All Comments on 'Taking my Mother'

I hope you fuck her up the arse hard and proper as it should be. Don't give her a chance to enjoy it, rape her and make it hurt.

I hope that this son enslaved completely his mother. Please more !

Interesting idea but good god man, have you never heard of a period? Trust me, they help break up a 17 line paragraph with 34 commas and only 1 question mark. This in turn will make for a much easier read.

Now tell us the rest of the story.

Will she become his submissive, or his wife?

I hope that the author will have the son show his mother just how sweet it will be with him as her man, and how he will fulfill all of her needs.

Thanks for the good story

I realize it might be your style, but perhaps putting "quotation marks" around spoken words might let the reader follow who is saying what and when. As it was, I had a difficult time figuring out if a line broken by commas was spoken or just Jimmy's narrative thoughts.

The grammar, diction, and continuity of the story was not, umm, first rate. Sometimes that is on purpose, to make it sound like the less than erudite narrator. In this case, I think, this was the best that the author could do. The story was derivative, i.e. not that original either...

I love a good sex story and am a certified sucker for mother-son stories.

The story was readable, obviously British English, but the couple and coupling you depict has some major issues, to wit:

Mum is either going through a depressive episode and/or a masochistic submissive with boundary issues you could drive an articulated lorry through broadside. The way you write her is that she's a breathing fuck doll for sonny to get off with, not a woman choosing to play of her own accord. Mum needs psychiatric help, not sonny to "take charge".

The son, wow. I love a good wank. Tall, hunky, popular, nice guy for a young lad, who's fed up with mum not performing up to standard, so he rapes her. WTFH? Sure, IRL, people with other options do stupid shit all the time, sometimes just because they feel they can without consequences.

He's a sick, arrogant puppy cruising for a bruising.

If he tried this with any of his dates, his balls would be kicked up past his ears and up on charges. Since he's "popular", he might get away with a date rape or so, but word gets around and the play he gets will dry up in a hurry, unless he's everyone's bookie/drug connect/loanshark.

I know it's an incest story, where busting the normal boundaries is par for the course, but this goes in a very grim direction. It doesn't always have to be a Harlequin romance, but hey, a little love and mutual consideration are what make life livable. This story depicts a slide into very dark territory.

This was my first attempt, I can spell with the best, but the grammatical errors are obvious, I will try harder next time, but I will continue this story and develope it okay ?

great story.

Is exactly what this is. Why is it that all teenagers have 8" cocks? How about some realism here!

good story I liked it!

Well deserved 5 start. Onto chapter 2!

I'll hold my vote on this one until the next chapter to see which way you go with it

...other than it was not for me. Firstly 'IM' is not a word, and the spoken word should always be written inside, 66 and 99. " " but what I read was pretty poor. Sorry.

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ID

Apparently mother just needed a bit of structure to her life and a firm hand to administer it. A great start to what promises to be a well thought out and written story. I look forward to reading the next chapter. As this is my first foray into your writing and the first story you posted here I have added you to my favorites list. I appreciate your and your Muse's imagination (memories?) and abilities to bring it to your story. Thank you for sharing your vision and talents.

I like Dom/sub relationships. In this story, the mother's problem could have been manic depression, depression, ADHD orendocrine disorder. At best, the son got extremely lucky because he did not push her over the edge. Since it has been only his mother and him since the age of 14, I am surprised by the lack of communication between the two. Likewise, the author has made no mention of who and how income was earned.