All Comments on 'Unintentional Lolita'

really well written.... super hot too. please post more!

lovely stuff.

That was really a good story. It was told so naturally. It was erotic and sexy in it's own way. You definitely have to continue with it. Again, excellent in the way you wrote it.

Nice easy read with tons of potential.......for hot times with Kelly; for disaster with Billie; maybe even for a 3-some with an understanding and/or encouraging wife. More please!

I need more, I'm addicted! Please hurry, try to get a little more in one story, you're torturing me! Aaauuuggghh! I loved it, will the older sister get involved, jealousy, and all?

I sincerely hope there will be more to follow. You have the foundation of a great father/daughter series here because their relationship seems natural and, dare I say it, wholesome. It's genuinely loving, which sometimes doesn't come through in these stories, and it provides a great backdrop for the action.

That said, if you can describe kissing with such detail that it would leave me wet and panting, I truly am looking forward to the effects of reading a story where there is more sexual activity. Well done!

rubbish with nothing but suggestion

you obviously haven't got a bloody clue about teasing.

I pity anyone you get involved with.

I liked this story.

Well done on an opening chapter. Please do continue your story! Ignore the hater, he/she is/was obviously looking for a quick bit of porn. What you gave us was erotica. Keep up the good work.

Regards,

1SB

I Deffinately would like to hear More of how "us"

Men are truely Dogs.

This was an awesome start and I would love to read more about this, so please continue.

That was awesome. I hope your working on more to this!!

Thanks!

Maybe mummy knows and wants daddy to teach daughter some more things than just kissing.

I get the point about getting inspiration in another vein, but... *nudge nudge*

Tease! LOL

~Sarabell

Uh, please tell me you're continuing this!!!! OMG its fucking hot.

I can't wait for part 2

You have to.

a lot of interest from me, and others seem to have spoke up about theirs as well.

This is well paced. I like being teased and hope that the story will go on. The centerpiece of the story or at least the event that gets it in motion is a favorite of mine, that isn't seen often enough here, kissing lessons.

More times than not I do not want the comments of the author to taint the flow of the story.

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I would prefer to see a separator line put between the comments and the story.

HELL YEA, THERE IS SOME INTEREST

Please continue - it is shaping up to be a good story.

Very good story looking forwrd to reading part 2.

Are you kidding? Interest! Please write more, very very sexy!

please write more. i mean, seriously, we've been waiting forever now.

... and very real. I like reality. The best lovers are those that respect each other

Very believable. More please.

Sometimes dogs are the best way for girls, um, young women to learn how to love, and to give their own true love to all the, er, dogs out there.

We're definitely all dogs, but that covers a lot of ground in terms of temperament and behavior. For example, I'd compare myself to a laborador retriever: friendly, touchy-feely, loving, loyal, relatively intelligent, good with children, and protective. :P

I'd liken my immediate boss at work to a doberman. And I would liken my boss's boss to a chihuahua. ^_^

Yeah, I'm a dog too, and I really like your story, and the usual comment about how I wish it was many more pages long, and goes on to a mutual understanding (climax). But I do enjoy a well-written story and this happens to be one. Thank You.

Wow and wow again. So hot and sexy. Sweet too. Thank you. Loved it.

I like how you use "he" to try and throw the scent! You can not begin to understand how your simplistic and moronicly broad statment, on men all being "Mutts" ergo "Dogs" is a misguided and jilted view that shows how thoughtful a person you are not. I truly pity your for your uninteligent hateful, small minded and pathetic views on men. Grow up ! I'm a man and I am not anything like your statments on the nature of "All" men. Open up the shutters and grow a mind before you make statments that show how stupid you are!

Yep, that's how you get eyes opened!

He does it again. The story continues excellently and then he stops. SOB never finishes any of his series. Finish them or stop writing.

I find that's the best part of the incest story, the forbidden reluctance. The kissing premise was also a lot more believable that many of the other Father/Daughter stories floating around. Well done.

I loved this so much ,I would love to read more lots more . Bjxo

Definitely want to see the next chapter of this

Good start, 5 stars.

Genuinely realistic, impressively human-sounding dialogue and progression of thought processes of how an actual dad would think and talk. You could/should think about how you might make a successful living writing mainstream stories, articles or screenplay.

Side-to-side is SHAKING YOUR HEAD.

UP & DOWN is NODDING your head.

You know...NODDING OFF TO SLEEP?

POOR WRITING.