This is a great story, I look forward to the next part
I think the plot thickens and the next few chapters should be even more interesting.
A literate, well developed plot with interesting characters. My appreciation to the author, although the reading of this tale in small snippets tends to be a bit frustrating.
i see a lot of deceit and manipulation on both sides here, and nothing shows about how she has been changed. they kept saying how generous & giving she was in other chapters, but i have not see any of that in this one.
her attitude may have changed a little, but her actions appear the same as the selfish rich bitch she was/is. the driver may have a new attitude/intent, but she is still driving down the same road.
hopefully this is just about how habits carry over, and soon we will see real actions that reflect her new character.
i see this disconnect with so many authors who write their characters description one way, and then forget to show what is described in the actions of their characters lives in the story.
To the anon below you have to realize that through this entire chapter she was under the supervision and scutiny of her parents. A facade would he required for them not believe anything is amiss. Even if she has changed she can't allow her parents to see it until she's ready to unveil it herself. If she was I'm sure drastic measures by her parents would be taken. I.E. them removing her from school or some such. Which we may see anyways in a later chapter
We our seeing more of her inner life and the external image may be another, though I think if she showed herself to be more caring and compassionate that would surely raise a red flag with her family!
The first chapters were amazing, but I have to say you seem to have either lost direction or you are slowly steering towards something, but in all honesty, taking too long to get there. The characters are wonderful, but the last 8 or so chapters have added nothing to the story as a whole, its almost like reading a diary of someone's life who is, in all honesty, not that interesting. I'm sorry to be critical, but I think you might do well to wrap it up soon. But as I said, the beginning was excellent.
...When the entire focus of a relationship is what he can do for me, it isn't possible to develop feelings for someone who is, essentially, a tool....
Harry. I know that you are telling us that this line is the beginning of many a cheating wives stories...and of course you are right.
loved this chapter - particularly the last paragraph! *still smiling
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