All Comments on 'It's Wrong'

But O. M .G. it FEELS so right !

MMMMM... Loved how wrong it was. It would be wrong to cum in her pussy too. :)

Not so believable... but decent story telling.

You should REALLY give your work a once over before submitting it. "before week", I think you mean "before work"... or perhaps something else. Many of the sentences, throughout, didn't make sense. The grammar was pretty awful.

I've never read your other work, but maybe you should get an editor.

Some readers (like me) can't fail to be distracted by poor grammar, misspellings, and sentences which are nonsense. I couldn't get past the second paragraph. You need an editor/proofreader.

as someone who has done his sister . . when did it become wrong to ????? . . . and the spelling and grammar could use some work

this needs a rewrite and a good editor way to many wrong words,extra words and miss spelled words SHOW SOME PRIDE IN YOUR WORK AND SOME RESPECT FOR THE READERS AND NEVER POST A STORY WITHOUT GOING THROUGH A GOOD EDITOR FIRST

There will always be haters for grammar, sometimes rightfully so, but I enjoyed the short storyline. Not necessarily believable, but sexy nonetheless. Clean it up a bit and it's a real boner inducer.

I fucked my sister a few times when we were in our teens and each time was extremely enjoyable. Where is it written that a horny guy can't fuck his hot horny sister?.

"As much as Megan hated running two miles every morning before week..."

"She was barely aware of what her friend."

the couple of posts above mine are right to an extent...

It does need a little editing, but the instant hard on that was erected in my pants says it was good enough to arouse your readers! Great Start... take some time to rewrite and edit, but don't let the negativity of the few writers above me keep you from writing... haters only make you stronger!

Keep Writing

~Blackstallion21

I enjoyed the hell out of it. I just wish there had been more of it.

The reason for the noticeable bad grammer is twofold . First , you wrote the story quickly and secondly , you didn't read what you wrote slowly enough or you would have corrected it yourself .

She must have been ass-fucked before to take it so easily otherwise she could have dropped her cunt on his face .

Hot description of sex... but that's all it was. No plot or character development.

I'm jealous of all this stories comments lol. I need to get in the incest game apparently. It's a fine stroke story, gives you enough set up to get the incest theme in place then they bang.

it happen to me my sister is always teseing me she is 4 years older she flash her nickers or wisper to me i got no nickers on rub my cock once at breckfast she trip me up got on my chest pining my arms her cunt in my mouth it didnt smell nice mum said leave your brother alone she kept rubing her cunt in my mouth the next day i was in the pool she got in in the nude pull my trunks off and play my cock with her arm around my neckshe lower her self on my cock after that day i was her slave she fuck when it suit her even when we were out withher friends

all the guy at school want to get in my nikers but what i want is my brothers cock i got it whet i ask him if he want to watch me fuck his friend he said no so i said well fuck me he did

the brother should stick his big prick up his sister's little cunt, not her asshole. Up his sister's twat is where a brother's sperm belongs.

His cum should have been shot into her pussy, not her ass.

Yes, it is wrong but there cums a point when you cannot ignore it or stop. Hopefully, they play again and his takes his big fat cock and screws her senseless and makes her beg for him to cum !! Thanks. Very good and hope there is more.

great should have taken you time