All Comments on 'Rachel - Banged At Lunch'

i like this and would like to read more.

You write well - the dialogue is great. But drop Jack - we don't really need him in the room with his hot daughter. Bringing in another guy is great - why not get a few more guys in for lunch and give Rachel and Dee the gang fuck they so obviously want. This executive clearly gets off on watching his wife get fucked so give her and dirty Dee the full fucking treatment.