

lance_spearmanlance_spearmanabout 10 years ago
Agree with FD45

Pointless and far too long.

AnonymousAnonymousover 9 years ago
Besides being too long

I find it impossible to believe Jake didn't know about her cheating. She was way too blatant about it. I think he'd hired a PI and when she served him he just smiled. He counter sued using adultery and proceeded to ruin her by suing the Hotel and her lovers. I think he sent copies of her activities to all her family and friends. He headed off to Atlanta with 70% of the assets. She slunk away in disgrace.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 9 years ago
Highly iunlikely

Al most all of JustPlain Bob's stories are well thought out tis one is the exception, it has only one of the 15 chapters that is worth reading. Thirteen of the chapters have an all too familiar theme differing fromone another only slightly

AnonymousAnonymousover 8 years ago
Just ugly people leading ugly lives.

How erotic, exciting, or entertaining this that?

AnonymousAnonymousover 7 years ago
I'm shocked!

Usually your stories are so awesome and this one sucked ass! It was like 13 chapters too fucking long and repetitive as hell!

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 7 years ago
But Jake WAS prepared.

He'd had a PI on her for a long time and had all the evidence he needed. He made a phone call the the Server knocked on the door. She was stunned. The Court order over ruled her and she was forced to leave. In open Court her planning, scheming and cheating were all exposed. She left the marriage with a 80/20% split in Jake's favor and she lost her job. Fate favors the prepared. You couldn't possible think Jake was THAT stupid? Not one of your better efforts Bob.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 7 years ago
Nice Moral of the Story

According to JPB you better don't be unfaithful to your wife for she can turn into a whore, divorce you and force you to pay alimony for life all for a job she quit at the end to become the mistress of another man.

AnonymousAnonymousover 6 years ago
A Total Waste of Time!

WTF,dude?

You've written lots of good stories but,this wasn't one of them! Dragged out,boring and,a totally shitty ending!

Why would you waste your,and our time with this drivel?!

Shitty people doing shitty things to each other throughout!

The best way to end this story would have been to have aqll of the characters gathered together in Dan's office as a terrorist bomb went off,splattering the motherfuckers all over the walls.

Disappointing,to the MAX,Bob. In the future keep 'em short and sweet!

jrphdojrphdoover 5 years ago
Below Your Standard

You write lots of great stories but this isn't one of them. I know Jake was an asshole BUT so was she. How did she end up winning so big? Most women feel entitled, but with no kids involved, the amount she was able to dictate to him in the divorce seems a bit much. I guess it may depend on what state you are in.

26thNC26thNCover 5 years ago
Not goof

All JPB stories aren't created equally. This was a massive waste of time. Not what I was expecting at all.

AnonymousAnonymousover 5 years ago
Not your best

A real letdown. Not even remotely plausible. Loved many of your works, but this one was way too long to be this bad.

AnonymousAnonymousover 5 years ago
Kinda unbelievable

I would think someone like Jake would see what kind of woman his wife was and would have been prepared. Along about chapter 2 he would have hired his own PI and his own attorney and been prepared for her onslaught. I wonder if she would have ended up in jail for lying? Since Jake's PI had the house wired, when she threatened to have him sent to jail for attacking her, when he didn't, that alone is a jailable offense. Bad story Bob.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 5 years ago
And people wonder why

Any mnan with balls would have made her simply disappear. A few concrete blocks and into the ocean or a hole in the ground in the middle of a National Forest. Dumb story.

AnonymousAnonymousover 4 years ago

so why didn't jake find out she was a whore and hit her with a counter suit i think you are a man hater

LakeeriegoatguyLakeeriegoatguyover 4 years ago
WHAT'S HER NAME???

I like the story, but the main character's name is never revealed...that's why I like Bob...

SpenceR7491SpenceR7491almost 4 years ago
Utter crap!

Probably the worst story, in the category, I have ever read. A bunch of nonsense.

AnonymousAnonymousover 3 years ago
Chapter 16: his revenge

Jake smiled- he finally had the ammo he needed to persuade the judge to be on his side,,,,so the Divorce Court Case needs to be reopened and give it a happy ending with the husband winning.

mustelamustelaover 3 years ago
No twist ?

No twist !

secretsalsecretsalalmost 3 years ago

A solid 2 stars, mostly because I'm impressed by the persistence with mediocrity.

Or is it just trolling the readers? Either way, can't fault the commitment. Good job!

Dnvrdave58Dnvrdave58over 2 years ago

After all of that after all of those chapters 1 a terrible ending. You should have spend as much time with the ending as you spent with some of those other chapters a whole chapter designs for the ending would have been much better.

AnonymousAnonymousover 2 years ago

Worse story from just plain bob that I have read. Could have been wrapped up in 3 chapters

servant111servant111over 2 years ago

Absolutely the worst POS I have ever read. Here you have the worst slut I have encountered in fiction REWARDED for her preconceived multiyear betrayal of not only her husband but every single individual that she encounters.

1 star...Absolutely disgusting amoral garbage.. Cannot believe you wasted all the time to dump out 15 episodes of this trash. I guess its the authorial parallel to getting an enema...

AnonymousAnonymousover 2 years ago

ZZzzzz

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 2 years ago

Please never write another story! Loser!

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 2 years ago

i skip from ch 1 jump to last chapter, lol, disappointing

AnonymousAnonymousover 1 year ago

Wow! It appears you are not to well liked. It never seems to amaze me more that the number of negative readers reading this category don't understand What they are reading. Maybe it's because these stories hit to close to home, or they are just stupid. I didn't have a chance to read all the back chapters, and I know I should have, and Will try in the future to do it. Reading the final chapter gave me quite a bit of background though, so I got the general jist of the story. Great story line. Well done. Keep writing.

XYZ

BAnde53507BAnde535077 months ago

I generally love JPB's work, but this series did not appeal to me. The entire tone of the series is just mean. No fun at all. I read up to chapter five and then skipped to the end, hoping for something more palatable. No joy there. Fran's evolution into a super-slut was not fun to witness. In fact, I found no redeeming qualities in any of the characters introduced in this story.

cyendreycyendrey3 months ago

Every, and I mean every character in this story, if it were real, needs to drink the Kool-aid and put the world out of their misery.

mfbridgesmfbridges3 months ago

Didn't like this series. I actually thought there would be an explanation of why Jake was with blond and that wife cheated all that time for no reason. That would have been a better story. This was just a bunch of shit with no surprise. Holly crap, I'm glad I skipped to the last chapter.

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