Would have been better to have combined both these chapters together for chapter one. Great potential though. Keep it up.
This chapter was under 800 words, that's just too short for anyone to really know what the story is going to become, and what it will eventually be when it's completed.
nice and short fuck story keep it going thanks
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Again too quick
Would have been better to have combined both these chapters together for chapter one.
Great potential though.
Keep it up.
It's a good storyline but the chapters are way too short
This chapter was under 800 words, that's just too short for anyone to really know what the story is going to become, and what it will eventually be when it's completed.
sweet
nice and short fuck story keep it going thanks
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