by PacoFear
awwh man. Thanks for that! You are sooo good at being pleasingly twisted.
excellent buildup......I felt it myself. Tantalizing ! Great writing
I absolutely love the style of the writing. The first person, the way "Karen" notices details, and justthe over all feeling of the story is awesome. Of course, the kink of the story was grand, as well, but I really loved how you desided to tell it. Oh, and I really loved the "primal" sex idea.. Heh.. Great writing.
first i am jealous of the girl on the bed.
then i am jealous of the lucky girl fucking her.
and finally i am green with envy of the
pen and the eyes and the sensitivity of
the guy who wrote it. are you sure you are
a guy, paco?
thanks so much, honey.
You make me want to explore more of my desire for feminine attention, although right now, I can't decide if I want to be Karen or Dee... Very nice read. Thanks!
The jujubee thing definity brings me back to some good high school times. Keep up the good writing. Thanks
That poor girl has been ruined for other lovers. I wonder of she is working her up to something more devious like a giant fucking machine? It would be neat if you chose to add to this some day to expand on it a little. See if her little bum is getting the same treatment? How does she get her own pleasure out of her little submissive? great story but left me with so manny questions and possibilities bouncing around my lil head.
Just to let you know that the scoring has stopped working tonight so here is the full 5!!!
Well done and please keep it up.
Enjoyed this story for several reasons, but the Jujubees were my favorite movie candy. I would suck them and they would usually last through most movies. I still purchase some whenever I am in a Walgreens, the only store that I can find them.
An awesomely creative and well put together short story that stands well on its own, or that could easily lead to more.
Well done.