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by insidemyheart2005

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AnonymousAnonymousover 13 years ago
P.O.V. shift?

There is a very distinct shift in Point Of View around the middle of the story that makes it difficult to follow. The story begins in 2nd person and then shifts to 1st. At first the counselor is "She" and then becomes "I."

There's enough here to justify a rewrite and resubmission. Good start, but it needs to be cleaned up.

2275jr2275jrover 13 years ago
at last you get what you need to fuck your anal ass

brilliant story reading this was like watch it taking part. so very sexual and horny. love the story a fantasy fetish love the writing

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