All Comments on 'Pool Payments Ch. 12'

not PROLOGUE

unless it's the start of an unwritten story

epilogue

Gawd that was an a-fucking-mazing story ... So ppl get off ur high horse and enjoy it. One mistake over 12 chapters is impressive. So much fun with this story ...

Bring Jill into the mix, even though the summer is over you said she is their some-time babysitter...

I seriously can't believe you idiots would believe the author made a mistake with the epilogue/prologue.

Its pretty obvious he was emphasing the "beginning" not the "end"

Great stories, Only thing that annoyed me was not seeing Jills story, Also the charachter of Greg was kind of pointless. There was no reason for his wife to stray.

one of the best i've read on this site in a very long time....

.. but this line about gave me a seizure:

"Greg was rewarded for working things out, twice I was told, but I wasn't present for either one. I didn't like that, but I was reassured that it was ending, and being allowed to play with Beth was a nice reward for my patience."

Oh please. You fucked his wife for weeks and took her virgin asshole. Until he gets something from your wife that she never gave you no matter how much you wanted it, you have no right to be even slightly pissed at him. Frankly, Greg should be able to fuck all your wife's holes at will anytime he wants... and you still would owe him.

1 star.

Hi I can see that maybe the ending was a bit rushed, but I can understand that maybe you were stuck on how to end the story? I didn't see a problem with how you introduced the others into the special arrangement set up by the wife in trying to kick start her sex life with hubby. It was nice surprise to see the wife was the mastetmind of the pool payments. It looked liked the wife wasn't prepared for how the other girls wanted a bit of the action?

I didn't like the idea of the wife wanting to square up because hubby started fucking others due to them not getting what they wanted from their husbands. The wife could of stopped the arrangement ay any time but she didnt, so she was to blame for hubby fucking the rest.

It would nice to see maybe the wife seducing the 18 yr old next door neighbor and surprising hubby and have him educate her like he did with the others?

I just wanted to say that you should bring Kayla back. I felt like there was chemisty between Alex n Kayla, so it's unethical for her to get the cold shoulder when her husband is a ol' Dude, who can't satisfy her needs as a women.

P.S. You should atleast tell us if Alex got to fuck Kayla's virgin ass. I would appreicate it.

Thanks for another Story I'd like to Star In. You've got the group, might as well go on vacation!

What if Traci wanted another sandwich? She could invite Greg again, but then Alex should get another chance with Lisa. It might even be possible that Traci wants more and invites not only Greg and Lisa, but Andrea and her husband for an enhanced group session (Beth would be invited anyway) ;)

What, no Jill? a teenage slut from next door come on man.

I want to thank you for an incredible adventure. I managed to miss the boat on reading this until now, but am glad I was able to read it as one story. While I agree with the comments that additional stories could be written based on what happened with the Greg, Lisa and Traci encounter or what will happen with Jill, summer is over, and this ending is good as any. Thank you, again!

After Beth's punishment at Traci's hand, I was sure I'd see Alex get his. After all, his betrayal was the deepest. But no. Only rewards for Alex, no matter how thoughtlessly (some would say cruelly) he put his marriage at risk.

It's funny. Whenever one of your stories features a cheating wife, she suffers the most barbaric retribution and earns forgiveness (if at all) only after paying a horrible price, even if her initial wandering were the result of coercion. On the other hand, when a husband cheats and gets found out, it's always PARTY TIME!!

Can you, perhaps, explain this in terms those of us with a sense of fairness (or who actually LIKE women) might understand? Thanks!

P.S.: Near the end of the story, you misspelled 'EPILOGUE'.

Was hoping for some jill action.. :( other than that great story and I'm currently making my way through all of your work and its quite a ride. Keep up the good work!

...you really needed to get Jill in on that. 4 and 3/4 stars for sure, but Jill would have taken it to 5. Still a hot piece, just could have been volcanic adding her to the mix.

Loved it!

It would have been nice to see Jill work into the story somewhere. Otherwise, though, quite a tale.

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Guess theres no chance of rewritting the last two chapters to remove the craptastic plot involving greg. Completely wrecked the first 10 chapters with that. Im actually disappointed I read this now because you added that.

Great story overall, as are many of your stories. Definitely liked that you did a summary/wrap-up at the end to put closure on some of the characters. Better than just leaving it open ended.

As others have mentioned, would love to hear about something with Jill.

Thanks for sharing your writings with us.

Thanks for the story

The last parts involving Greg ruined the story for me, if I ever reread this I will ignore the last chapters and imagine something very different, something not involving wiveswapping to make things 'fair'.

JdoyleTex here:

Great story and good conclusion. I wish I had the

same response at my pool😎

Keep writing, please.

Seriously, the wife pushes the hot woman onto him and then gets upset when he follows his dick? Plot failure. Plus the crap with Greg? So the Husband turns into a total wuss and doesn't even blink at the fact it was all instigated by his wife to begin with?

I hate when a good plotline falls to pieces because the characters actions and reactions are suddenly not true to previous form.

this was a fun story though alex was an ass hole. woman tells him not to cum in her as she is not protected and he dumps 5 or 6 loads in her. alex gets all he can out of 3 married women and he gets mad because greg wants his wife. wish greg beat the shit out of him.

Ch. 11-12 ruined a relatively good story. Greg was a horrible addition. Love that you never finish your stories, and the one that you do you end real poorly.

The way I see it, Traci has been fucking Greg long before the story started... The wife knew about her husband's previous fling and encouraged it due to a guilty conscience, and got pissed when he ended up getting more than her... Great story...60 stars...

'Nuff said.

It would have been nice to find out what happened when Andrea got pregnant -- a pretty likely result after the number of times Alex came came in her unprotected. Maybe Andrea's husband knew all about her escapades, and was happy with it because he was sterile and really wanted a child.

I really loved the series and am very sad to see it end. But I think there are some loose ends. Why did they inform Lisa's husband about the affair but left out Beth's and Kayla's husbands? This was never explained.

"See what you started, Alex?" Traci started everything, everything that happened was her fault, and she willingly both brought other women to her husband and ran off to sleep with other men, and SHE is calling Alex the troublemaker? What a total bitch.

Honestly reading these last 2 chapters has just been disgusting, seeing traci get away with everything without any punishment or consequences.

The epilogue should have ended with Alex kicking Traci out and inviting Jill over.

The last two chapters were a different story. I didn't feel like making Alex into a cuck fit with the first 10 chapters. If you wanted to go that route, you shouldn't have made it his wife's plan to put Beth with her Alex. That way, she could have demanded that Alex allow the cucking to even the score. I rated the other chapters as a five, but I did not rate this one, mainly because I just had a difference of opinion and chapters 11 and 12 were well written, even if they were out of place, IMHO.

Great story! But that was just cruel to leave Jill hanging like a dangling participle. Still, fun story.

Poor Jill.

Fine wrap up. It was a bit jarring when it took a left turn in the last chapter, but this one evened it out. Traci is still off putting, her idea and then acts wronged. Almost wonder if she set it up to cover her own infidelity, ala another Alex in Blackmail Tales. Again for all the complainers out there this story was wired for the wife to be behind everything from the beginning, remember when Beth was peaking in on Alex and his wife and Traci mentions Beth. And this was very early on.

As for Greg getting involved it was surprising. But the harem hoarders be damned. You cannot properly double stuff a woman, or split roast her, or get a third fella involved and fill all three of her fuck holes at once, if only one guy with a mythical dick that never deflates or needs time to recover, gets them all.

This is not the worst story on Literotica, I suppose. It is a serious contender though. A silly conceit, badly written

As I was getting to the end I was thinking about the girl next door and you said it right at the end….

Are you going to write it?

I didn't like all the cheating. It felt cheap and tawdry, not sexy or hot. When there is knowledge and approval by rightful partners, that changes things.

Oh yes, Jill! Good to get the loose ends tied up. Thanks for a great series.

Kár volt az egész sorozatot elrontani a KURVA Traci-nek adni a kezdeményezést ls elégtételt. Sajnálom, így nem bíztos, hogy lefordítom.

Absolutely loved this, thanks so much for the awesome writing!

Good job, thanks for sharing your work!

bad ending. ok he cheated but her doing the same in front of him does not mean he would be ok with it. he was angry when his wife and greg went inside because he just thought it was going to happen. now here he is ok with it ? bull. 2 wrongs do not make a right and he should have walked out and started packing the moment his wife pulled greg to her and told her they were done. she started it all ,she does not deserve to dictate how it ends.

12 wonderful chapters. I will be back,

to read them again. Thank you for all of your writing.

Fantastic story wish there was more